Seems interesting,grammar is a little messy but still clear

if the word got out he was banging for 6 hours, why didn't derpy act weird or anything?

Most of the issues with this was the grammar. Other than that it’s really funny so far! May I suggest grammerly? It usually catches anything small the writer might miss.

And he activated murphys law

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