Disturbing visions/A strange creature
DISTURBING VISIONS
-The First Moon of Autumn-
Princess Luna stands watch over a dark and sleeping Equestria, periodically she peers into the dreams of sleeping ponies, smiling at the happy dreams of some and helping others with their nightmares. Suddenly a strange and disorienting sensation comes over her as her eyes goes white when a vision comes over her.
She finds herself standing in the throne room seeing laying on her side, deliriously moaning in pain, four parallel gashes marring her right cutie mark and flank. She sees a griffon warped and twisted by dark magics struggling with a two-legged creature wielding a large round shield on one forelimb and a long bladed sword in the other, on its back it wore a jacket made of metal rings, on its head it wore a large conical helmet that swooped low on the neck with a red, braided mane below the rear brim of the helmet, a large axe hung near it's haunches. Quickly the creature bashed the griffon in his face with its shield and slew the griffon with a vicious stab of its sword. Sheathing the sword, the creature ran over to Celestia, loosing the shield from from its forelimb and laid it on her body.
Groaning in pain and delirium she raised her head, "B-b-behind..." From her rear right Luna heard a nasty and evil snicker. Quickly the creature spun on its rear limbs while loosing the axe from its haunches and the sword from the scabbard holding them both in its forelimbs. Luna got a good look at the creature, it's forelimbs ended not in hooves, but ape-like paws and it's face, though it was partially concealed under the cheek and snout guards of the helmet was ape-like, but shorter with part of its red, braided mane hanging below its jaw. Luna observed its posture, crouched, like a predator ready to pounce, its mouth curled in a snarl of rage, its emerald eyes burning with fury. Luna slowly let her gaze drift over to where the creature was glaring.
She could not make out the figures as they were enshrouded in shadows. With an evil chortle a familiar came from the taller figure, "It's a shame Celestia, you weren't the intended target for our assassins poison but no matter, you will be dead before your sister can lower the moon."
Luna replied with shock
"It can't be! Chrysalis..." A wicked laugh interrupted her. "Sombra?!"
In a language Luna had not heard in five hundred years before she became Nightmare Moon, the creature said "Din snikmorder legger drept av min hånd!" Then the creature beat the flat of both weapons against its chest and pointed the sword at the figures in a clear challenge, "Jeg er vrede! Jeg ødelegger! Jeg er raseri! Jeg er din undergang! Før jeg dreper deg, selv om jeg skal vite at jeg er ditt mareritt laget kjøtt!" As quickly as it came on, the vision ended. Luna with her head swimming from the intensity of the vision overcoming her tried to steady herself, she felt herself falling as her sight faded and her eyes rolling up in her head, then nothingness.
After an unknown amount of time Luna felt consciousness drifting back to her. As she slowly opened her eyes, saw three concerned guards standing over her. Her hearing slowly faded back in, "...incess?! Princess?! Are you Okay?! Are you unwell?!"
As she rose to her feet, the three guards assisting her, shaking the cobwebs off, she replied "Yes Captain Bright Star, I believe I am well. How long was I out for?"
"Only for a couple of minutes.", gesturing towards another guard Bright Star continued, "Shimmering Ribbons heard a loud crash and investigated, finding you unconscious. Are you sure you're well? I can have a doctor here in less than 30 minutes."
"Thank you Captain, I believe I am well. If I have further problems, I will contact a physician. Now I must see Celestia!"
Luna hurried through the hallways of the palace, as she entered into the corridor leading to Celestia's bedchamber she heard her sister cry out "NOOOOOO!", followed by a loud crash.
Luna propelled herself as fast as she could, crashing into Celestias' door turning it to splinters. Without even thinking, she shouted in the royal voice, "SISTER...!"
Celestia tossed fitfully in her bedchamber trying to sleep, an uneasy feeling had come over her rousing her from her slumber. Rolling over a few more times and punching her pillow with one of her fore hooves in a vain attempt to make it more comfortable. Finally groaning in frustration, she sat up deciding to get herself a drink of water. "I guess I'll have to get Luna to cast a sleep spell on me so I can get some rest.", Celestia said to herself. As she stood to levitate her glass to the nearby sink, a strange and disorienting sensation washed over her as she entered into a vision, her eyes flaring white. An ape-like creature knelt on the balcony outside the throne room, as she approached a sharp pain was throbbing in her right flank. Looking at her flank, she saw four parallel wounds, days old marring her right flank and cutie mark.
"Somepony must have attacked me." she thought to herself. Before she could ask anything, she heard a strange chanting prayer coming from the ape-like creature in a language she had not heard in over 1500 years.
"Å forfedre, jeg ber dere bære min bønn til gudene slik at de kan svare med hastverk. Jeg ber bare om at når jeg går for å redde mesteren i Sky Queens at jeg seirer eller du kaster åpne de store dørene i hallen din, slik at jeg kan bli med deg i festen for krigere."
The creature stood and turned, upon seeing Celestia a surprised look came across it's face. "Sky Queen! Du burde hvile. Den dårlige giften som brukes av snikmorderen til de onde, har ikke helt forlatt systemet ditt og har bremset helbredelsen av sårene dine. For å gjengjelde livsgjelden skylder jeg deg for å ta de forgiftede klørne som er ment for meg, skal jeg redde mesteren din."
As Celestia looked towards the mountains beyond the ruins of the Everfree castle she saw forming in the clouds a familiar face, his mouth curled into a wicked sneer, his piercing red eyes glared at her, his crimson horn gathered red arcs of lightening wreathed in inky darkness. "Sombra..." As Celestia snapped out of the vision
The floor started coming towards her in slow motion and a voice she couldn't quite place shrieked "NOOOOOOO!" The last thing she heard before the world disappeared into nothingness was the sound of wood splintering and a familiar voice crying out "SISTER...!"
As the world faded back in Celestia became aware of a familiar presence near her and a hoof resting gently on her shoulder. Looking up she saw the concerned face of Luna. "Tia?! Are you okay?!"
"Yes Luna, I think I'm Okay. I just had the most bizarre and unsettling vision. I think I was overcome by how powerful it was."
"I too had a strange and distressing vision. Ow!", Luna put her hoof to her head, "I think when I fainted, I gave myself quite the bump on the head."
Celestia smiled to reassure her sister, a smile that quickly turned to a wince of pain as Celestia put her hoof to her chin, "I think I hit my jaw on the floor when I passed out."
A nervous cough came from the doorway. Luna rolled her eyes and said "Yes guard, you may send for a physician for my sister and myself."
