Prologue: The Future War. 2044 A.D.
The year is 2044, the next chain in the never-ending war between us and them, and...we are losing. It was because the energy shield was faulty and the Terminators were able to break through to blast range of our base. All of this madness started when an A.I. named Skynet became self-aware and deemed humanity as a threat to its very existence. Skynet started on April 9th, 2020 with nuclear missile attacks that wiped out the majority of the human race. That dreaded day was called Judgement Day. Then it sent out its never-ending armies of Terminators, Hunter-Killers, and Hunter-Tanks. The Terminator infiltrator units ranged from T-600's, T-700's, T-800's, to T-900's, and all were immensely powerful killing machines. Many of my friends and family lost their lives when Skynet sent out the first wave of Terminators to attack us. Lyra, Bon-Bon, Vinyl, Big Macintosh, Sunburst, even little Scootalo. Rainbow Dash wasn't the same after Scootalo died, and I don't think we'll ever see the old Rainbow Dash ever again. Pinkie Pie also changed after Judgement Day, I guess I can't blame her because Pinkie lost her entire family during Judgement Day. We are at the edge of defeat now, but we all made an oath that if we burn, Skynet burns with us. My name is Starlight Glimmer, and I'm the leader of humanity's last hope of survival.
As Rainbowdash led her battalion over to the second equator, she had met up with Pinkie's group.
"Pinkie, please tell me that we have a winning chance against these things." Rainbow Dash said to Pinkie and her Squad.
"As of now, Negative, Dashie," Pinkie replied. "All I've seen tonight are groups of T-600's and T-800's on the ground looking for us, and Hunter-Killers patrolling the skies for any stragglers to shoot into oblivion."
"Yeah, I can see some Hunter-Killers right now," Rainbow said, looking above to see 3 of them patrolling for the survivors. "They just don't stop coming, do they."
"Anyhow, Dashie, I think we're just about finished with our patrol, so my squad and I are going to head back to base." Pinkie said as she and her squad headed back and Rainbowdash did the same with her squad, but not before a squad of T-600's appear and attack.
"Pinkie, I got T-600's on my tail, I kinda need some of your assistance," Rainbowdash said to Pinkie as the squad of terminators was closing in on them. "On it Dashie," Pinkie said as she ordered her squad to open fire on the approaching threat.
Back at base, The resistance leader Starlight Glimmer was talking with Ground commanders, Moondancer, Rarity, and Carrot Top about their next plan of attack.
"Captain Starlight, Commander Rainbow dash, and Lieutenant Pinkie Pie are returning to base, what are your orders." Said Carrot Top.
"Ready the time machine for activation, and Celestia's sake, where is Trixie." Starlight shouted, just as Trixie appeared seemingly out of nowhere, scaring her commander half to death.
"Hey there Starlight, what's shakin," Trixie said sarcastically. "TRIXIE! WHAT DID I TELL YOU ABOUT NEVER SNEAKING UP ON ME LIKE THAT!!!!" Starlight roared with fury.
"Oh, sorry commander, I'll try and work on it, so why have you called upon the great and powerful Trixie this time," Trixie said.
"Our research has confirmed that there will be a point in time in which Skynet will be at its infancy, that is why we need to send you through the time machine to make sure that Skynet never gets activated, and don't worry, you will be joined by a T-880 unit that we reprogrammed to fight for us." Starlight told her Cadet. "Now bring the others in here, I have a little speech to calm everyone's nerves." Starlight said, and after Trixie brought everyone up to the great hall, Starlight came to the stands.
"Ok, everyone, I know that we have had hard times, ever since the end of Judgement day, but we chose to not surrender and fight on because we are doing this for humanity's sake." Starlight said.
"We have lost many friends and family to this long, terrible war, but if we give up now, the people that died would have been all for nothing, today, one of us will go back to the past, prevent Skynet's activation, and protect the past version of me. We may not have the upper hand in this battle, but we must all take the oath, that if we burn Skynet will burn with us. This will be a day that will live in our memory from these days on, you will be able to tell your children about the day that turned the tide of this battle. This mission will decide the fate of the human race, and we will call it operation: Future War. WHO'S WITH ME!" Starlight said as everyone cheered her on.
Suddenly, Trixie saw one of the cadets' arms turn into liquid blades and slaughter two other cadets.
