She climbed stairs that let out onto empty balconies, opened doors that led to nowhere,
I understand why the let is in there but it also works with led
yet always before she had turned away before reaching this final chamber.
after the first before you need a comma
Something was different this time though. Something had changed.
that period after tough could be a simple comma
In her heart of hearts, this was what she knew this creature reflected what she had become.
comma after knew otherwise the sentence won't make sense
You can hunger for freedom. For love. For revenge. For destiny.
why are this periods? this is an enumeration, they must be commas, you can keep the last period tough the one after destiny
Every twisted soul here is one of our victims!
I'm pretty sure that you could actually say this with an in before here and make it sound more accurate but the way you did it is also OK
"I don;t understand,
now that's a weird spelling for don't and honestly who doesn't misstype those keys?
I did not miss this you know
comma after this even without the question mark that's the way to write that phrase
judge, jury, and executioner.
another useless coma after jury, in an enumeration and can substitute the coma, there are times where a coma before and works but only because that and is not part of an enumeration
"Though since you lot are already dead,
this sentence makes no sense i feel that there's something missing in here but i don't know what
why are this periods? this is an enumeration, they must be commas, you can keep the last period tough the one after destiny
I think I was trying to be dramatic.
now that's a weird spelling for don't and honestly who doesn't misstype those keys?
I'm usually pretty good at catching those kinds of errors though, dunno how this one eluded me.
this sentence makes no sense i feel that there's something missing in here but i don't know what
The Candy Mare is referring to all of the dead souls trapped in ice who are locked inside unending nightmares where they are essentially torturing themselves. Since they are already dead, dying from their torments just resets the scenerio of the nightmare, over and over again, making it a never ending nightmare. What might be throwing you is the phrase 'you lot' which is an idiom used to refer to a group collectively.
Pronoun. you lot. (idiomatic, colloquial, chiefly Britain, may have disparaging nuance) You (plural). You lot had better knock it off.
I always had a feeling that they were one and the same, even in the first story, there were parts of what Pumpkin desired being made through Candy Mare, wanting to be like a princess, having subjects to follow her (Candy Gouls), gaining appearances similar to an alicorn and the desire to be the ruler over all (The candified worlds and last transformation in the Cures of the Candy Cult).
If I was Pumpkin Patch, I would only agree to merge with Candy if she agrees to stop her senseless killing. The only targets they will go after from this day forward will be those they deem evil. At least then they will still have something to eat.
"bacon haired tart" ooohhhhhhh SHHH*TT that internal denial tho pronouns dont matter if they end up as food "lets get the hell out of here" i want to dead from that line but great chapter!
I like this sudden development tbh. Pumpkin and Candy getting a second chance at life, Pumpkin especially im happy for tho. She never deserved to be tormented and such. Definitely look forward to wjat happens next
I don't even know how I feel about this new development.
Top contendors: amazement with a side of bewilderment, maybe a dash of triumph
I understand why the let is in there but it also works with led
after the first before you need a comma
that period after tough could be a simple comma
comma after knew otherwise the sentence won't make sense
why are this periods? this is an enumeration, they must be commas, you can keep the last period tough the one after destiny
I'm pretty sure that you could actually say this with an in before here and make it sound more accurate but the way you did it is also OK
now that's a weird spelling for don't and honestly who doesn't misstype those keys?
comma after this even without the question mark that's the way to write that phrase
another useless coma after jury, in an enumeration and can substitute the coma, there are times where a coma before and works but only because that and is not part of an enumeration
this sentence makes no sense i feel that there's something missing in here but i don't know what
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I think I was trying to be dramatic.
I'm usually pretty good at catching those kinds of errors though, dunno how this one eluded me.
The Candy Mare is referring to all of the dead souls trapped in ice who are locked inside unending nightmares where they are essentially torturing themselves. Since they are already dead, dying from their torments just resets the scenerio of the nightmare, over and over again, making it a never ending nightmare. What might be throwing you is the phrase 'you lot' which is an idiom used to refer to a group collectively.
Pronoun. you lot. (idiomatic, colloquial, chiefly Britain, may have disparaging nuance) You (plural). You lot had better knock it off.
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I always had a feeling that they were one and the same, even in the first story, there were parts of what Pumpkin desired being made through Candy Mare, wanting to be like a princess, having subjects to follow her (Candy Gouls), gaining appearances similar to an alicorn and the desire to be the ruler over all (The candified worlds and last transformation in the Cures of the Candy Cult).
If I was Pumpkin Patch, I would only agree to merge with Candy if she agrees to stop her senseless killing. The only targets they will go after from this day forward will be those they deem evil. At least then they will still have something to eat.
"bacon haired tart"
ooohhhhhhh SHHH*TT that internal denial tho
pronouns dont matter if they end up as food
"lets get the hell out of here" i want to dead from that line
but great chapter!
I like this sudden development tbh. Pumpkin and Candy getting a second chance at life, Pumpkin especially im happy for tho. She never deserved to be tormented and such. Definitely look forward to wjat happens next
Hell to the yeah!