As Celestia sat up from the floor, she looked at the remains of the door and asked, "Luna, what happened to my door?"
"Wwweeelll..."
Princess Cadence lay in her bedchamber unable to sleep, a combination of an uneasy feeling that had come over her and that she never slept well when Shining Armor worked the late patrol. She understood that it was part of the normal rotation as Shining Armor was not only co-ruler of the Crystal Empire, but also High Captain of the Guard and Supreme Commander of the army in the Crystal Empire, even though she knew it was part of his duties to help protect Crystal Empire, it didn't prevent her from being worried when he took the late patrol.
The handle on the door rattled slightly and swung open gently, Cadence perked up at the sound, Shining Armor spoke softly in the room, "Cadence? Are you awake? I managed to to trade off the last four hours of my patrol for a guard who couldn't sleep. I'll have to make it up to him tomorrow for four hours on his shift."
Cadence sat up with a broad smile on her face, "Shining Armor, I am gla..."
Cadence went stiff as a board as with a discombobulating rush the vision came upon her, her eyes shining white. Cadence found herself in the mountains beyond the ruins of the Everfree Castle running down a pass alongside a familiar yellow pegasi with a pink mane and tail, alongside her ran an ape-like creature wearing a conical helmet with snout and cheek guards, a red, braided mane flowing in the wind about its shoulders, a jacket of metal rings hanging on its body, a sword and axe hanging on its haunches.
Pointing towards the Everfree Forrest, it shouted in a tongue she never heard before, the creature shouted, "Fortsett å løpe mester i Sky Queens! Vi er nesten til skogen!" Suddenly several figures swooped down from above blocking the path ahead of them. The figures looked like griffons and changelings twisted and warped by dark magics. The pegasus and ape creature ran along a wide cliff that ran perpendicular to the pass. Suddenly several more twisted and warped creatures swooped down in front of them, turning back they saw more and more of the twisted creatures swarming along the cliff.
The ape creature shoved its helmet ill-fitting onto the pegasus' head, then shoving her roughly into a small cave, looses its shield from its forelimb and placing it at the entrance of the cave, before covering it the creature said "Jeg skal prøve å lede dem av! Ikke la før du hører kampene forlate dette området! Eller...", the creature gestures over his shoulder, "Sky Queens ankommer med hæren sin!" Cadence sees the pegasus quickly nod her head. The creature quickly shoves the shield flush with the cave and hastily piles someone stones at the base of the shield.
Cadence quickly darts her eyes up to the sky and sees what looks like four meteors, burning brighter than the sun, streaking across the sky, followed quickly by a rainbow streak leading a massive flying wedge that scatters the clouds before it. Cadence swore she heard two mighty earthquakes coming from the north and west. Quickly her attention is snapped back to the cliff by several hisses and snarls. The ape creature has both the sword and axe in its paws. Its face a stoic masque of grim resolve, its green eyes burn with rage.
Slowly it slowly stalks forward, muscles trembling like coiled springs, posture like a monster ready to rampage, trample and tear through the host. The creature takes a few more steps forward and then stops, several of the twisted and warped creatures in the front stagger back into their kith and kin, many are cut down by fangs, beaks and claws, others are shoved down by those who are trying to inch forward. The ape creature bellows a mocking laugh, "Du bringer verten mot meg, og det er deg som skjelver av frykt?! Er dette det beste de onde kan gjøre?! En hær av feiginger?!" Many creatures seem confused by its words, but are incensed by the mocking laughter and derisive tone and start clawing and stamping the ground and beating their wings in anger.
A wicked smile parts the face of the ape creature as it starts slapping its chest with the flat of the blades then extends its forelimbs out wide and shouts a challenge, "Se! Jeg er vrede! Jeg er din ruin! Jeg er raseri! Jeg er undergang! Jeg er ditt mareritt laget kjøtt og før jeg dreper deg, men skal vite det!" Then the ape creature is amongst them disappearing in a ball of fangs, beaks, claws, wings, metal and violence.
Shining Armor immediately senses something is wrong with Cadence and rushes to her, "Cadence?! What's wrong?!" He quickly wraps his forelimb and hoof around her feeling her to be stiff as a board.
He hears her muttering softly over and over in a strange tongue, "Fluttershy holder seg sterk! Hold deg stille! ikke gråt!" After a couple of minutes of Cadence being stiff as a board and muttering to herself in a language he's never heard before, she goes completely limp and Shining Armor wraps both forelimbs around her, bracing her body against his and gently cradling her head with his hooves, laid her gently on the bed. As he rose and looked down on her face to ask her what happened when horror struck him, her eyes were wide open but completely rolled up in her head, her body as limp as a boiled noodle.
Quickly Shining Armor ran to their bedchamber door and shouted, "Guards! Get a doctor, Princess Cadance has fallen ill!" He then rushed to the bathroom and levitated a washcloth off the nearby shelf, soaked it with cool water from the sink and wrung out the excess. Rushing back to Cadence's side, Shining Armor used his levitation to fold the washcloth and gently wipe across her forehead and face.
As the world faded back in for Cadence, she felt a familiar presence nearby and a cool pressure sliding across her face. Slowly she opened her eyes seeing the concerned face of Shining Armor staring down at her, placing a hoof on the cool pressure and finding the cool, damp washcloth. She gave a small, reassuring smile to her husband and started sitting up. Shining Armor placed his hoof on her shoulder firmly, yet gently, "Take it slowly Cadence. You had some kind of strange episode. Has someone attacked you? Are we under threat from enemies?"
"No, we're not under threat from our enemies...yet. Though...", she paused pondering for a brief moment, "Though if our enemies are moving against us in secret, I feel that a strange ally soon reveal themselves."
"How do you know for sure?" "I saw in my vision a strange creature fighting to defend a pony from an evil horde." Shining Armor had been married to Cadence long enough to recognize when she had a vision.
Flurry Heart walked into the bedchamber, "Mother?Father?"
"I'm okay Flurry, I'm just not feeling well."
"I've seen your vision,considering how powerful and unsettling it was, you shouldn't be feeling too well."
"W-w-whaaaaat?!", Cadance and Shining Armor exclaimed in surprise.
"Yes. Celestia, Luna and Aunt Twilly also had powerful and disturbing visions. While I was seeing all four visions, I heard three voices that sounded like alicorns call out from the north as one unified voice 'Fear not for equstria kindred sisters, we send our champion to fulfill his ancestral oath to thee!"
"Do you know when this champion will arrive?"
