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So, this is the calm before the literal storm, eh?
I think the time skips mostly made sense and, whether you intended it or not, the somewhat blurry line between them pretty accurately conveys how the days, weeks and months on the boat just blur together. At least in my mind. I can't imagine there would be a lot of things to do, and after a while they'd all just fall into their routines and the days just blend together.
Also, because of this, I think having each time segment as it's own chapter would've been both hard to write and not very interesting to read, unless each chapter was relatively extremely short. Sure, some segments would've had more time for backstory, cuteness, or whatnot but I feel like the confrontation scene in particular wouldn't have benefitted much, if at all.
Long story short, the format worked well for me in this chapter, so good job
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Well that's a relief to hear. I'm glad you liked the format better this way :)
I didn't think the chapter's time skips were confusing. I think it may have been stretching it more than needed to have them all in separate chapters (unless they were going to be somewhat shorter), so in the end it worked well. Also, curious: was the theme chosen cause of the increasingly rapid progression of time, similar to how Time gradually speeds up at certain parts?
I'm glad to see that Jason and Eddie eventually seemed to have at least somewhat worked things out, quelling the understandable bitterness Eddie had. Gotta say though: that Rebecca and Melody thing kinda came out of nowhere. Not sure if it was a spur of the moment joke, or if this is slowly going to become a thing.
Curious to see how they survive that colossal wave.
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You're dead on with the Time thing. That was exactly why I chose that particular piece. As for Rebecca and Melody... Well I'll leave that up for interpretation ;)
*snort*