that cant be healthy

Hot!

10227314 It's not. If you keep drinking, holding in your pee can actually cause a condition known as water poisoning.

https://www.theguardian.com/world/2007/jan/15/usa

Downvoted. These fetish fics are out of control. You know what holding in your piss actually does? Cause bladder infections, you dumbass. Scrap this abomination and delete your deviantart account before it's too late.

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Let people write their weird stories. They aren’t hurting you.

They say don’t judge a book by its cover but that’s exactly what I did. Sorry

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Fetish fics are out of control? The only thing out of control are people like you who try and mob stories that offend you with downvotes. It's like a cancer on this site that's only grown with time. Most of the time when I see a heavily downvoted newly published story, it's almost always a fetish fic with people like you downvoting it not because it's a bad story, but because they find it offensive.

This is not like a big fetish of mine, but a curiousity. So take anything I say with a grain of salt.

I thought this was pretty good, but the descriptions of things seemed very geared towards the physical. Lots of focus on internal organs and what they were doing. Maybe that's part of the fetish for you, but for me I felt it undermined the tone of the story a little. She comes across less like an innocent filly when she's so consciously aware of everything (or, similarly, it feels like she is because that's what the narration is describing). I did pick up on you reinforcing that she only called it her "down there place", and that does help a little, but I know my personal preference would be more focus on her feelings, or even the responses of the rest of her body - a quickening heartbeat, flushed cheeks, etc. can really drive home her desperation too.

Gave you the upvote without reservation anyway, because screw the haters, write what you like.

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Yeah it’s so bad that downvotes on these stories don’t even mean anything.

Least there's no such thing as P-humping.

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Other than potentially demoralizing the author causing them to stop writing stories like this in the future? I've seen it happen before. Some authors care about downvotes quite a bit.

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You know what I meant.

I like it. But it needs more kink so we can piss the downvote mob off.

Aww filly Twily's just soooo cute ^w^

10227337
Fuck off

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Pissing in the street makes you a sex offender, so I think I'll hold it for a while.
Edit:sorry, responded to the wrong comment...my bad.

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Pissing in the street makes you a sex offender, so I think I'll hold it for a while.

I just realized "pee holding" fics are all this author does. I'm surprised I haven't noticed until now.

I also downvoted those, by the way. You twats are afraid baby'll quit becawse of cwiticism? GOOD.

Liked it. Like, a lot

So you gonna continue this?

First story I've read from you and I have to say, I like it. I could sense the...ahem...urgency of little Twily's plight bringing a briskness to the reading.