Flurry Heart closed her eyes and focused her powers, her aura shimmering in multiple colors, her mane and tail becomes ethereal, blowing in a breeze that isn't there, strange colors and patterns shifting across them, "It's difficult to see, the future is constantly shifting and trying to see it changes it.." Flurry Heart relaxed her powers, looking at her mane and tail, "Well I didn't foresee this."
Princess Twilight Sparkle lay in her bedchamber, sleep had fled her. Rolling over in her bed desperately trying to find a comfortable position, she tosses her pillow aside and groans, "Ugh! I guess I'll try and find me something to read until I can go to sleep." As she trotted down the hallway, she heard coming from the kitchen a clatter of barrels and muffled conversation between three familiar voices. "I guess Sweet Apple Acres had a really good harvest this year. I guess it won't hurt to get a mug of that fresh cider."
As Twilight entered the kitchen she heard the familiar country drawl of Applejack, "Ah tell yuh what Big Mac, Twilly will be heaps suurr-prised by this here delivery of Granny Smith's special aged stock of cider"
"Eyup!", Big Mac responded.
"I can't wait to try some of that special cider.", Spike said, the drool practically visible in his words.
"Not before I get the first taste, Spike!", Twilight responded with a playfully stern tone. She noted how Applejack had seemed to barely age compared to Big Mac, who had fine lines forming at the corners of his eyes. Her other four friends had also aged slower, Twilight and the other princesses had postulated that exposure to the elements of harmony had altered them, slowing their ageing. She had noted too how spike had grown, standing nearly as tall as Big Mac, his wings folded across his shoulders to give the impression of a cape.
"Big Mac, get the mugs out of the cabinet soes we can drink tuh our continued health!"
"Eyup!"
As Twilight held the mug with her telekinesis up to her mouth to drink the cider, a bewildering wave slammed into her as the vision began, her eyes shone white. Twilight found herself standing in the courtyard of the palace in the Crystal Empire, bodies of ponies and yaks lay bloody and broken amongst the remains of changelings twisted and warped by dark magics.
Twilight sees Shining Armor step out of the shadows flanked by his top officers, "Secure every corridor and exit in the castle. After doing so, link up with the pony and yak forces to help retake the city." A quiet anger filled his eyes.
Cadance alighted on the courtyard, "The pegasus scouts have confirmed that the last of the evacuation trains are safely away with most of the civilians in them. They also report that the yaks helped secure and defend the train station, but the griffons that Sombra managed to twist to him counter attacked and there would have been more wounded and dead if Gilda and Harald had not shown up and lead most of them away from the station."
"Cadance!? Shining Armor!? What's happen...", Twilight asked as she extended her hoof out to touch Cadance on her forelimb only to have it pass through as if she were made of mist, "I'm having a vision!"
"Catch up as soon as you can! I'm taking some of the pegasus scouts with me to find them! Those two won't last long without reinforcements!", Cadance shouted shouted as she flew up into the air. Twilight found herself floating in the vision alongside Cadance as she was flying as hard as she can.
"Hang on Gilda, I'll be there to help you out soon!", a familiar voice shouted.
"Rainbow!?", Twilight said as she looked over her should seeing the familiar blue pagasus wearing wonderbolt armor, leaving a rainbow streak behind her.
Twilight drifted through the vision alongside Cadance, Rainbow Dash and a dozen other pegasi. They flew over the train station, seeing the bodies of the twisted and warped griffons in a grizzly trail heading to the west, the host swings to follow it. Soon the trail leads to a small ravine, in the dim light Twilight sees what looks like an ape-like creature standing astride the body of a griffon, axe in one forelimb and a large shield strapped to the other. Cadance gestures one hoof upwards and her other hoof in a broad sweeping motion.
Twilight quickly glances over shoulder and sees Rainbow shoot up high into the air and the other pagasi spread out into a crescent formation. Then Twilight follows Cadance down in a steep dive as she slams into a warped griffon to her left of the ape creature, using her magic to blast several enemies away forming a perimeter, then quickly throws a shielding bubble over the three of them. A rainbow blur slams into the middle of the host, followed almost by a sonic rainboom. Bodies of twisted griffons are flung through the air in every direction as the rainboom bounces off the ravine walls several times. A split second later the rainboom dissipates, the rest of the pagasi descend on the disoriented enemies.
Cadance gives a quick nod to the ape creature and it lurches forward, slamming its axe into the skull of a large twisted griffon, showering the battlefield with blood and viscera, Cadance takes its place in vigil over the body of the griffon. Twilight glances down at the griffon that Cadance is now standing vigil over, "Gilda!" she gasps in horror. In her talon she holds a sword in a death grip.
Suddenly she snaps out of the vision. The countertop starts moving towards her in slow motion, a familiar voice shouting "Twilight!", then reality disappears into nothingness. Slowly reality begins to fade back in, Twilight feels a familiar presence and a cool pressure on her face. Slowly she opens her eyes, she sees the concerned face of Applejack staring down and the cool pressure covering her left eye.
"Easy now sugar cube, take it slow gettin' up. You had an odd episode, fainted and bashed your face on the counter top. Ah sent Big Mac to go get a doctor and Spike to send messages to the princesses."
"AJ I had a vision. I saw the Crystal Empire attacked by enemies warped and twisted by evil magics. I saw a friend killed and a strange creature fighting for Princess Cadance."
Applejack twisted her mouth in concern and thought, "Ah say let the doctor look at you first an' then when one of the princesses show up they can help to make some kind of sense of what you saw."
Twilight slowly rose to her feet, Applejack helping her up. Using her telekinesis, Twilight held the cool damp cloth to her eye. "I'll wait for the doctor in the map room." Twilight knew better than to argue with Applejack right now as she can be insistent.
*the next morning*
Celestia and Luna were sitting in the sculpture garden at a small table waiting for the other princesses. Soon a purple alicorn was descending towards the palace. Celestia chuckled slightly, "It seems Twilight is early as usual."
"Indeed she is sister. Your pupil has always had that annoying quality about her.", Luna replied giving a teasing smile to Celestia. Celestia and Luna shared a small chuckle with Celestia giving her sister a playful shove.
Two unicorn guards approached the princesses, the sisters cleared their throats and regained their regal composure. "Announcing from Ponyville, Princess Twilight Sparkle the Princess of Friendship.", the first unicorn pronounced in a clear voice. Then the two unicorn guards stepped to their left and right respectively and bowed.
Twilight strode forward, her head held in a regal pose and bowed before the sisters, "Princess Celestia, Princess Luna."
