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Hope that the scenes are different enough to not cause issues with the episodes.
Nope.
I will say even with the break neck pacing you can still convey a lot in say a single or two or even three paragraphs. Or even a sentence...at that point thats almost pure style. I have read micro storys that are literally a sentence. They great!
The scene with queen alara? Was well certainly not poor. The dialogue was weirdly jarring and fine? Like it needed was flow of things...yes? Environmental story trlling could have lended nicely to the scene.
Further, you could even argue you dont need the descriptions. But there could been more life in the dialogue and a very sparce set of descripitions...honestlyI am thinking that the storm outside the crystal empire was the dwarves doing. How does Sombra fit in? I wonder?
Also...I kind of wish for a little more...regret? I.e Queen Alara. Like I can infer a lot because I know the property? Crystal empire and such...The only reason I bring it is if you ever want to do more original work...it will be more difficult to relie on that knowledge...To be honest as I am writing my novels thats one of things I realized. Fanfiction is amazing and useful...it also can stunt your growth if you dont reflect on those questions that come apparent in orginal or more descriptive writing. I think?
This all subjective? Have you read barrasca? That is literally entirely dialogue driven (spicy stuff) so take what I say not as gospel but as sort...does it apply to what you want to do? Consider if you will the following thought...
What if you can lean into the way you naturally tend to write? To be able to tell storys the way only you could tell? But also honing your style to 8th degree? Hmm?
I am excited for this...I curious if their are any artifacts that abound. I think stressing this world has been impacted by dwarven presenece? Mind, other then say their actual presenece and the crystal heart?
Just in the realm of fleshing out the world you have created and making it feel more real.
plot that will be used later...yes.
It just occured to me...like no one was raising the sun before...why does it need to be raised? And will you be making Celestia and Luna God's in this verse?
I don't like this queen! Firstly, the Dwarves probably SAVE their butts from a unknown threat. Possibly the Umbrums or something?! But, I guess she is "too pacifist" for her own good. And being a ungrateful bitch against her damn savers????!!!!
And the next thing? The recent dwarf king ( King Ardun ) actually made the Crystal Heart. ( And also possibly help the Crystal Ponies craft crystal, and their home empire. So, they should be SUPER grateful, and NOT be asses like that bitch queen! )
And as a good gesture, gave it to the ungrateful queen that would help them greatly in the future. And now this queen has the AUDACITY to say "thank you, and have a safe journey". Without feeling being regretful for what she said?! Or being very cruel with her stupid "Thousand Years Banishment/Exile" from the Crystal Empire?! ( But, it's redundant anyway. Because it's already 2,500 years later in the present day, Bitch!!!!! :-P )
I'm glad she is not a queen for that long, I guess. I know that sounds cruel. But, I HATE her rude attitude against the Dwarves that saved her ass and her subjects?!
Anyway, we are starting into the very beginning of Season 1, dang! We have a long, long way to go through the Eight Seasons ( Not a "huge" fan to Season 9. ), Movie, and Spin-Offs. Because, the Dwarves will change EVERYTHING!!!!!!!