"T-1000 UNIT, BATTLESTATIONS, ALL HANDS ON DECK, EVERYONE PREPARE FOR BATTLE!" Starlight commanded. But the recruits started shooting recklessly at the Terminator, but their bullets went right through it.
"NO, STOP, HOLD YOUR FIRE!" Trixie said. "NORMAL BULLETS WON'T AFFECT THEM, but luckily, I have just the thing to take it down."
Then Trixie pulled out a single-barrel shotgun that contained acid-rounds, but it only had one bullet inside, so this shot had to count. "Ok, you little sucker, hold still, please let this work," Trixie said as she then fired her shotgun.
The shot was spot-on, and it hit the T-1100 on the head, as Trixie saw its head start to melt away, as it limped towards the time-machine, the terminator's screen monitor said: Danger, lethal damage, threat level high, emergency shutdown must commence or it will result in permanent damage. It was then followed by a barrage of acid bullet rounds.
"NOO, DON'T LET IT GET AWAY," Starlight ordered. But as Trixie, and Carrot Top were about to fire again, it was too little, too late, as the T-1100 had escaped through the Time-Machine.
"NOOOOOOO!" Starlight screamed in failure, as the time-machine shut down.
As the T-1100, or what was left of it, finally made it to the past, its power cells were now reaching critical, and it was about to collapse. Its form, that looked like resistance soldier Derpy Hooves, then morphed itself into a dormant puddle of liquid metal. Before the emergency shutdown was activated, it saw two figures coming towards it.
"Velvet honey, what's wrong what did you find," Night-Light said to his wife.
"I don't know, it looks like some kind of liquid," Twilight velvet said to her husband.
"Now sweetie, I don't think we should be touching something that we don't fully understand," Night Light said, as she saw Velvet trying to touch it. "Oh cmon honey, don't you want to know what this is?" Velvet asked her husband. "Well, I guess we should see what this stuff is first before we jump to any conclusions," Nightlight said. As they both touched the puddle of liquid, it began to start bubbling, as it was absorbing and fusing the DNA from their finger-prints. Then the liquid metal then morphed into what appeared to be a human baby. As the supposed child looked at the shocked couple, it started crying, just like a normal human child would do. "What should we do about this sweetie," Nightlight said to his wife. "Well, since we can't have any children ourselves, why don't we just adopt this child and raise it as our own. We first gotta think of a name to give her, hmmm, oh how about Twilight Sparkle, isn't that such a cute name for such an adorable child. Don't worry little one, for now on you can call us Mom and Dad," Twilight Velvet said when the infant started giggling as they brought her to their home.
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I hope everyone likes my new story.
Yes, I wanted to make Sci-Twi a terminator, I just thought it would make the story more interesting.
In the beginning of chapter 1, Sci-Twi would be completely unaware of abilities that a T-1000 would possess.
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1. I am a bit confused.
- a.) Is the T-1100 (Sci-Twi) meant to be a pure liquid metal Terminator like the T-1000 (Terminator 2: Judgement Day, Terminator [5]: Genisys)?
- b.) Or a hybrid with liquid exterior and "hard" endoskeleton, like the T-X (Terminator 3: Rise of the Machines) and Rev-9 (Terminator [6]: Dark Fate)?
2. If pure liquid metal, then there are no centralized circuits or power cells to critically damage, as it operates on a morphic (liquid) cellular structure (albeit metallic cells). Shooting it in the head, even with an acid shotgun blast would not do enough damage to compromise functions since the rest of the "body" would still be intact and thus fully recover.
The counter-balance being, is if the overall whole of the T-1000's "body" is damaged by acid (or liquid nitrogen), then it can be critically damaged &/or destroyed; as was the case with the T-1000 in Terminator (5): Genisys.
Terminator Genisys (2015) - Killing the T-1000 Scene (4/10) | Movieclips
For your fan-fiction, this can be done by revising the scene so the Resistance soldiers are ALL mass-shooting your T-1100 with acid rounds (not just Trixie) as it struggles to reach the Time Machine, thus suffering critical damage over its whole form, not just its head.
3. Now, if your T-1100 is a hybrid like the T-X and Rev-9, meaning a "hard" endoskeleton underneath liquid exterior, then you have some basis for damage that affects its CPU, since it would be housed in its cranial skull. However, then your story requires some serious revision (if not a complete overhaul) to reflect that.
4. As some additional friendly writing advice... The parents would not name their adoptive Terminator-daughter "Sci-Twi". You would be better off just using "Twilight Sparkle" for formal name; however, her friends/companions can name & refer to her as "Sci-Twi" as a nickname, probably from her often speaking in very "technical" (pun intended) fashion.