"Princess Twilight Sparkle.", the sisters said simultaneously, standing and returning the bow. The three rose and Luna gave a quick nod to the two guards.
The unicorns rose, gave a quick salute, turned quickly and left. As Twilight walked to the table, the sisters crooked their mouths in concern, "Twilight, what happened to your eye?"
Twilight put her hoof to her bruised eye, "Oh this? Last night after I had a vision, I fainted and hit my face on the counter. The doctor checked me out and said other than this black eye, I'd be fine."
The sisters glanced at each other with concern, Celestia putting her hoof to her jaw and Luna a hoof to her head. Luna walked over to Twilight, "This won't do. We can't have a bruise marring your face. Hold still." Luna's horn glowed with magic and a small ball of light formed at its tip, she bent her head down and touched it to Twilight's eye, "There, other than a little soreness for the next couple of days, that bruise is gone." Twilight put her hoof to her face, though a little tender there was no sign the bruise had been there.
Celestia pointed her hoof upwards, "Come sit down, Cadance, Shining Armor and Flurry Heart will be joining us soon." Luna and Twilight looked where Celestia was pointing, a pagasi drawn chariot was approaching Canterlot with all three in the back. "They'll be here in the hour, let us be prepared to receive them." Celestia picked up a small bell in her mouth, gave it a jingle and placed it back on the table. A grey stallion pony wearing a black vest and bow tie approached the table, "Our guests will be here within the hour. Have the tea service ready for when they arrive."
"Yes your majesty.", The pony gave a quick bow, "By your leave princesses." All three gave him a quick nod, he gave a quick turn on his hooves and trotted back to the palace.
A small procession of six guards, two unicorns, two pagasi and two earth ponies entered the statue garden in a two-by-two column. "Announcing the Royal Family of the Crystal Empire, Princess Mi Amore Cadenza, Prince Shining Armor and Princess Flurry Heart", one of the lead ponies proclaimed in a clear voice. Then the two columns stepped to the left and right making a path for the rulers of the Crystal Empire.
The three approached the table, bowed and formally addressed the princesses. The three princesses rose from their seats, returning the bow and formal addresses. As the six rose, Shining Armor turned his head and saluted the twin columns of guards, the guards returned the salute, reformed ranks and marched out of the garden.
The six hugged and exchanged pleasantries, "We four have had disturbing visions concerning our enemies and the same creature.", Celestia and Luna using their magic projected the images from their visions, Cadance and Twilight followed suit.
Shining Armor looked on with visible concern on his face. "Who or what is this ape that seems to be fighting for us?"
"He is the decendant of an upright named Jorgen the Irontooth, who helped us defeat the Nameless King. We thought after we had slain him, we had completely nullified and scattered his his power."
"An upright? You mean a hoom-muhn? They're real!?"
"Yes Twilight, they're very real, they're called humans and they live far beyond the borders of Equestria. Only the dragons, hippogriffs and yaks have seen small tribes of them traveling over the past nine hundred years."
"I never believed the old stories, thinking they were old mares tales.", Shining Armor said flabbergasted.
Suddenly the six felt a familiar energy wash over them as Flurry Heart's horn started glowing. Shimmering images of the alicorns appeared, two mares and a stallion. "Hoar Frost, Bright Hearth, Fierce Heart?!", the two sisters exclaimed.
"HAIL SISTER KINDRED! WE HAVE RISKED CONTACTING THEE! A SERVANT OF EVIL HAS ATTACKED OUR LAND, A UNICORN WITH A RED HORN, WE REPULSED HIM AND HE FLED BACK TO YOUR LANDS! THE SON OF IRONTOOTH HAS DEPARTED TO FULFILL HIS ANCESTORS OATH TO THEE! HE SHALL ARRIVE IN A FORTNIGHT AND EIGHT!" The images quickly faded.
"It appears that Sombra has made his first move.", Celestia said.
"Indeed, we must send messengers to our allies and prepare for war. I'll double the guards in the dungeon."
"I'll send Rainbow Dash to the hippogriffs, Pinkie Pie to the yaks, Spike to the dragons, Starlight glimmer to the changelings, Fluttershy to Discord, Applejack to the buffalo and the CMCs to the griffons!" The six sat at the table discussing plans, they agreed that when the attack happened at least one alicorn and 12 unicorns would be sent into hiding so there would always be someone to raise the sun and moon.
Flurry Heart insisted it should be her as she was the youngest and could serve as a rallying beacon of hope if needed. The other four quietly discussed amongst each other and came to an agreement, "Very well Flurry Heart, when our enemies reveal themselves, you will be sent into hiding. Remember when it happens to keep moving and tell none where you're going. Over the next few weeks we'll gather up twelve of the most powerful and skilled unicorns and put them into hiding."
*two days later*
Chrysalis sitting in a tiny cell deep under the castle, the only food she received was the meager bowl of unflavored oats and a small cup of water shoved through the sliding hatch at the bottom of the heavy iron door every couple of days. Resentfully gnawing on a crude cake of oats made from some of the food she had hoarded and hidden in her bedding.
A pair of red eyes appeared before her, "Queen Chrysalis, my how the mighty have fallen."
"Okay, I have officially gone mad."
"I assure you I am very real. I offer you the chance to seek your revenge on the princesses and the hive that betrayed you. All you have to do is work with me and I assure you that we shall slay the princesses and their "friends.""
"Very well apparition I'll accept your help if you can assure that the princesses and that traitor Thorax will lay dead before me by my own horn." Chrysalis replied already planning on how she was going to betray him once her vengeance was complete, "By what name do you go by apparition?"
"My name is King Sombra. Now come along Queen, we have much to do and little time to do it." A red portal opens next to Chrysalis, with a nasty chuckle she steps through.
A unicorn guard walking down the dungeon hallway, he approaches the door of Chrysalis' cell door with her meager meal of oats and water. As he unlocked and opened the slot of the door to slide her meal in, he saw a red light, looking in he saw Chrysalis step through a red glowing portal. "GUARDS! Chrysalis has escaped! Put the palace on high alert and send a message to the princesses!", he shouted dropping the bowl of oats and cup of water.
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A STRANGE CREATURE
-Four Days Before the Second Moon of Autumn-
In the Crystal Empire there was an air of apprehension with the news of the escape of Queen Chrysalis and the taking of twelve unicorns by the royal guards. Guards were and soldiers were patrolling the streets and perimeter the Crystal Empire. A fierce snowstorm blew outside the northern border of the protective barrier, as the sun slowly dipped slowly behind the mountains casting the Crystal Empire into a dim twilight. Three earth ponies were apprehensively patrolling along along a section of the northern border of the protective barrier.
