Well, that had taken a turn for the worst. One minute they were gods, the next they, were blasted by a rainbow sky horse and were powerless.
It happens.
After they had run away, Adagio and Aria went straight into a bitch fit when Sonata’s joke about things happening failed to cheer anyone up. Fortunately, the actually gods of their universe have them a break when she said it at least wasn’t raining.
Sonata huffed anyoingly to the side as Aria mentioned something about singing off key or something. Normally Sonata would have said another dumb joke to make things worse, but she honestly wasn’t in the mood by that point.
But hey, things could be worse, she thought to herself, as a mud ball landed on her face.
“Seriously?” she cursed upwards as she wiped the mud from her face. “You do this but not the rain?”
Growling, she chased after the asalient and tackled, her, to the ground. Recknizing her as she one of the students in the battle of the bands. Not any, but that grey girl, Octavia.
“Get off me, you witch!” The grey girl snarled.
“Well excuse me,” Sonata hissed. “You threw a mud ball at me!”
“You turned the school into zombies again!”
Sonata raised an eyebrow. “Pardon?”
Octavia rolled her eyes. “Yeah, add that to the things mom will hate me for.” She pushed Sonata off of her. “You should of not been mind controlled. Yes, mom, it was totally my fault. I should of done better.”
“Didnt I tell you to-
She looked at her broken pendent. “Ah, yes. Um,” she pulled at her hair. “Well you shouldn’t let her boss you around like that?”
“Oh what? The demon girl is giving consulting now?”
“Well you can take it or leave it.” Sonata waved off. “I’m not in the mood and have other things to worry about.”
Sonata then racked her brain around what the girl did. That’s right, she played the cello.
“If it helps, I thought you did good. When you had a chance to play your cello. Sorry you didn’t win, but I liked it.”
“Um, thanks?” Octavia said taken aback. “Or are you just saying that to try and be nice.”
“Eh... A little of both. Although to be fair I’m a demon girl, so... But yeah. Don’t hear classical a lot in this world, so it’s a nice change of pace.”
There was a scream.
“I should go make sure they’re not killing each other.” She stood up and offered Octavia a hand. “I hope things work out for you.”
Smiling, Octavia took her hand. “Thanks... You have a name?” she asked.
Sonata paused, turned around and said, “Yeah. It’s Sonata.” There was a crashing sound that made her cringe. “I should go, take care.” With a wave, she was gone.
Octavia stood their for a moment and smiled. “Huh, Sonata. Cute name.”
Sooooo, according to the story's short description, this is:
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So, ignoring for a moment that "more OTP" is an inherently ridiculous phrase - it's like talking about "Strawberries being more "favourite food" than chocolate"; it's all a matter of taste and preference and one can only have one favourite anyway - I'm going to assume, and certainly hope, that this description means you're trying to get across why you and those who similarly ship the pair like it, as opposed to trying to convince us your ship is better.
The problem is that it does not sound like that at all. Rather, it sounds like exactly the kind of petty, childish, "Your OTP is trash, mine is way better" sniping that plagues so much of shipping culture. Again, that may well be an unintended implication, but it seems to be there nevertheless.
Generally speaking, I find that when you're trying to advertise or pitch a pairing, it's a bad idea to explicitly mention an alternative, "opposing" ship in relation to it and certain don't bring it up in a way that looks like you're trying to show yours is "better". Even if it's meant as an innocent reference or a little nod, it's hard to shake the sense of that kind of... well, the best term I can come up with for it is "oneupman-shipping".
For the record, while I like Vinyl and Octavia just fine as a pairing and have read some great stories about it, I'm by no means a devotee of it and I'm perfectly willing to accept alternatives, but this? This description really doesn't get me interested in this alternative.
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Alright, I shall work on something more appropriate. Thank you for your feedback 💜
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Not a problem. Thank you for taking it so well.