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I was laughing at this.
I'm a twisted son of a bitch.
I HAD THE MOST HAPPIEST MOOD OF ALL DAY AND......(sobs).....AND...AND....Y-YOU JUST BROKE IT!!! DAMN YOU!!! HNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGG -"Dead"
Yeah...that was almost how i feel't when i read it....
But keep it up....KEEP IT UP WITH THE GOOD PART OF THE STORY!!!
Thats it?
Its over?
Why dose the climax seem like you just got really lazy? wheres the EPIC climatic battle?
Why is Battle itself so short and sappy? Wheres the detail? The emotion? The Dialogue and insults they would of thrown at each other?
Why wasn't Rainbow Dashes Mouth raping Habit taken into greater detail? It feels unexplained and boring, Like it was just a lame self insert.
If he loves Rainbow Dash so much Why wasn't that explained in an earlier chapter? If he really did love her and she obviously loved him, why didn't they try to sort anything out?
Wheres all the epic werewolf action? If he's a werewolf, then why barley touch upon it? Why wasn't he a werewolf at all in the final battle?
If Discord made on group of evil ponies, why couldnt he have made more? Didn't he like, throw like half of Equestria the last time he was there?
Wheres the in between to discord? Why isnt there some kind of journey to discords lair? Wheres the epic encounters with groups of corrupt ponies Or one of the mane six getting captured? wouldnt it have been awesome if you were to take them across equestira? See new sights and new ponies? Save a town or two from being corrupted / destroyed?
Why did you make discord out to be such an idiot ? wouldnt he learn from his last mistake and distance himself from the elements of harmony?
Where is his epic castle that is located on the other side of equestria? The ground around the castle itself is covered in thick, gooey layers of soap, the clouds pouring chocolate rain from their enticing, sweet candy mounds, the sky a bright pink with night and day fighting for dominance in the sky and The flora have all been turned into candy or strange creatures with multiple eyes. The wildlife have been turned into strange things as well, Bucks a doe frolicking about with human legs and purple fur with antlers made of licorice? The guards surrounding the castle are Pegasus ponies in rainbow colored armor while flying upside down. Wheres all that?
What about the rest of the mane six? Don't they get an extra line or two? Why do any of them barley talk? I think they should have gotten more lines.\
Fluttershy barley said anything through out the story. Isn't Twilight going to go on a rant about discord or some kind of magical power? Why Doesn't Celestia get more screen time, eh? Where the BUCK are the cutie mark crusaders? I dont remember seeing them anywhere.
What about the in between with the fight and the ceremony/funeral? Do you think we are impatient? Or dare i say.. Idiots? cmon man that is not in the least bit exiting, cutting out so much detail and story telling opportunities. And the swearing, Mother of god, the swearing. That dirty mouth of yours made this very difficult to enjoy. What about the comedy? The jokes? Did you think that generic pinkie bullcrap was enough to make me laugh? No.
The emotion Too, where is it? Its always anger or sadness with this story, wheres the happines? The awkward pauses in conversations? Why are the pauses that are there lined with so man .'s ? Stuff..... Like this.............. isnt.............. fun to.................... Read.........
What about the shows? The MLP:FIM and MLP:FIS? Why were they just mentioned and then forgotten? That would have made a very interesting conversation piece. The characters discussing how each of their episodes played out and what their favorite things about them were. And what about christian seeing himself on screen doing things he probably never did?
*sigh* There is just SO MUCH you left out of this story. You just dropped an ending on us without warning. So many lose ends, so much blandness and unexplained subjects in here.
Why did you do this? Why did you make the story the way it is, please enlighten me.
Cheers
~iraqlobster
damn alternate ending
i liked the first ending better
69689 dude *sniff* keep your bad thoughts to yourself... I'm gonna cry...
WTF! Sad ending for the fail!
i dunno why but it was kinda funny
THATS MORE LIKE IT YES