In an effort to learn more about the effects of Equestrian magic on the human world, Sunset Shimmer begins recording accounts of inexplicable events, but soon learns that she may have bitten off more than she can chew...
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Trying to scare Starlight back through the mirror portal seems like the exact opposite of what should be done… but on the other hand, it’s Starlight. Subtle hints don’t exactly work with her. Let’s just hope this isn’t as much of a mistake as I fear.
...Oh.
Eeeyup
Well, I mean, you're not wrong...
I should've known: if it's new information, The Eye will always want to know.
Why hello there, Ray! Who's a good lizzie?
OoOoOoOo, who gets what color?
There's a reason why Knowing found its place as a Fear: sometimes, you just don't want to know something. I can attest to that
You forgot to end this with 'Statement begins'.
Ooooooooooooh, this is gonna suck >_<
Red flags!
MAJOR red flags!
Is this The Extinction? Or The Dark? Are they both teaming up to try something new?
F-k me.
This. This right here. This is the perfect ending for a short horror story. Well done!
Huh. I didn't really get Buried vibes with this one. “shrugs”
….you're sending a fledgling investigator after someone marked by The Slaughter? Yeeeeeah. No. Just no.
On the other hand, really good chapter. I was legit disturbed for the whole bunker portion. I'm glad Raspberry got away, but her poor Dad... Eager - and a bit anxious - to see how Starlight's first assignment goes.
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Basing this answer on how I color-code the chapter headings in my main doc:
Buried - Brown
Corruption - Light Green
Dark - Black (obviously)
Desolation - Orange
End - Light Grey
Extinction - Mustard
Eye - Green
Flesh - Light Pink
Hunt - Maroon
Lonely - Light Blue
Slaughter - Red
Spiral - Bright Yellow
Stranger - Hot Pink
Vast - Dark Blue
Web - Lilac
I'm a bit surprised that the Buried vibes weren't clearer -- food insecurity and feeling trapped were major parts of what I tried to focus on when writing. On the other hand, I didn't really consider the Dark to be massively present here, so I guess that just goes to show that the same story can have different facets of horror for different people.
Thanks for the catch on 'statement begins', too!
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Look at all the spoopy colors!
And you're welcome
Maybe I was just focusing on the wrong aspects of the bunker. It didn't feel as claustrophobic as it did foreboding and grim. And only one lightbulb. And shadows that seemed to move on their own. But that's just me. I think you're doing great :)
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What about online, for free?
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I think all the full episodes are also up on YouTube, yes.
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To be fair, if I remember correctly from Magnus Archives, a lot of the Fears had overlap. Traits that could be interchanged between the lot of them. So, I don't think its your writing in this case (which is fantastic as always), I think its more that the fears by default are designed for a lot of similarity.