"I can't wait until we get back to the barracks so I can get some warm cider in me. Seeing all this snow is making me feel chilled to the bone." one of the soldiers said.
"That sounds good to me. Only three hours until we get off patrol.", the second soldier replied. In the deepening shadows of the twilight a tall creature approached the edge of the protective barrier, partially obscured by the blowing snow, started to crane its head around allowing its gaze to follow the three earth ponies, as one of the earth ponies turned its head looking in its direction, the creature took several steps backwards away from the barrier.
Blue Belle felt a strange shiver run up her spine, like somepony was staring at her. She quickly snapped her head back to the protective shield, she saw what looked like strange shadowy creature, it seemed to fade back into the snowstorm, "Huh?! Shaved Ice! Goal kick!", she shouted pointing her hoof towards the shield, "I think I just saw something over there! Just outside the barrier! I think it was starting at us!"
The three ponies ran over to where the creature was seen. "I don't see anything.", Goal Kick replied.
"Let's not take any chances.", Shaved Ice said calmly, "Let's get some backup just in case there is a dangerous creature out there." The three earth ponies quickly darted off towards the south as the shadows began to deepen. As the three ponies disappeared into the darkness, a shadowy figure sprinted through the magical barrier and ducked behind a crystal formation.
Looking around quickly, making sure he was alone, swung a pack off his back, knelt down brushing some snow off of it, opened it and pulled a helmet out, placing it on the ground. Quickly pulling off his face wrap and wooden snow goggles, hastily stuffed them into the pack, cinched it and slung it on his back. Picking up his helmet, he threw back the hood on his cloak, quickly shaking his braided hair and beard loose, slipping the helmet over his head. He quietly sprinted towards some small houses on his left, only some muffled jingles and clanks from under his cloak was the only sound that came from him.
As he slipped into the shadow of the wall, he could hear hoof-beats coming down the road. A dozen ponies ran past the corner where he was hiding into the open area, he gave a silent sigh, thankful he wasn't spotted. Among the ponies he heard a bell-like voice was shouting in a language he couldn't understand and pointing its hoof to where he had hidden in the snowstorm outside the barrier. Silently he cursed himself. "Forvirret! De så meg i stormen! Jeg har ikke noe annet valg enn å gå videre og ta kontakt med Sky Queens.", he thought to himself. Silently he slipped around the far corner of the houses and stole off into the night.
The twelve ponies ran into the open area, "Over there!", Blue Belle shouted pointing her hoof to the barrier, "That's where I saw that creature outside the barrier hiding in the snowstorm!"
Colonel Bright Hoof quickly assessment of the situation. "Quickly, get some safety lines secured!",he barked orders, "The last thing we need is ponies getting lost out in that storm! Especially since that creature may still be hiding out there!" As the ponies were spreading out across the open area, none of them noticed a shadowy figure slip around the far corner of a house or the insect-like creature flitting low over the roofs of the houses.
As he was watching several ponies pulling ropes out of their flank packs he heard Big Oak call to him in a thick Appleoosan accent, pointing his hoof to the base of a crystal formation, "Suh! Ah believe we found somethin' over he-ah!" He hurried over to the crystal formation and saw what Big Oak was pointing at, a clump of snow and a small patch of crushed grass.
Quickly he looked back to the other ponies, "Belay that order and form up!", he shouted. As the ponies began forming up he turned his gaze back to the clump of snow and the patch of grass. As Bright Hoof focused on the clump of snow and patch of grass he let his gaze drift first to the houses on his right, then left, finally towards the castle. "Hmm!", he said quietly, "Big Oak, I think we got a situation. I hope I'm worng, but..." "That thang is loose in the empire.", Big Oak finished his sentence.
"Alright, new orders!", Bright Hoof pointed his hoof to several ponies, "You eight, form sentries in case this thing doubles back or there are more like it hiding in the storm. Blue Belle! You are in charge here until myself, Big Oak or General Golden Baubles sends someone to relieve you. In the event you make contact with this creature, do not try to fight or capture it! Track it, contain it and send a runner so that the proper patrols can be diverted to assist you." Blue Belle saluted and started gesturing silent orders to the other seven, they began spreading out finding hidden locations to observe from. Bright Hoof started running back towards the castle with Big Oak, Goal Kick and Shaved Ice in tow, "Shaved Ice! Goal Kick! Head back to the barracks and put the eighth company's reserves on alert!" "Yes sir", the two ponies replied behind him.
Discord was in his home mulling over the letter Twilight had sent with Fluttershy three weeks ago, he was concerned about it talking about enemies gathering and a strange ally. He was even more concerned with the news of the escape of Chrysalis, "I'll need to have a meeting with the princesses, maybe have it coincide with my next tea party with Fluttershy.", he spoke to himself just before poofing a parchment, quill and ink in front of him. "'Dearest Fluttershy, at our next tea party might I request...', pausing from his writing, he noticed a strange ripple of magic he had not encountered in a long time. He reached up with his lion-pawed forelimb to gather some of the magical ripples around it, brought it up to his face to smell and taste them, "Hmm, this is some unusual magic that I haven't seen since I was a stripling. It feels almost...", his eyes widened in surprise, "...weird!"
He quickly crumpled up the letter he was writing and poofed another parchment into being. "My dearest Fluttershy, I must regretfully inform you that I will be unable to attend our weekly tea party as I have business in the Crystal Empire. I hope to make it up to you soon. XOXO, Discord. P.S. Give Twilight this message for me, 'From the north a champion which a tooth of iron decends and seeks to bring his grandfather's grandfather's labors to a close." He quickly rolled it up into a scroll and snapped his lion paw, sending it off to Fluttershy.
"Now off to meet our new friend, this should be...fun!", he then looked at the fourth wall, "Don't worry dear reader, I won't be a Deus Ex Machina...yet.", he then snapped his eagle talon and vanished in a puff of smoke with the word "POOF!" hanging in the air.
As Harald slunk from shadow to shadow, he heard the soft buzzing of insect-like wings. He quickly pressed himself flat against the nearest wall and turned his head slowly upwards. He saw a pony-sized and shaped creature with dark chitinous flesh that seemed to pulsate and twisted semi-transparent wings slowly flying to the south. "En ond tjener!", he hissed silently under his breath, "Er det jakt på meg... eller noe annet? Det ser ut til at spillet er på gang. Og jegeren skal bli jaktet."
