Page generated in 0.025 seconds
Total duration
1,000 users online
1,728,533 hits today, 2,280,440 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
This needs... heavy editing. Like, there's a lot of basic stuff you missed just off the bat here in the description alone that does not give me high hopes for the story as a whole.
Some basic tips: always end a sentence with some form of punctuation, typically a period; start every sentence with a capital letter.
Oh dear. You need quite a few commas at the very least in here, and even then that would make it a block of extraneous text and run-on sentences that really should go in the author's notes of the story. At the very least, you can use [ hr ] (with no spaces between the brackets and the letters) to create a break in the text that signifies this is not part of the story synopsis.
Like this. ^
I would suggest just getting rid of that text block entirely.
You should also capitalize every word in a chapter title as well. Also, it helps to have punctuation (typically a colon) after "Chapter [#]".
Like this: "Chapter 1: The Beginning" (that's also an incredibly lackluster and boring title chapter but that's the least of the issues here).
Hopefully this helped somewhat!
9628525
sorry for the description but I knew I was going to get a lot people that have watched the show saying how I am wrong and shit like that so i had to tell why i am doing some thing how I do them
You know out of all the Huntik type shows my favorite was always kaijudo, you ever see that?
Hey, I just thought of something, what about a story where all of that comes together and all the weird card game worlds meet and the names just keep getting worse as the fic goes on. it starts off as pokemon and the characters say "ok that doesn't sound too odd" and then it just gets ridiculous with kaijudo and they say "wow that is a stupid name how much more ridiculous can it get?" Suddenly out from the distence they see it... slugterra.
That was amazing I've been hoping someone would make a huntik displaced
This is exactly what i mean by excessive use of and. It's like a toddler trying to explain something happening to someone else. No offense bro but this kind of thing can really turn people off from your story
This was a epic proper meet with the main six and the princess.
Swette? Sweetie you mean?