11195188 I’m sorry you feel that way. I’m using multiple tools to help. But I rarely use Google Translate. I hope in future chapters it will be better.
I'm not certain if this is intentional, but Celestia's confesion feels completely out of left field. Because the story has so far been told from Anon's perspective, it feels like a lot of context is missing. Like I wasn't even certain if Anon knew or was friends with the Main 6 at the start of this fic. Like it was clear that he knew about them and this chapter confirmed that they found him. But when he went to get his suit it sounded so... profesional? Business? I don't know, the interactions feel off.
“THE FUCK I’M DOING HERE, THEN!?” BRAIN, YOU HAVE DISAPPOINTED ME AGAIN!” Anon thought as he acknowledged that now he is a prey to be hunted by these mares.
Normally, thoughts are represented by ' ' if you use " " unless you specifically state its a thought everyone will assume your character is speaking
What why was it published 8 hours ago but has all those dates for the chapters
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Problems with submission queue. I wanted to post 5 at the same time. But something went wrong, and I needed to mail the moderator.
The grammar is very confusing in this fic. It reads like something out of google translate
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I’m sorry you feel that way. I’m using multiple tools to help. But I rarely use Google Translate. I hope in future chapters it will be better.
I'm not certain if this is intentional, but Celestia's confesion feels completely out of left field. Because the story has so far been told from Anon's perspective, it feels like a lot of context is missing. Like I wasn't even certain if Anon knew or was friends with the Main 6 at the start of this fic. Like it was clear that he knew about them and this chapter confirmed that they found him. But when he went to get his suit it sounded so... profesional? Business? I don't know, the interactions feel off.
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I know what you mean. The next chapters focus on what has been going on before the gala. Hope this helps.
Normally, thoughts are represented by ' ' if you use " " unless you specifically state its a thought everyone will assume your character is speaking