He reached up to the hood of his cloak and undid the clasp around his neck. He slid his cloak and backpack off and silently placed them on the ground revealing his armor made of interlining rings hanging off his body, a large round shield, a broad bladed axe and long-bladed sword strapped to his back. Loosing the drawstring on his backpack, reaching in he fumbled around in it for a quick moment, withdrawing a dagger and length of cord, he then cinched the drawstring and hastily tied a knot in it. Quickly he slid the dagger into his boot, undoing one of the buckles across his chest, letting the sword and scabbard slide down, he moved it to his midsection, cinching the belt tight and re-buckling it. He turned it sideways, lashing the scabbard and pommel to his body so they wouldn't rattle around needlessly or slide out unexpectedly. He rolled up the cloak and tied it around his waist, then slid the backpack on.
Kneeling he reached into his armor pulling out a simple cord necklace with a leather talisman that had four braids attached to it, closing his eyes in reverence he held it up to his mouth and gingerly kissed it. "Far, mor, søster, bror. Gi meg din styrke når jeg jakter på denne onde skapningen.", he quietly prayed to the talisman. Taking a few breaths in and out calling on the ancient magic of his people called the weirding. After a few seconds he could smell, taste and see the magic of this place. "Takk.", he whispered to the talisman before returning it under his armor. He quickly picked up up the trail of dark magic the creature left in the air. Harald gathered shadows and silence about him and quickly scrambled up a nearby drainpipe and onto the roof, the weirding making him as silent as cats paws, the shadows clinging to him making him appear as little more than a shimmer in the night.
Harald had the strangest feeling that someone-thing was watching him, for a second he thought he saw a pair of yellow eyes looking at him from a nearby window. Blinking his eyes and giving his head a slight shake, thinking to himself, "Den merkelige magien på dette stedet er å spille triks på øynene mine."
He didn't notice the eagle's talon wave its finger in pattern behind his hip, nor did he notice the small cylinder drop from under his rolled up cloak and the lion's paw quietly catch it. The eagle's talon held up a small sign that said "SNAP!" before both hands disappeared in a wisp of smoke.
Harald continued tracking the vile creature for over an hour before seeing it flit up from an alleyway about a block away. He quickly made his way over to where the creature had flown from. Peering over the edge of the of the roof, he saw a body hastily buried in a pile of leaves, a soft gurgling coming from it, immediately knew what had happened. Letting himself down quietly off the roof, made his way over to the body and hastily uncovered the body.
Recognizing the tan stallion with dark mane and black and white checkered ball in a rectangular net as one of the ponies in the group that originally spotted him. His back had been broken and throat had been crushed. He let out a long, raspy, bloody gurgle as the light faded from his eyes. Harald crossed the stallion's hooves across his chest, gently lowered his snout to his hooves and closed his eyes, giving the stallion a small of dignity and the appearance of quiet repose. Extending a clenched fist over the body of the pony, he gave a quiet prayer over his body, "Hvil nå, dine forfedre kaller deg hjem, jeg skal se at du ikke døde forgjeves.", Harald then picked up a wedge of wood from a nearby firewood stack, smashed in a window of one house, then the window of another house and then threw it through the window of a third house before scrambling back up to the roof and bounding across a few rooftops. Harald glanced back for a moment seeing the lights on in several houses and the glint of several lanterns. Turning back to his grim matter at hand, giving a small thought that someone would find the body of that brave pony and ensure he received a proper burial.
Cadance was in the kitchen of the Crystal Palace making herself a small snack before bed. Shining Armor came up behind her and started nuzzling her neck, she shoved him away playfully with her wing. He then squeezed up close beside her and nuzzled her cheek."Nooo...don't!", she said playfully turning her face away with a small blush, "I'm a mess!"
Reaching up with his hoof and flicked one of her purple, pink and blonde curls, "Yes you are." placing his hoof under her chin and turning her face gently to his, "But you're my mess.", he gave her a coy smile pressing his lips to hers, kissing her gently. She pulled back slightly, her cheeks still flushed and rosy. She then leaned back in and returned his kiss passionately. Wrapping the hoof around each others neck and nuzzled each other, crossing their horns.
Flurry Heart walked in the kitchen, "Mother? Father? We are needed...*blech!*", she turned turned her face away squenched in over exaggerated disgust, "...needed in the throne room...whenever you're done with...", turning her face away farther and clenching her eyes shut, "...this. I've had a premonition.", she quickly turned and hurried out of the kitchen.
Shining Armor and Cadance gave a small sigh and turned to leave the kitchen. Shining Armor reached up with his hoof and flicked Cadances tail. "Keep it up mister and you'll be in big trouble!", she said playfully looking over her shoulder playfully.
"Oooo, I'm so scared!", he teased back.
"*blech!*", echoed out of the hallway.
All three members of the royal family entered into the throne room and made their way to the thrones. Shortly after they sat down they heard a small commotion in the castle. A few moments later three ponies came through the doors of the throne room, Captain of the Guard Moonlight Glint, General Golden Baubles and Commander of the Eighth Company Bright Hoof. All three approached the dais and bowed. The princesses and the prince slightly bowed their heads back. "Rise.", Shining Armor commanded in a calm tone.
"What brings the Captain of the Eighth Company and the General in this late hour?", Cadance said in a regal tone.
"Majesties...", Golden Baubles said her horn shimmering,using her telekinesis to remove her military hat, "I have received word from the Eighth company that a creature has infiltrated the empire." Cadance and Shining Armor each raised an eyebrow quizzically.
Bright Hoof cleared his throat, "One of the patrols in the north of the empire reported seeing a strange creature hiding in the snowstorm outside the barrier. After they went to get backup, Big Oak and myself went with a couple of patrols to investigate and that's when we found evidence that the creature had entered the empire. I posted several sentries near where the creature was sighted and sent a couple of ponies to reroute several patrols to assist in the search for it and I've put the reserves under my command in high alert."
"I've ordered elements of the first, fourth and ninth to assist the eighth in their search. I've also sent a request to Cloudsdale asking General Spitfire to lend us a couple of flights of the Wonderbolts to assist us in the search just in case this creature hasn't been found before the morning. I'm confident the creature won't elude us for long and we'll be able to contain and capture it."
"Be wary good general." , Flurry Heart said with an cryptic smile on her face, "This creature is cunning and won't be spotted unless it wants to be seen." The three ponies gaped her in disbelief for a few uncomfortably quiet moments, they had heard of the Princess's uncanny insights, but they never witnessed it before. Cadance and Shining Armor gave an uneasy sideways glance at Flushed Heart.
