Dreams and Uncertainy
The purple mare felt her breathing go heavy, her face flushed at the blurry sight before her. A tall being stood before her, she felt uncertain, he had his warm hooves wrapped around her. All of a sudden, she wasn't even certain if it was hooves that were holding her so dear, so close . . . all she could think of was that it was her beloved Flash Sentry, though he was never this warm and inviting. She couldn't help but melt in the arms that held her, a heavy sigh escaping her lips.
" Oh, I see someone down there is getting a little comfortable? " The voice was almost inaudible due to her current state, but the tone of the voice irked her the wrong way. The warmth faded, and she took a silent step back. The eyes peering down upon her were bright red, they observed her closely.
A huff escaped her jaws, she tilted her head. " What do you want? " She said, as if she knew who this was. For some reason it was a big blur, she had suspicions, but she wouldn't jump to conclusions, no-no, she had to analyze the situation.
There wasn't a clear response, only a hoof or whatever it was tracing down her chest, a warm smile came to her in an unexpected way. She didn't understand, she didn't know who this was, did she? Why did she feel so happy around him?
" Twilight... " The breathy voice sent tingles down her spine, she bit her lip a bit, she tried to observe, surely he was tall, she knew many tall stallions. Though he didn't have the same vibe as Flash, it was so different, exciting even?
She felt her hooves wrap around the being, whomever he was, and she stared directly into his eyes. That was the most distinct part she could see. Wonder and desire enlightened in those eyes, she probably returned the same look to this stallion, though she could see a wall like he was hiding so much, it almost made her want to learn more, to discover him.
" Whom are you...? " She whispered, he didn't respond, she didn't understand why exactly. You're here holding her so tightly as if she meant everything, yet you wouldn't even open yourself to her? Something about all of this seemed rather fishy.
" You are mine, before you knew it, you were always mine. You and one other opened my heart, though a bit of fun never hurts, a bit of settling down is alright too from what I've learned. " His breathe was heavier, Twilight's eyes softened, whomever this was she knew had to be someone she cared for.
His grip softened, he cleared up a bit, and the only thing she could see was this blurry figure with distinct eyes leaning into her. The mare couldn't help but part her lips, they still held eye contact, their lips barely apart, their was a small gap in between them both. As soon as she leaned in enough for the contact to be true...
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" Ahh! " She awoke from her dream, how dare she perform such acts with someone she probably didn't know? Oh how her brain was deceiving her and distracting her, afterall, she had been reading quite the good book but alas her body had to fight against her and make her rest.
" Twi! Celestia needs you! " Spike walked in, a smile formed on his face, but he noticed Twilight's tired and confused expression. He tilted his head in concern. " Everything alright, Twi? " The dragon's concern only increased with every moment.
" . . . Y-yeah. I've just been up all night reading this great novel, enough about me though, what does Celestia need? " She tiredly muttered, rubbing her eyes with her hooves. Twilight sighed, Spike was seemingly more concerned with Twilight then whatever Celestia had planned.
" Oh... well, she said she's doing a 'romance night' or whatever fancy name she gave it, it's supposed to help you and some other mares and stallions finally find some love. " Oh just great, she didn't need anymore romance, that dream was a fair share, and whomever she was in that dream wasn't her. Afterall, she did have someone. A handsome stallion who was kind stole her heart already, even if they weren't official yet.
" Spike, tell her I appreciate the offer, but I already found some 'love' as you put it. " She muttered, though she felt a little bad, she was acting out of her tired mind, she could really use a nap. The mare didn't enjoy being grumpy, she sighed and calmed herself down, even if she didn't snap, she felt like she had a rude undertone just waiting to be unleashed. " . . . I'm going, come on, it'd be fun to get you out of this castle. Even Starlight is going! She's going with Trixie, I honestly think something is going on there if you ask me . . . " Spike chuckled at the last part, Twilight cringed a little at the thought of her friend with Trixie. She didn't hate Trixie, but perhaps she didn't approve, though she had no right to say anything. She felt her mind getting side tracked, she shifted her attention back to Spike.
