Good chapter. It wasn't bogged down with many errors (none that stood out to me anyway) to the point where they cause a story to lose its momentum. I thought the story moved along at a nice pace. I also like how you establish, throughout the chapter, the lack of consideration for Pinkie, on behalf of her friends, when she is offering her serious opinion on a serious matter...and how this factors into her "demise." I am reminded of "Baby Cakes" in season two where hardly anypony considers Pinkie responsible enough to watch Pumpkin and Pound Cake. I suppose that because Pinkie is the silliest of the mane 6, it might initially be difficult for anypony to take her seriously or give credence to her opinions. I like how you play with this idea and am curious as to how you'll continue the story with it (from the name of the story, I presume that we'll be seeing much more of "Serious Pinkie." Really Serious Pinkie. Dead Serious Pinkie.). I look forward to seeing more updates from this story. Thanks for writing, keep it up!
p.s. I'm sure that Spike would have taken Pinkie seriously ("Lesson Zero" reference). If only he were there with the 6 while they were bucking apples, he might have been able to save Pinkie. ...or not. lol.
Okay what the hell.
I think I shall track this.
Only to see where it's going.
~Rosalynn~
will read later. seems interesting, but will wait for more chapters and ratings.
Good chapter. It wasn't bogged down with many errors (none that stood out to me anyway) to the point where they cause a story to lose its momentum. I thought the story moved along at a nice pace. I also like how you establish, throughout the chapter, the lack of consideration for Pinkie, on behalf of her friends, when she is offering her serious opinion on a serious matter...and how this factors into her "demise." I am reminded of "Baby Cakes" in season two where hardly anypony considers Pinkie responsible enough to watch Pumpkin and Pound Cake. I suppose that because Pinkie is the silliest of the mane 6, it might initially be difficult for anypony to take her seriously or give credence to her opinions. I like how you play with this idea and am curious as to how you'll continue the story with it (from the name of the story, I presume that we'll be seeing much more of "Serious Pinkie." Really Serious Pinkie. Dead Serious Pinkie.). I look forward to seeing more updates from this story. Thanks for writing, keep it up!
p.s. I'm sure that Spike would have taken Pinkie seriously ("Lesson Zero" reference). If only he were there with the 6 while they were bucking apples, he might have been able to save Pinkie. ...or not. lol.
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I second this sentiment.
Moves on to second chapter.
Moar. Moarmoarmoar MOAR. Just.... Please don't have Pinkie murder her friends. I'm begging you.
Consider yourself liked and Favorited.
Stupid Rainbow
RAINBOW YOU FUCKING SUCK