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The T-1100 would be a hybrid with a liquid exterior and a very tough exoskeleton. It would be much more advanced than the T-X and Rev-9. Also, I will work on revising the plot.
thanks for asking.
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1. I think you mean Liquid metal exterior and metallic ENDO-skeleton. EXO-skeleton means a hard external shell like an insect's carapace.
2. Then I would also advise re-labeling Terminator-Twi as a T-X rather than T-1100, so you avoid any confusion over Terminator models.
- a.) Perhaps "T-X5", (broadly) phonetically sounding for "Sci-" in "Sci-Twi"; though as said, Terminator-Twi should still be formally named Twilight Sparkle by her adoptive parents.
- b.) Probably unwise to use a (fan-fiction adapted) "Rev-9" label since that would make readers think Terminator-Twi would be able to separate into two independent units. Unless, that is what you plan to make use of in your fan-fiction.
Hope this (continues) to help.
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It does, Thank you.
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What weapons does the T-X have?
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1. T-X (Terminator model), Wikipedia
2. T-X (Terminator model), Terminator Wiki.
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The T-X5 would also have a high level of human intelligence and has human emotions, which is why she's the only T-X5 unit to be built, since it would be easy for her to become self-aware and go rogue.
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I also wanted to name her the T-XX since she'd be more advanced than the T-X and Rev-9.
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I going to make her a cross between the T-1000, T-X, and Rev-9
Figured I help you out there with some spelling errors
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Thank you.
I would like to see some fanart of what Twilight Sparkle (The T-X5) would look like.
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1. A median "cross" between the T-1000 vs. the T-X and Rev-9, yet more advanced, would be the T-3000 (the Terminator-converted John Connor, Terminator [5]: Genisys).
- a.) T-3000 (Terminator model), Wikipedia
- b.) T-3000 (Terminator model), Terminator Wiki
For a brief summary here: the T-3000 is not liquid per se, as it is far more "solid" in physical form being made-up of nanite "machine-phase matter"; but it can be just as morphic as the T-1000.
Think of the T-3000 like a super-advanced form of tiny LEGOs; thousands of nanite-sized pieces capable of building a near-infinite variety of forms, yet quite solid when assembled and locked-together into its desired form. And of course, even if sufficient force causes it to be broken apart, it can simply reform itself in moments.
But again, if you choose the T-3000 model, it faces the same storytelling problem as the T-1000, no centralized circuits (nanites); so a single acid shot to the head will not cause enough damage to critically alter/wipe Terminator-Twi's original programming/directives.
2. I would not label Terminator-Twi as "T-XX", numerical "X" already means variable, so double "XX" is incorrect (for Terminator models, at least). No, you are still better off with a numerical designation (T-X5, or other).
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Another major storytelling aspect you have to consider...
1. The Terminator series, throughout every film, has a common theme/style, in that it is a "David vs. Goliath" tale. The Human-side ("David") protagonist (be it human, re-purposed Terminator, or cyborg) is always initially outmatched by the Machines-side ("Goliath") Terminator(s), at least for the most of the film-story. But by the end of the story, the person the Resistance soldier is sent to protect rises up to accept & embrace their grand Destiny (Sarah Connor, John Connor, Dani Ramos), triumphing over their metaphorical "Goliath."
So Terminator-Twi cannot be so advanced/powerful that she curb-stomps the lesser Terminator models, that becomes boring to see/read. As the storytelling methodology-saying goes, "Big Heroes need Big Villains."
2. In this regard, you have several options...
- a.) Quality ~ An equally powerful, if not more powerful, Skynet Terminator. Basically following the standard Terminator-series format. With Terminator-Twi struggling, but eventually rising, to meet the challenge (a la Sarah Connor, John Connor, and Dani Ramos).
- b.) Quantity ~ Instead of one superior Skynet Terminator, there are many "lesser" (relatively speaking) T-models. Perhaps Skynet was able to instead able to send an entire company (x100, or more) of Terminators before the (EqG-)Human Resistance could stop Skynet from doing so. So while one or two "lesser" Skynet Terminators are no match for the advanced Terminator-Twi, what about x4 of them? or x6? or x24?
