The new human professor at Canterlot University has caught the eye of the returned Night Princess, a friendship and some feelings blossoming. But, something seems off, as if he's hiding something from her. She intends to find out what.
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I’ve typically been skeptical of HIE stories where a human soldier finds their way into Equestria, though I have to say that your story has been a very pleasant surprise and I’ve really quite enjoyed it.
The revisiting of old battles is done respectfully and tastefully, whilst also showing that our protag isn’t just some battle-hungry soldier or apathetic killer (like some other stories sadly slide into, among other common tropes).
And the romance with Luna (who I will admit I have a bias towards as well) feels natural and well paced, not forced or too fast/too slow. Their friendship and partnership is written very nicely and compliments the darker tones of the battle. Watching Luna absorb the lowlights of James’ experiences in the pacific theatre and observing her gradual shift from open disgust to quiet resignation and apathy (as highlighted in the latest revisit of Pelileu) has felt very natural and appropriate, agains while avoiding the common traps of staunch idealism vs cynicism that other stories fall for.
Really enjoyed the story to this point (as I’ve read it in a single sitting) and cannot wait to see where you take us next.
And I wish you a speedy recovery for your arm.
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Wow, I'm just flattered Sir. Thank you for the kind comments! I'm very happy that I didn't screw up the pacing of their relationship. That was one of the big things that I was afraid of when I started writing my rough draft of the story. I've seen it happen all too many times in these stories and didn't want to see myself become just another one to add to the pile.
I'm glad that you've enjoyed the story!
I have to say your HIE story is very well written and I was instantly hooked after reading the first chapter or two. :)
I also liked how you've written out his friendship/romance with Luna, it's well paced and very well done, it's not going too fast/too slow etc.
Keep up the good work and I'll be praying that you make a good recovery on your arm.
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Thank you for the kind comments. They are great motivators to write. I really appreciate it good sir!