Cadance cleared her throat, rose and gave a small bow, "You are dismissed." The three ponies returned the bow, saluted, turned and quickly trotted out of the throne room.
"Captain hold a moment please,", Shining Armor called out, rose from his seat and approached the guard, "double the guards for the royal living quarters, the treasury and the throne room. Any guards you can spare, send them to assist the army in their search." The guard bowed and hurried out of the throne room. After the guard had left the room and secured the room, Shining Armor turned to Flurry Heart, "OK, now that meeting is over let's talk about your premonition. I feel you revealed a sliver of it to those three?"
"Yes father, I showed them what I felt they need to see. But to reveal to the rest of my vision, our ally has entered into the city and is currently tracking the agent of Sombra and Chrysalis, an evil and twisted changeling warped dark magic stolen from the grave of the Nameless King. As we speak our ally is stalking the enemies agent, waiting for his moment to strike and slay it. We must not reveal that we have foresight of our enemies actions or we risk losing too many lives. Discord has discovered that our ally can conceal himself in shadows and silence."
"Aww poo princess, your insufferable foresight takes the fun out of it for me.", Discord said snaking around the seat of Flurry Heart, "What would your Auntie Twilly say to you ruining all my fun?"
"She'd say hurry up and spit out what you have to say."
"Yes Discord, give my mother and father what you found. No dawdling!"
"Fine! Ruin all my fun!", Discord said puffing with faux offense, blowing a raspberry at Flurry. He produces a silk top hat, he reaches in muttering to himself "Nope!" as he tosses a racy magazine called Equestia's Big Rump Quarterly that lands open on the centerfold of Celestia with a pair of jeans rolled half way down her rump, he's pulls out a small photograph, his eyes pop out and then he laughs sheepishly tucking it back in the hat, he reached in pulling out other random things, balloons, singing teabags, Pinkie Pie's confetti cannon, "How did that get in there?" This bit was wearing thin on the royal family, he pulled out a laptop and tossed it in front of Cadance open. "Uh, don't check my history."
"Yech!", Cadence kicked the computer away in revulsion, anger flushing and twisting her face, "DIIIIIISSSCCCCCOOOORRRD! ENOUGH WITH THIS FOOLISHNESS! HAND OVER WHAT YOU FOUND NOW!", she shouted in the royal voice, panting in anger that had just boiled over.
Wiggling his fingers in his ears, "Okay! Geez, you could give lessons too sun butt and moon butt." He muttered doscontently while snapping his fingers, "No need to yell at me, I'm just along for the ride in this hackneyed story." After the small clutter disappeared in puffs of smoke Discord placed the palms of his hands together in front of him, slowly he parted them he revealing a small ivory tube covered in intricate scrimshaw. "Prrrrrincess.", Discord said presenting it to Cadance exaggerating the roll of his r.
Gently Cadance took the tube in her telekinesis and brought it close to her face. With eyes wide she slowly studied the intricate carvings that had been colored with a deep blue dye and coated in a hard substance. The scrimshaw depicted bipedal creatures holding spears hunting bears and walruses. Her eyes traced along the intricate scrimshaw depicting three alicorns pointing with heir hooves to a small valley, rolling over the tube she looked over the last carvings depicting the three alicorns each standing on a mountain peak pointing to a distant land which had two alicorns holding the sun and moon in their front hooves. Seeing a seam at one end that looked like a cap, using her magic she gently pulls it off, seeing a roll a roll of parchment yellowed with age sticking out of the end of the tube, pulling out the parchment, she put the cap back on the tube and unrolled the parchment.
It was a map, a very old map! Cadance followed the path from a land of forests and mountains in the far north across the tundra to the Crystal Empire, "It would take a pony no less than eight months traveling north across the tundra from sunrise to sunset to reach the borders of those lands.", Cadance thought to herself. Cadance continued to follow the path on the map with her eyes, noting that the Crystal Empire looked much smaller on the map than it does today, as she continued on the path laid out by the map, "Shining Armor, Flurry Heart! Come look at this!", she exclaimed. As Flurry Heart and Shining Armor walked over, Cadence showed showed them the map. Pointing out on the map the path and strange writing, "I can't be for certain, but I believe that this strange writing marks out distances and landmarks.", pointing with one of her pin feathers, "I know for certain that these two bridges, a few of these roads and this lake are no longer here. Plus the Everfree Forrest appears much smaller on this map."
"Won't our ally get lost because this map is hundreds of years out of date?"
"I think not father, though he may have a map hundreds of years out of date, he has memorized not only the route he will take, but also the distance markers on the map. Huh...?!", Flurry Heart quickly ran over to one of windows looking out over the city, she scanned across the the city until she saw lights come on in several houses and the glint of several lanterns and torches from the patrols, "There you are! Good hunting!", she whispered to herself.
"Father! Both our enemy and our ally have made their opening moves. The first blows will happen here and the first move to save Equestria happens tonight at the Crystal Heart, all before the moon reaches its zenith. Position yourself inside the door leading to the courtyard. When the sound of initial struggle dies out, quietly make your way out the door and you will see our enemy and catch a glimpse of our ally. You shall be eye witness to our first small victory."
Harald had followed the changeling for nearly two hours, unable to get close enough to attack it or even confidently throw his dagger at. Over time the castle loomed higher and higher above the city, it didn't take him long to figure out that whatever it was hunting was at the castle. A few blocks away from the changeling flits down between some houses. Quickly he makes his way to where it had disappeared from his sight.
Slowly crawling towards the edge of the house, Harald peeked over the edge. He didn't initially see it he thought to himself, "Vet denne onde skapningen at jeg jakter på den? Eller gjemmer det seg for noe?" Harald used his weirding enhanced senses to track the trail of dark magic it left behind and saw it disguised as a bush. He eased himself off the roof and retrieved the dagger from his boot, gently removing it from the sheath. Quietly he stalked towards the disguised changeling with the dagger raised prepared to strike. When he was a few steps out the changeling transformed back in a flash of red and black energy and began to quickly flit away. Harald was stunned by the transformation for a split second, he lunged forward, his left hand narrowly missed the changeling's rear leg by the narrowest margin.