" . . . " Spike gave his award winning grin, before Twilight rolled her eyes, but a smile creeped on her face. " Fine.. only for you Spike. " She had a hunch that the dragon also wanted Twilight there for support, Spike would be trying to woo Rarity afterall. Though these words sent confusion down her spine.
" Are you going to get a date? " She froze a bit, but her mind wandered to Flash, the smile returned eventually. " Oh, going after that royal guard guy again, huh? Predictable. " Twilight's cheeks lit up, but she didn't have any particular remarks.
" S-so... is Celestia bringing a date or is s-she going to just search for love... or do none of the above? " She stuttered a bit, a low cough coming from her, trying to change the subject desperately. Spike thought for a moment, but his face lit up.
" I think Discord is going to ask her! When we were hanging the other day he was talking about not going, but he froze whenever I started joking about him going with Flutters or Celestia.. but knowing how Fluttershy is like family to him, I'm assuming Princess Celestia is going to get a date. " She was almost outright disgusted! How dare the lord of chaos take interest in her mentor? No, she has to calm down. At least Trixie and Starlight talked often, Celestia and Discord avoid eachother! Must be a rumor. " . . . Ah. Well, when is it? " Twilight turned her head, she felt a little more awake, though her mane still messy, she had almost forgotten about that dreaded dream that made her regret even falling asleep. Spike checked a clock, he shrugged a little.
" An hour probably. " The purple mare's eyes widened automatically, her breathing heavy.
" AN HOUR?! Why are you just telling me this now?! I have to tell Flash! I-- " She was running around and teleporting, Spike was a little taken aback by this, but he realized his errors, he probably should've told her sooner, but he assumed Twilight didn't want to be bothered. The past week she's just been reading and sleeping, it's unlike her, but I guess everyone has their moments.
Twilight was brushing her hair like there was no tomorrow, and she assumed at the moment there wouldn't be, it was put into a bun and she slipped on the best dress she could find within ten minutes. The dress was long and covered most of her, it was a nice light blue color, it easily complimented her purple coat. She clipped in accessories, earrings that sparkled and set in nicely with the dress, and she put on light makeup.
" . . . Ugh! " She was rushing about, before a small little gasp stopped her. Spike stared in awe for a moment, before smiling a bit, Twilight always did work and think best under pressure.
" . . . Twi, you look great! " Twilight stopped, a small smile formed on her face, her anxiety melted away as she stepped forward and gave spike a warm embrace. She didn't know why, it felt right, just the fact that this little dragon could melt away her stress with a couple words and a smile was so strange to her, but she loved it more than anything.
" . . . Thank you Spike, you always look great. You're adorable. " She gave a light pat to her best friend, and tilted her head, with a heavy sigh she let go, the small dragon appreciated the gesture so. As much as she'd love to sit here and just talk and such, she had an event to go to. Twilight and Spike set off, a little early, afterall Twilight doesn't want to be a minute late.
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Discord was roaring with laughter, he had played a simple prank on Celestia. The princess wasn't too happy about it, afterall, she wanted to look her best, alas she loved a good prank but this night was suppose to be about love, not pranks.
" Oh lighten up Tia! You know you're laughing on the inside. " His grin was smug as he tilted his head, Celestia gave a small smile, though she wasn't all to amused. Usually she'd enjoy it, but she expected Discord to act a bit more mature.
The two continued babbling on about what they enjoyed, Celestia enjoyed speaking about her sister but Discord couldn't help but ramble about things in the chaos realm.
" You really should visit sometime! I believe you would enjoy no-gravity, being stuck down here isn't all too fun. "
Though, ponies poured in, dancing already began and so did clinking of cups. Nothing all too interesting, though Twilight Sparkle finally found herself in, she slowly gave Spike an understanding nod as the dragon quickly raced to Rarity with a flower in hand, he would 'woo' her as he put it, and he'd dance with Rarity if everything went according to plan.
Twilight on the other hoof couldn't spot Flash anywhere. The stallion wasn't anywhere to be seen among the crowd of ponies, the mare let a sad sigh escape her. Maybe he'd come eventually? For now she'd maybe try and talk to friends.. well...
