I was on the website https://powerlotterychallenge.weebly.com/ in an attempt to try and make a character for a story, with maybe a little bending (ok breaking) of the rules so as to get powers that makes sense together. However, when I hit the Next Page button I was met with an unexpected result. Instead of taking me to the next page my chair, and the floor under it, dropped out from under me causing me to fall onto a hard metal table where I was swiftly held down by a large number of straps.
"Ah, hello volunteer number 63720985. It's so nice for you to help us with our experiments." An androgynous voice said to me. "It's so nice have another test subj-ahem volunteer with us again." The speaker now standing over me I saw that they were wearing a lab coat fully buttoned up, their head topped with dark black hair and goggles around their neck, their piercing yellow eyes looking straight into mine.
I tried to speak only for another strap with rubber padding to snap into place between my teeth. "Don't you worry subjec-volunteer 63720985. We are only going to test a new mutation serum to see its effects on a mortal body." They said bringing the goggles up to cover their eyes.
"U-uh, Dr? Didn't we g-get ordered by the council to s-stop abducting the m-mortals and have them actually volunteer?" A quiet and shaky voice said.
"Why of course! Why do you think we made the inter-dimensional site that dose that for us?" The one above me more stated than asked.
"B-but-" The voice tried but was cut off.
"Enough! Let the test begin!" The 'Dr.' said while clapping their hands.
I instantly felt pain as a number of unseen needles plunged into me all over my body and I screamed in pain and shock. I could fell the large needles digging deep into my flesh, a fair number of them digging into my bones. The one that caused the most amount of pain priced the base of my skull and I felt it slid into my brain stem causing me to lock up, only my heart and lungs allowed to keep moving so I didn't die.
The table I was on was then lowered into a dark yellow-green fluid that had the consistency of honey that began to slowly fill my lungs, an electrical shock shot threw the fluid causing it to begin bubbling and boiling into me, cooking me alive.
But then a cooling sensation began to spread, healing me, however I barely noticed it though my agony.
How long this went on I don't know but I swiftly went numb to the pain and was eventually pulled out of the viscous fluid and left to dry. An indeterminable amount of time went by before the Dr. interacted with me, or at least tried to.
"Alright test subject, how do you feel? Strong? Powerful? Fast?" They asked me but I could only groan, my mind numb. "Isen! Take the subject to testing room 39028 and get it to test its new powers."
"D-dr. I don't think that the v-volunteer is in the right mind set to do anything right now."
"Nonsense, this is not too different than our usual mutagen. It's just meant for immortals." The Dr. said the last part under their breath. "She'll be fully cognitive by the time we get him in the testing chamber. Probably."
"I-if you say so Dr."
"Oh, before you go. Number 63720985 just remember: There is someone more powerful than you working here, and I enjoy having my labs intact."
I was vaguely aware of being moved threw an impossibly large facility and being carefully set on the ground in the middle of a room where the walls were around five football fields away in all directions. But other than that, my mind was to numb to processes anything.
"Isen," I heard the Dr.'s voice over what must have been an intercom. "What abilities has the subject displayed?"
"T-the volunteer has only been lying down unmoving D-dr." Isen sounded to be right next to me.
"WHAT? It has been three years on the subject's home planet, how is it still simply lying there?" The Dr. asked incredulously. "Never mind, it doesn't matter. We have kept our volunteer for the maximum amount of time the council will allow. Hmmm, we can't drop him off in her home world, he would stand out like a bone-saw in a ribcage. But none of its closest parallels would work either. Hmmm, Ah ha! I got it. We'll drop her in Faustian System Equis 332393."
"But D-dr. the volunteer would stand out there as well." Isen said before the doctor could simply do that.
"Then we'll put her in an inter-dimensional species changer and make him something that would make sense in that world, the powers she has will most likely have an effect on its form. We will have to make sure ze is placed far into the systems past but not so fer as to seem as unnatural." The Dr. said.
"B-but Dr, you know Faust hates it when anyone messes with her worlds in possibly detrimental ways."
"I know, Faust is also the one with the most influence on the Eldritch Council that is against me and my work." And without any more preamble the Dr. lifted me up and dropped me in what I assume was an inter-dimensional species changer and opened a portal under it. As I fell into a new world the last thing I heard was. "Now for the next experiment to begin on this one. What was their name Isen?"
"It was-"
Interesting and intriguing, I must say. While some parts are a bit confusing (The part where the main character lies in the crater), and the first chapter feels a bit rushed, I still think it has a lot of potentials and has has some originality. Sadly, I can't state any tips since there is not a lot going on in the story at the moment.
Although, there is one thing I noticed. I looked at the page, and the tiers state that you can either have 3 or 5 powers, not 4... so, what will be the fifth power? Perhaps the ability to steal the powers of other 'power lottery volunteers' that landed on the world and are evil?
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For now the powers are the result of the experimental serum and our MC might gain one or two more powers depending on how the story goes.
You may want to include a status in your story's description on if or if not the main character will be meeting other Displaced or not. Depending on which you choose, it will attract different people to your story.
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Thank you, and done.
Ooooohhhhhh.... I'll be keeping an eye on this.
Thanks for the chapter.
one question: is the random pronoun generation for the Protagonist accidental, or on purpose? Are they ‘he’, ‘she’, or what?
Do you switch bitween he/she him/her for a reason?
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The switching between pronouns is on purpose for a number of reasons.
1: The Dr. doesn't care about gender and will use whatever pronoun they please because they want to
2: The Dr. only cares to have the basics statistics, if you will, for the species their currently working with
3: I haven't decided what gender, if any, the MC is going to have
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any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
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I'm not to sure right now. I would say a couple of days minimum, or a week of three max.
Edit: Or right now.
I was doing this just now and got transcendent demon physiology
Neat
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Are you planning to do a story with it, or just having fun?