It still has a few of my original scenes in it, but from the second tiny chappy has changed enough from the original to be considered a remake. I'll be keeping an eye on this to see how it turns out.
Just something I noticed. You have this one series twice.
"I'm going into the shower now." Celestia said slyly, looking back at Chris as he turned around and cocked an eyebrow.
"Try not to slip." He replied amusedly.
Celestia rolled her eyes at him and walked into her royal bathroom. Chris just about caught a slightly disappointed look on her face before the door shut and left him alone in the room.
"I'm going into the shower now." Celestia said slyly, looking back at Chris as he turned around and cocked an eyebrow.
"Try not to slip." He replied amusedly.
Celestia rolled her eyes at him and walked into her royal bathroom. Chris just about caught a slightly disappointed look on her face before the door shut and left him alone in the room.
Well this is an interesting start.
It still has a few of my original scenes in it, but from the second tiny chappy has changed enough from the original to be considered a remake. I'll be keeping an eye on this to see how it turns out.
Best of luck my friend.
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Thanks so much Zammy.
You inspired me to become a writer.
If anything, the remake of this story is a tribute to you as my writer mentor.
Just something I noticed. You have this one series twice.
"I'm going into the shower now." Celestia said slyly, looking back at Chris as he turned around and cocked an eyebrow.
"Try not to slip." He replied amusedly.
Celestia rolled her eyes at him and walked into her royal bathroom. Chris just about caught a slightly disappointed look on her face before the door shut and left him alone in the room.
"I'm going into the shower now." Celestia said slyly, looking back at Chris as he turned around and cocked an eyebrow.
"Try not to slip." He replied amusedly.
Celestia rolled her eyes at him and walked into her royal bathroom. Chris just about caught a slightly disappointed look on her face before the door shut and left him alone in the room.
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I've corrected it.