Rainbow Dash was with Soarin, Fluttershy didn't seemingly attend because she wasn't all too big on romance and would feel shy and left out here, Rarity found herself being talked to by two males which included Fancypants and Spike, Applejack was doing the usual and selling apples and anything like it, Pinkie Pie was dancing and making a party over in a corner with Cheese Sandwich, Trixie and Starlight were obviously together, everyone was occupied!
Though her eyes wandered to Celestia, she was speaking with Luna and Discord, though her eyes seeped into Discord automatically. Something struck a flame inside of her, a familiarity, without knowing it her cheeks flushed. Eventually the Lord of Chaos felt watched, and his eyes struck contact with Twilight's.
He took notice that her eyes were bright and wide, he didn't understand why he deserved this look. The creature didn't understand why he of all people deserved this, he usually got a sneer from her or a look of disgust. Though, seeing her like this made him crack a smile, though it vanished quickly.
Twilight didn't tear her eyes away, though a stallion broke the staring of wonderment, he happened to be Flash. Discord hid his anger in the slightest, though the orange stallion was holding a flower, Twilight's flushed face faded. She smiled and chuckled.
" I'm so sorry I'm late...! " Twilight chuckled at his words and was about to speak before the stallion held out his hoof slowly. Twilight gave a glance to Discord, he was holding out a paw for Celestia, and they begun to dance, jealousy filled her a bit, not because of Discord surely! Maybe the jealousy was because it was romantic to be dancing together, held close by warm arms, and... just in the air above everyone else and looking eachother deep in the eyes--
Flash coughed, which caught Twilight's attention once again. " Oh, I'd be happy to dance with you Flash, just don't step on my hooves. " She chuckled, he tilted his head with a small laugh. The dancing was nice to say the least, nothing enticing that drew you in, but she enjoyed it nonetheless. The slow music made her captivated somewhat. Though her eyes shifted to Discord, he was talented, strange...
Her mind wandered, remembering the times they had spoken, it was so full of life and experience, there was an enticing person underneath that jokey persona, and she was determined to find out who he was. She is curious about everyone, afterall. Though Discord tried to keep his eyes off Twilight, Celestia was a beauty to say the least, he wasn't complaining.
" Enjoying the dance, love? " He muttered, which snapped Twilight out of her thoughts. She nodded quickly, no words escaped her, just a hopefully convincing smile. She loved Flash, no doubt, she was just out of it today. Though she felt off by the nickname 'love.' Flash's heavy breathes came toward her, he was leaning in to give her a kiss.
She happily accepted it, she felt her wings open a bit in surprise, though it was a safe kiss, yet it brought a blush to her face and a smile. She felt his hoof traveling down her dress. Discord growled at the disgusting display of that. 'Hello, it's a public area, go get a room!' he wanted to shout that oh so bad, but he kept his primary focus on Celestia, despite his low jealousy he wouldn't admit.
Twilight's moan was a bit too suggestive, she pulled away before she could continue. Flash's face was redder than a tomato, she chuckled. She gave him a warm nuzzle. He returned it. Though the music seemed to stop in a calm manner, most people were switching partners, Twilight sighed.
" . . . Perhaps we should go dance with a couple other ponies? " The stallion suggested, which made Twilight a bit upset, she was enjoying the moment, they could've easily continued looking into each other's eyes as if there wasn't a tomorrow or a day after that, but alas, she was pushed away.
" ….Alright. " She sighed, Discord lowered and gave a silent bow to Celestia.
Ponies scattered left and right, Flash found himself with Luna oddly, and as ponies paired off, Discord found this dancing thing no longer amusing, though as he was turning, he saw a certain pony in the crowd looking for someone who'd dare offer her a dance. She seemed unamused by the lack of volunteers and those turning away from her, he couldn't help himself, he tipped the fedora he wore with his fancy attire and approached Twilight.
" . . . ? " A paw in a glove was extended toward her, he stared at it cautiously, Discord for once had no words. He just had a grin, though it seemed softer than usual, Twilight gave an uncertain look. Though her hoof found its' way into his, and she was lightly pulled to him. Her face was red and a smile creeped on her.