- c.) Quantity, then Quality ~ This one is a complex storytelling angle, loosely based upon Terminator (6): Dark Fate and Terminator: Resistance (FPS video game). The (EqG-)Human Resistance know that Skynet has a Time Portal "somewhere", but do not know where (yet). However, after a lucky raid on a Skynet Advanced Cybernetics Development Lab, they manage to find and send a re-purposed Terminator-Twi back in time to intercept incoming Skynet Terminators, to buy time for the Resistance to find and destroy the Skynet Time Portal.
During that time across the story, Terminator-Twi must work to improve, advance, and evolve herself to face the ever-increasingly advanced Skynet Terminators coming through at various points across the story. The climax of the story being when Terminator-Twi has to face-off against a "Midnight Sparkle" Terminator version of herself. Will Terminator-Twi's self-evolution across the story, the combat-experience and Friends she has gained as well, and her very Human Spirit, be enough to match the "Midnight Sparkle" Terminator's equally (if not more) advanced tech and remorseless inhuman malevolence?
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I've included some hunter-killers in my story that I made myself, for example, The T-N, which is a Nano-bot-like parasite that will go into a human host's mind and then, slowly and painfully turns its host into a mindless puppet for Skynet.
And the T-D, which is a spherical drone that fires rapid laser blasts at opponents.
Really liking this so far, the idea of Twilight being a Terminator who lost it's memory and lived a normal life is really unique and I can't wait to see it unfold
My only grievance is that I'm confused about how old exactly everyone is supposed to be. I mean it says that Pinkie lost her whole family on Judgment day in 2020 but now they are in 2077 which means she and everyone else would roughly be at least in their 60s given how she clearly remembers them dieing so... yeah an explanation of that would be appreciated
Beyond that fantastic story, and hope to see more soon
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I don't.
It's stupid, the plot is good, but the excustion is stuipid, it a super rushed chapter no real build up, no real good story telling.
I can't take this seriously at all and that was the first chapter.
Thsi si a story not a movie you are writing so there no need to go super fast, on the plot and story telling by skipping or jumping around.
Also REALLY REALLY the terminator is found them and they go it a robot let's adopt it.
I thought you said it reverted to an infant state, yet you had shape shift to flash and then a female form and...what it a female flash then?
that the confusing part and very unbelievable, they just take ina weird robot that came out of nowhere....I'm done.
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I understand I will revise it and make it so it makes more sense. I know, I'll change the ending.
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1. I have to agree with diablo4000. You have a solid CrossOver story-premise, but you execution is stumbling at best.
2. Your major problems are...
- a.) World Building ~ You need to know beforehand who is fulfilling what core storytelling Role(s), and how in terms of storytelling narrative & description. Likewise, as luckyboys121 commented, you need to get your dates between Present and Future correct too.
- b.) Source Research/Accuracy ~ As was with your initial story-posting (when I first started commenting), your T-model labels only served to confuse your readers. This was worsened by Terminator-Twi not following the natures of the T-model(s) you say you want her to be. You need to do some better Research into your Source Materiel, and clarify to the readers what Terminator-Twi is (& will be) through the story, not through the Comments.
3. One of the biggest hurdles for doing any CrossOver fan-fiction is that the readers are going to scrutinize BOTH CrossOver-aspects of the story, so your execution has to be on-point for your readers to be, and stay, invested. Take me for example, I am only a casual fan of the Terminator-series, yet pointed out a lot of things lacking &/or un-clear about Terminator-Twi.
4. My advice would be that you are probably better off scrapping this and doing a complete overhaul from the ground-up. However, you should record/save what constructive criticisms have been made here (not just me).
The summary and the chapter dont line up because it's not raining
It's a bit better then previous
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Wasn't Carl in Dark Fate a T-800 that after killing John Connor saved a family and raised the kids like his own, and gained the equivalent of what a human conscious is?.
It's different from what you're saying, but for 50 or so years Carl lived a good human life with a human family after Skynet no longer existed due to killing John Connor which caused this history of the terminators to never happen because killing John Connor caused their existence to be erased which it probably didn't think about if they killed him.
I wonder if Grand Galvatron could have Carl somehow be repaired and reborn in a new terminator body but remember everything, and teach Terminator-Human hybrid Twilight sparkle yes that's what i'm calling her, what she is and what her body can do.
Maybe even Grace, Sarah and John could teach her, if John and Grace can also be revived somehow. I'd like to see that happen in the story Grand Galvatron. John and Grace teaching Twilight who and what she really is.
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Yes, I think that's right.