nice work

Great story so far, may I ask what monsters the other main characters are?

Also may I what are the origins of monsters in your world?

I’m doing that in the next chapter.

Not bad so far

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With Spike what will his relationship with Celestia and Luna be in this world, something like mother/son?

Given that Twlight bite Spike does she know he is human?

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No, he has a mom and dad in this story

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Has the events of the Cadence and Shining Armour wedding happen and if so what is the relationship between Cedance and Chrisyess in this world?

May I ask what strange customs and traditions there are at the school, is there a mortal Kombat ring for Students who do want to flight?

“Rule Five: boys shouldn’t go to the girls’ dorm and girls shouldn’t go to the boys’ dorm. We don’t want any... incidents happening here,” Cheerilee informed the class. All the males in the room looked disappointed while the girls all simply blushed. “Unless if it’s for something related to some kind of sleepover or a hangover, that’s also permitted, but if you behave yourselves.”

They are going to abuse that loophole of sleepovers or hangovers damnit Celestia

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Yes I think they will find loopholes.

May I ask what unquie rules and traditions that the monster world world could have in your mind?
In my mind maybe monsters are ranked in a ladder regarding power/social standing, monsters see there monster from as there real self.

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No none of those happened. And they’re also rivals but also friends because of their jobs of the school faculty.

And it’s actually like a school of friendship or Canterlot high type of school

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What she/he said

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Actually their monsters but in their human forms but they only transform whenever they feel like it or if it’s depending on the school code.

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Got it

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How does magic work in your world?

At what point in her character is Sunset, hero, bully , in-between?

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What monsters do you see the others main characters as in this world?
In my mind I could see Rarity as a siren, Applejack as an Ent, Pinkie as a werewolf, Fluttershy as a Fairly, Rainbow as a thunder bird, Celestia and Luna as vampires (to make her similar to Twilight as in the show) and Cadance as a Succubus (to make her a rival of chrysalis and maybe a vampire sub type)

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I’m still working on it, and magic is actually by students who are witches or not

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Would there be a Dark Lord, evil emperor in this world like Voldemort or darth sidious?

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Do monsters like with Pure Blood, Half Blood and Muggle Born in harry potter divvied up there race into different ranks or do they all see themselves as monsters?

What would Spike's families reaction be toward the fact he is at a school for monsters?

It’s all based off of the anime Rosario + Vampire and that’s final

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No to all of them.

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Ok, thank you for providing that information.

In terms of power scaling where would Celestia, Luna and chrysalis be in regards to all other monsters, would they be in the top 1% or something else?

Given chrysalis actions towards Spike what is the schools overall outlook towards relationships regarding students and other students and everyone else, do they allow them 100% if they are real and truce or something else?

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Don’t forget Cadance. She’s the Dean of the school.

And they’re actually the heads of the school.

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Yes, thank you for reminding me about her, when I meant power ranking I meant in terms of all monsters everywhere are they the leaders of monsters of there types of monsters who took up jobs at the school?

How will there Celestia, Luna, chrysalis and Cadence's powers and abilities be handled in the story, will Luna be in charge of punishments and her dream walking helps her in that tasks along with helping with bad dreams?

Given that monsters in this would eat humans did at some point in the past Celestia, Luna, chrysalis and Cadence do as well and if so what changed?

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No nothing like that. They’re all sleeping like regular monsters disguised as human beings, no magical dream walking, no alicorn magic, no nothing.

And the only punishments in the school are expulsions, suspensions or detentions. And what changed is monster and human coexistence to survive, like how Ms. Cheerilee explained.

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How does there human form work, does it limit there powers and while in it give them the same weakness as humans until they change into there real forms?

How do monsters turning humans into monsters work in this work?

Vampires need human blood, and other monsters need humans, how does that work in the school?

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No, but I don’t know how it works in the anime, but I really don’t know, so can you please stop asking me?

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Very well, I am looking forward to your next chapter.

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I’m not trying to be a jerk or anything, but it’s really stressing me out if you keep asking me repeatedly

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That was not my intent, I am sorry if that was the result of my actions. I hope you are alright.

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I’m fine

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter

Forgive me for sounding suspicious, but I’m working on a story that is eerily similar to this one. In fact, the description is REALLY similar to mine. Even the title looks similar. I’m curious if you know of my work?

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I know, but I assure you that this one is slightly different from yours but I will use other monsters than the ones you’re using.

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I should hope so. I’m sorry for sounding suspicious, but I just wanted to check. If someone DID try to copy one of MY stories and try to pass it off as their own, I swear to God, I am going to birth an entire cactus out of my asshole.

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Okay, but it’s fine

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Good luck in your future endeavors! ;)

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Will do

Great start. I have one criticism and it is not just to this or other fan stories but also it's source material that these fan stories are based off of and it is as follows:

Why weren't ALL the teachers informed of Spike/Tscune being 100% human from the get go and all were sworn to keep it secret as well as keep an eye on him for his own safety. If all the teachers were made aware half the problems he'd have would've been avoided. Such as (i'm going into slight spoilers here sorry i don't know how to redacted my spoilers on my xbox where 'm reading and responding with): A sadistic lamia math obsessed teacher, the swim club of murderous Sirens, a mind controlling Succubus (though not that annoyed with this one because of the outcome), a bloodsucking vampire (again not as annoyed because outcome and plot reasons), a human hating "disciplinary" committee, a hateful younger sibling (again not annoyed enough because outcome and plot), and finally damn neared killed almost everyday.

If the teachers were all made aware of his humanity instead of just the principals half of these thing could've been prevented and his school life would be that more safe for him while still following the story. He still have to adapt because teachers can't always be there to help but he still would be safer none the less.

This is my only criticism i have and it was mostly to the source material. I'm curious to what you have in store for this story and looking forward to it.

I'm having doubts to continue.
Not because the story is bad. It's because it's literally Rosario+Vampire but in written form. I know you mentioned that this story is inspired by it, but please, make more changes. Be more creative with your choices! I know you can do it.

Right now, this is like reading what happens in the anime/manga but with different 'skins'. Nothing more.

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