" You're lovely at dancing. Just thought I'd say that-- I--I mean... well, you're really good for someone I never expected to-- " It was the usual nervous Twilight trying to strike conversation. Discord tilted his head, his chuckle was amused.
" You pick up a thing or two after spending an eternity in stone. " The mare was confused at that, though she just gave a smirk, and rolled her eyes. Though she was lifted into the air, automatically she felt like how she wanted to feel.
The few times they were alone were heaven, for Hearths Warming Discord had given her the best gift she could ask for, not just a plain book, sure she loved books, but there was more to her than that, she hoped ponies would see that. She honestly was entranced by this man, he was so unique in every single way. She wondered how he felt.
Her hooves slowly roamed him, nowhere risky, just holding him close as best she could despite his tall stature. She didn't exactly realize her actions, she just really did feel at peace. Discord arched a brow, he chuckled muttering something that only made her heart stop. " Oh, I see someone down there is getting a little comfortable? " She looked up at him in wonder.
" You... "
" What about me? I did try a new glorious hairstyle if you're wondering. " He chuckled lightly, Twilight didn't know how to feel, emotions swarmed her, it was just a dream, why are you overreacting? Discord of all beings can't make you feel like this. Just no! Flash is your one and only love. Though she felt herself being dragged toward him, Discord seemed confused but seemingly he had the same thoughts, he wanted away, but at the same time he never wanted something more.
They gravitated toward eachother, mere inches away from eachother, they gave eachother suggestive looks, she blushed as his heavy warm breathe was so close to her. This odd tension... though the music ended as if on cue. Twilight felt her face finally rip it's way from Discord.
" . . . " He tried to hide the words 'Well that was anti-climatic.'
They dropped to the floor, still close in someway, but Flash pulled her away from him. It gained a slightly irritated reaction, which didn't go unnoticed by Twilight.
" Come on, one last dance! " He gave a quick kiss to Twilight. " . . . And after how about you and I find a private room? " Twilight turned red, Discord approached and anger surged through him.
" Actually she's doing something with me later. Sorry to cut your pleasure . . . " He seemed smug, Twilight was still speechless, she couldn't find words for anything or anyone. Did Discord just invite her on a date? Or was it something casual... or did he have something chaotic and 'annoying' planned? By annoying she means funny and different from her usual routine.
" Twi, come on, this guy is just bothering us-- " She inhaled and gave a small smile to Flash. Surely this 'thing' with Discord would be platonic, she loved Flash afterall. But he was moving a bit too fast for her. She hadn't even accepted to be his mare friend, and he already wanted to bed her? Ugh. She understands kissing and gentle touches, but any thing more at the moment is too much for her.
" No, I'm going with him later, sorry Flash. Tomorrow? " Twilight muttered suddenly, which made Discord pleasantly shocked, and Flash a bit upset.
" F-fine... " The orange stallion turned his back, and gave Twilight a peck on her cheek, which earned a smile from her, but turned to Discord right after, who was leaning on something.
" So what do you have planned? "
i hope you like!! please leave a comment, it means a lot that people might care about my work. aha.
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Oh this is going to be fun!
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Lmfao. DISCORDing Twilight's mind and make her fall in love with him in a cringe way possible... Don't you dare do that. OwO
Gotta take cover, before the shippers see this
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oh my god, i never thought of this song fitting??? and i frickin' love wicked! this is great.
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yeah, shippers are real scary man, including myself. you're smart to take cover
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she isn't really in love with him at the moment, pretty much tension and hinted interest, love is a whole new territory 🤷
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ejiouyiojk, glad you're excited, i spent a lot of time writing this so yeah. twicord isn't as popular as some other ships, it needs some love. though not my favorite ship, it's pretty good so i wrote this.
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I based the decision entirely on the title.
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ah, that makes sense, i didn't intend for it to be a lyric to a wicked song, but it's fine all the same.
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thank you!!
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aaa, it means a lot to hear that, thank you!
Oh No's. Another ship i might get enthralled by
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you better run before it pulls you in like it happened to me.
Wait.... why is Celestia doing this event? Shoyldn’t This be Cadence’s forte?
