Hmm. Now the plot thickens, no pun intended, as we appear to see Spitfire in genuine surprise as to what is happening.
First impression was Spitfire was kind of in control of the situation to some degree. Potentially a co-conspirator. However her mess, and how she felt about it, appear to tell another tale. One, as I'm sure we'll find out, will illustrate what bizarre creature could be behind such shananigans.
This was a lot better to read though the chapter, I think that you are getting better in characterizing all of them I did love the Spitfire messy diaper. I will be looking forward to the next chapter, keep it up.
I see Rainbow's conflicting feelings are stemming at least in part from how her parents treated her.
Hmm. Now the plot thickens, no pun intended, as we appear to see Spitfire in genuine surprise as to what is happening.
First impression was Spitfire was kind of in control of the situation to some degree. Potentially a co-conspirator. However her mess, and how she felt about it, appear to tell another tale. One, as I'm sure we'll find out, will illustrate what bizarre creature could be behind such shananigans.
9211424 She might still be, but it's possible who she's working with double crossed her when Rainbow Dash didn't sign on right away.
This was a lot better to read though the chapter, I think that you are getting better in characterizing all of them I did love the Spitfire messy diaper. I will be looking forward to the next chapter, keep it up.
A better chapter than the first. Glad that I chose to continue reading. :)