"Jævla! Jeg må skape en distraksjon hvis jeg vil komme nær nok til å drepe den.", he hissed under his breath. Quickly he returned the dagger to its sheath and slipped it back to his boot. He tracked the changeling until it landed in an alley a few houses from the castle. Harald saw the changeling crouching in the alleyway across from his hiding place in the shadows. "Lykken smiler!", as he quickly assessed the situation, three ponies huddled around a small fire, a water barrel at the corner of the house near him, the changeling crouching in the alleyway, he'd have to be quick but a better chance for a distraction wouldn't show itself. Harald eased up to the edge of the shadows, untied the cloak around his waist, waiting for the changeling to make the first move, he moved his stance ready to sprint darting his eyes quickly between the ponies and the changeling. The changeling backed away deeper into the shadows, Harald reached out with his right hand tipping over the water barrel, water gushed out in a torrent over the fire extinguishing it in a hiss and cloud of steam. Immediately Harald sprinted out from his hiding place, throwing his cloak in the face of one pony, kicking a clump of muddy dirt into the face of the second and did a flying tackle into the third. The human and pony sprawled on the ground struggling with each other, Harald quickly gained the upper hand in the struggle, throwing a big punch into the face of the pony, using his strength he lifted the pony over his head and threw it into the first pony knocking them out, he then sprung at the last pony.
The pony caught out of the corner of her eye as she the dirt out of one of her eyes and quickly bucked out with her hind legs, connecting with something she heard the sound of the wind rushing out of something, her victory would be short-lived as a sharp pain blossomed in the side of head, then nothingness. Harald felt a sharp pain in his midsection as the pony bucked its hooves into him and he felt all the air rush out of him, without thinking he threw his helmet at the pony, with a clank it connected with the side of its head and it went limp. Quickly he recovered his helmet, moved all three unconscious ponies off to the side and then set out back on his hunt.
In the courtyard where the Crystal Heart was, two guard ponies were making their rounds, they saw a tan pony come running towards them. As he approached, one of the guards held up a hoof signaling him to stop."Goal Kick?! Is something the matter? What's happening", the first guard asked.
"This!", the disguised changeling said quickly bucking one guard in the face. It then leapt at the other guard transforming into a snake and wrapping around its neck, crushing it with a sickening wet crunch. Transforming into its true form, the changeling walks over to guard on the ground trying to recover, stomps sharply on its throat killing it. As the changeling reached for the Crystal Heart it didn't notice the shadowy figure quickly coming up behind it, until too late.
Seeing the two dead guard ponies laying on the ground and the changeling reaching for the Crystal Heart. Harald undid the cord securing his sword, quickly drew it, sprinted to it, slashed across its back in a downward angle, severing one of its wings and splashing thick green blood on the pavement. The changeling quickly turned hissing, Harald grabbed it with his left hand while thrusting forward with his sword, the blade easily pierced its body turning the hiss into a sputtering gurgle. In the doorway across from where he slew the changeling Harald saw a white unicorn staring in his direction. Thoughts raced through his head. How long had it been there? Could it see him? Is he friend or foe? Harald quickly shoved the body off his sword and took off towards the houses, scrambling up an awning. He decided to make a hard run to the west and follow the path on the map he had devoted to memory.
Stopping for a moment, he placed his hand to his hip, noticing his map case was gone, cursing himself, "Dammit! Jeg må ha mistet den! Ingen tid til å lete etter det! Jeg må dra vestover og finne veien som fører til Sky Queens slott.", he hissed through his teeth.
Shining Armor hid just inside the door to the courtyard like Flurry had said, almost on cue he heard some hooves running up, a quick conversation and a struggle. Slowly he opened the door, seeing a twisted and warped changeling reaching for the Crystal Heart, a blur of shadows came up behind it, thick green blood erupted from its back, it spun around hissing and the blade of a sword exploded its body. For a couple of seconds his eyes locked with a pair of blazing green eyes in the shadows. Quickly the shadowy form darted off to some nearby houses and scaled up an awning.
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You should stick with normal color print instead of different colors for each character. Makes it hard to read their dialogue.
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That's a good idea. Thank you. It'll definitely make my writing the character's dialogue easier.
Yikes, the Norwegian here got butchered hard.
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Sorry about that. I figured the site I use would do that. This is the site I've been using, https://www.translator.eu/english/norwegian/translation/
If you know of a better site please share it so when I start on chapter 3 I can use it.
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Sorry no, I don't know any translation site for full sentences never needed that for Norwegian.
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Man, how many layers of dust did you have to knock off that one?
Please get rid of the color dialogue since it makes reading the dialogue a bit annoying.
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Okay edited. Thanks for reading and giving criticism.
... Alright, so, I have some notes.
Firstly: were you trying to go for Norwegian or Norse? Or even Viking-age Norwegian? Because unless you wanted to go with modern Norwegian (and Bokmål - book speech - at that. It's funny, because your Viking sounds like a city-slicker's dictionary.) you'd actually be better off with Icelandic. Modern Norwegian is much closer to Danish than it is Norse.
Secondly: "Sky queen" is not a Norwegian word. Just... no. "Dammit" is also not a curse. You're translator just skipped it.
Thirdly: Don't try to translate lots of things. Simple words and phrases should be more than enough to get the point across. Think about it like this: people who don't know Norwegian don't understand what's being said and think it's dumb, and people who understand what's being said are wincing at the atrocious translation and think you're ignorant. It's a lose-lose situation. With that in mind, it's really enough to just say that the language was unintelligible, describe how it sounds, and then throw out some curses or something at appropriate times. It's more descriptive of how it actually sounds than just a bunch of words without context or understanding... though you'll have to find a regional dialect to stick with. Good luck with that.
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Thanks for reading and for the criticism.
1) I chose modern Norwegian for the translator site. I dropped the translator partway through the second chapter. I did think about using an elder futhark(I definitely misspelled that) translator, but decided against it as I felt it would mangle the syntax even worse. I knew I should have had his thought and speech process more direct, rather than use a translator site. I also had a bit wrote out originally where he had been taught Ponlish by the alicorns of the far north and he would have spoken in Shakespearean diatribes, but I wound up second guessing myself and erasing the few sentences. I knew better and like an idiot I went the worst way.
2) I noticed that the translator skipped those words. As for my choice of the term sky queen/king, I had put some thought into what a culture who have seen alicorns would call them, but only have familiarity of earth ponies, pegasi and unicorns from old legends.(not as deeply as I'd probably brag)
I apologize if I ruined your immersion or suspension of disbelief and will strive to do better in the future.
Dang, this is good. I regret it took me so long to read this!
Why did you make work for the english readers on an english site instead of just using italics or something?
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Poor decision making. It was a mistake to use an English-to-Norwegian translator, I own up to it but refuse to change it so I can look back on it and say to myself "This is not how you do that.", then move forward.