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it is, but celestia hosted it for her own reasons, in which cadence has zero clue about. you have full right to be confused, but i have my reasoning and I'll be sure to explain it in further chapters.
Looks good so far. I am intrigued! I like it XP
What in Gods name do you have planned, Tia
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oh, thank you!! and celestia just has a few things up her non-existent sleeve, mwhahahaha.
Oh heeeeeell to the yes 😍😍😍 OTP
Already love it :3 very excited for more
Not really happy with the choice of some standard ships. In that case the choice for Twis 'lover' being Flash
I wouldve been happier with any other atallion haha
But thats fine ^^
Just please dont make the mistake of pacing this too fast <3 i wanna savior this 😍😍
Feels a bit fast paced already :3 so rather take your time ❤❤❤
Im awaiting the next chapter eagerly
Greetings
Chris aka. Nerfy
Not a bad story just feels a little rushed is all.
Will this ever continue?
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i 100% have been distracted, i've been on vacation all summer. but i'll continue soon! i just seem to forget, and i ask my friend to remind me, but he never does. so yeah. i also do art commisions, but i worked hard on this chapter so i really should. so yeah, it will continue one day.
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sorry for the super late reply, but since i've taken a break i've improved a bit. so next chapter won't be rushed at all! ty for feedback.
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sorry for the late reply, haha, finally going to continue this soon. i just needed a big ol' break, and ty for the feedback so nice of you to say. i promise to try not to rush.
hmm... a little fast pace but not too bad I think I have an idea of what you are going for here. I hope you get unbanned soon so you can continue this story.
So firstly, I wanna say that everything that follows is my initial opinion, and I am in no way attached to it. I want you to do the best that you can and am simply suggesting my own ideas for you to either adopt or help you brainstorm your own. (also sorry for the wall of text)
Firstly I gotta say that I enjoy Discolight quite a lot, probably one of my favorite ships, there are quite a few ways that I've seen in done, and the way you appeared to have picked is the 'suddenly in love' and the 'cosmos just makes it so' strategy. Which I personally think is a bit of a shortcut and not all that fun to read. What I personally would've liked to see in this first chapter, is exactly what it was, but cut out everything about discord that happens before she actually sees him. (I know this is a bit of an exposition chapter, but those are still very important, as you likely already know). I would have cut out the dream and have Twilight gone to the party intending to go with flash, and when she sees discord to give him the polite smile or what have you, maybe some internal thoughts on him, but otherwise have her just be neutral to discord. The part where discord helps her against the apparently pervert Flash Sentry can be the tipping of Twilight's neutrality towards Discord from Neutral to Positve. Have them hang out for an evening with discord trying real hard to make Twilight smile and maybe he asks her if they can spend more time together, and suddenly you have your premise for the first arc of the story. You see what I'm saying right? Having Twilight's interest in Discord happen over a period of time, with her getting used to him, while Discord vies for Twilight's attention. And maybe you have the turning point from Twilight just liking Discord as a friend into liking him romantically happens when say Flash tries to take advantage of her and Discord steps in, or in a more general sense, just use Flash as the catalyst for Discolight to happen. Again, I'd like to see a more gradual growing likeness between the two rather than having twilight questioning her love for him from the getgo of chapter one. That's all I think of the story aspect so far.
As for your writing in general, I see no spelling errors or grammatical mistakes, so that's real nice! grats!
I do, however, see a common problem (that some may not consider a problem, and sometimes it isn't) about details. You give quite a few, in fact, I wouldn't even label this as being a huge problem since this is mostly an exposition chapter and those are usually quite fast to get to the meat of the story. But just for future reference, describe more things, describe how Twilight feels when she wakes up, how heavy her comforters are, how bright the room is. This helps with story flavor as well as length if that is an issue. To be clear though, I don't think this is a problem for you and expect the tiny flaw I saw in detail to be fixed up in following chapters since this is simply an exposition chapter.
But aside from wanting a slower approach to the romance and slightly more details in the story itself. You're golden so far.
And again, my opinion is subject to change, I just want to give you my first impressions so you can properly gauge what I'm trying to say. Good luck!
-Noobblue