As much as I like the premise, I just couldn't enjoy this due to the distracting amount of mechanical errors throughout. I feel like you could have made this a lot better if you'd slowed down the pacing a bit and spent a bit more time proofreading.
I love the idea, but I don't get why you said her breasts and her clit. It's kind of strange to say the clit is a particular body part to label exposed.
As much as I like the premise, I just couldn't enjoy this due to the distracting amount of mechanical errors throughout. I feel like you could have made this a lot better if you'd slowed down the pacing a bit and spent a bit more time proofreading.
What's next, it'll inject a tentacle seed for Fluttershy to keep and raised?
An admirable attempt, but peppered with things that aren't physically possible.
Also, many times the word "through" is used when it should have been "across," "over," "onto," "to," or other similar words.
I love the idea, but I don't get why you said her breasts and her clit. It's kind of strange to say the clit is a particular body part to label exposed.
If I could post links I'd post a link to Itsy Bitsy Teeny Weeny Yellow Polkadot Bikini
Both the original by Hyland & the parody by Homer + Jethro