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Since I'm extremely new to the Fallout Equestria sub-fandom, I've noticed that incomplete stories are the norm, as are longer times between updates. Despite this, I'm leaning towards this possibly just being me. What I've noticed is that the hint of an overarching plot that was teased in the prologue appears to have retreated for a bit. I'm sure it became something of a cliche, but the opening chapter of Kkat's story starting with the character having a clear long-term objective that strengthened over the course of the first few chapters really gave a strong sense of direction to the reader as well. The prologue is key in showing something about Wildcard that we know is going to impact him now and in the future, but the current sense of directionlessness doesn't come across as entirely intentional. For stories rooted in action and lore-heavy exploration, that could pose a problem if it drags out too much or isn't eventually shown to be intentional and have some kind of payoff for why the information was withheld during your story's initial chapters.
That said, the ability you have to build an atmosphere and keep the characters consistently engaged is really notable. I definitely want to read more and see where this will be heading. (Also, I'm surprised at how few groups this is in. No wonder it is so underrated.)
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I'd certainly want to see what those might be.
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Ah yeah, very few stories can pull off a constant onslaught of 30k chapters and still give a decently-paced plot.
I smiled with him. Wonderful description.
I cry a little...
Okay. This chapter was a weighty one. It was nice to see Serenity come clean with Sea Mist, though I wish that scene had carried on a little bit. I'm sure it will come back around and we'll have more growth between them as we go, so I look forward to that.
While it wasn't a long chapter, the setting of Dry Station is humbling. All these different species all working and living together. I love the diversity on display. Wonderful job. The scraptree is a great touch for the holiday spirit. Happy Hearthwarming! (in June)