Quick note: When characters address one another, put a comma before the name. That makes it easier on the reader and helps avoid misunderstandings. For example:
This
"I want to come inside Rainbow Dash!"
has a totally different meaning than
"I want to come inside, Rainbow Dash!"
To take an example from the story:
"Ok this puts new light on things Ocellus."
This sentence could very well mean that it puts light on all things Ocellus, rather than being directed at her.
Ok so I have found a Grammatical error, and I gather were intending to make it old English, However, you're using it the wrong way and as such makes it difficult for OCD Authors like myself to simply pass by. Here is what I propose.
She was currently sat down in the library with her friends studying. Was it the test that was coming up tomorrow? No, it couldn't be.
She was currently sat down in the library with her friends studying. Twasit the test that was coming up tomorrow? No, it couldn't be.
The word Twas is an old English way of saying Was it or it was, another example of this is 'Tis' it means: it is.
This is going to be an interesting clop
Quick note: When characters address one another, put a comma before the name. That makes it easier on the reader and helps avoid misunderstandings. For example:
This
has a totally different meaning than
To take an example from the story:
This sentence could very well mean that it puts light on all things Ocellus, rather than being directed at her.
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Ok so I have found a Grammatical error, and I gather were intending to make it old English, However, you're using it the wrong way and as such makes it difficult for OCD Authors like myself to simply pass by. Here is what I propose.
She was currently sat down in the library with her friends studying. Twas it the test that was coming up tomorrow? No, it couldn't be.
The word Twas is an old English way of saying Was it or it was, another example of this is 'Tis' it means: it is.
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