Rushed time skip. Reaction on becoming a gem or knowledge on being a gem should be brought into question. Along with a whole heap of stuff that I missed or did not point out but these are the only problems I have with this story.
Well this should be fun. Definitely add onto this chapter so things flow more. Makes more sense if we have more of a reaction from Marcus about discovering about the gem and where he's at. And more reaction from the ponies upon first contact. Definitely take into account what The First Demonfox said.
Rushed time skip. Reaction on becoming a gem or knowledge on being a gem should be brought into question. Along with a whole heap of stuff that I missed or did not point out but these are the only problems I have with this story.
Yea I love the concept and all that but slow down the pacing a little.
Alright. You have my curiosity since most SU fan fics are usually cringy and so far this has promise.
Yay Lion, also this story kind of lost me.
But I'll keep my eye on it, and you.
This is definitely a interesting beginning can't wait to see where this goes.
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Well that's not concerning at all.
Well this should be fun. Definitely add onto this chapter so things flow more. Makes more sense if we have more of a reaction from Marcus about discovering about the gem and where he's at. And more reaction from the ponies upon first contact. Definitely take into account what The First Demonfox said.
Other than that, good start.
Damn you beat me to it, I was planning on making a Steven universe displaced story myself