She appeared as if from nowhere, a dark shadowed figure full of dread magic. Shining Armor and Cadance scowled with apprehension, but her attention was on the _other_ shadowy overlord that stood before her. Only one could remain.
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Quite a lot have been learned a lot...
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Going trough pregnancy for both partners? Sounds... Educational... Also quite the onces in a lifetime opportunity...
I think Umbra deservs a loving Herd. Shining as well.
I totally Ship Umbra with the Royals ♡
That's... it? The situation with Shifting is explained, Cadence suggests that maybe she wasn't the right one, Umbra can't quite decide if that is or isn't correct, and that's it?
I know the focus of the story isn't the relationship between Umbra and Shifting, but talk about changing gear without the clutch....
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You lost me. Umbra feels awful, and hasn't been subtle about this, at all.
Cadance tried to comfort the miserable-looking Umbra.
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She SAYS she's feeling awful, but as a reader it doesn't seem like those feelings have any weight to them. She puts them aside almost immediately, and is perky and cheerful again. I'm not expecting her to wallow, but if this were a real person that I was talking to, I'd conclude that they're brushing aside their own feelings and not addressing them.
She moves on and moves past so quickly and easily, that I begin to question how deeply she cared in the first place.
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As Psychokrusk said themselves, she distracts herself with things what need doing.
Every single time, so far, she has had a chance to think, she has been visibly miserable. I clearly fail as a writer. I don't know how to demonstrate this harder.
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The issue isn't Umbra; it's very clear that she distracts herself with work. The issue is that there was a very serious topic being discussed, and Shining brought up something completely unrelated and changed the topic. If he did that to try and bring up her mood, that's fine; it just happened very suddenly and threw me off.
So far, it looks like only two out of the hundreds or even thousands of people reading this have an issue, so the problem is very likely with us, rather than anything in the narrative.
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What would be the 'proper' reaction? They aren't close to the batty-ling. They care about Umbra and Umbra is sad. They say a thing to fluff up Umbra, that isn't super thoughtful on the battyling. They could doubledown on how much Umbra messed up, but she seems to have that market cornered already.
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I don't know; I'm not them. All I know is what my expectations were, and in this case, I have only myself to blame if they were not met.
So we now know that Shining/Gleaming is going to be a mother before Twilight is. I'm sure their parents will have some interesting things to say to both parties...
Got caught up with the story and it's entertaining but I'll say 3 things that could be improved upon imo: situations and consequences do appear to go by to fast (pacing a bit fast or having the solution at hand), hard to tell when time has pasted with out distinct indicators, and details seems to be forgotten over time and thus reused or ignored (such as the same two ponies talking about a recent event a few chapters different).
Overall I'm enjoying it with the chapter sizes fitting well for a slice of life daily fix.
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I would expect more shock and admonishment for starters...
Even if they care for her, she did one of the worst things a person can do in a non-abuse relationship. Their reaction did feel muted, especially as cheating is an aspec that is antithesis of what Cadence is meant to represent.