With each yawning bites by the dozen

Um...

and bobbing into the sea with bouncy like a waterfowl.

Ummmm...

Huh. A sun-themed pony who can read memories. Who knew Sunset was follwong in her teacher's hoofsteps?

Oh. Oh. The shoggoth-esque Lady Smooze had me suspicious. Consorting with chaos certainly explains how the creatures came to be.

He had grinned at her and asked if Aisha wanted to watch him touch his eyeball with his tongue.

Coming from Discord, that's positively flirtatious.

There's a lot of overwrought and twisted verbiage in this chapter... which is actually kind of appropriate given the chimeric horrors it deals with. Still, some of those turns of phrase are hard to navigate, especially in the front half. That said, looking forward to the conclusion.

And goodness, what does this mean for Fluttershy?

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Um...

Yikes! I just went and cleaned those up.

Huh. A sun-themed pony who can read memories. Who knew Sunset was follwong in her teacher's hoofsteps?

It's probably less intentional than you think! I tend to give her non-combative magic outside of obvious fire and sun stuff, so things like barriers, geasan, and mild memory weirdness pop up in other stories.

Coming from Discord, that's positively flirtatious.

Pickup artists must be quivering in fear.

Still, some of those turns of phrase are hard to navigate, especially in the front half.

I really hope I got them all! There's always a few that slip past any effort to have them edited and proofread out of the drafts, and Grammarly can be fickle even when human eyes miss things.

And goodness, what does this mean for Fluttershy?

Don't consort with creatures that you aren't compatible with when it comes to hybrids? Adoption?