Reincarnation, it allows for old souls to be new again at the cost of their memories. Atleast that is how it should happen. Now I have another life, and the memories of my old ones.
One minor fix is needed. When Sunset is explaining to Celestia why she wants to stop being her student at no point in that paragraph is she ever identified as the speaker.
I wonder how long it will take before these two decided to head to the chapel? They are perfect for bedside one another.
Well, I have to say, I'm a bit, disappointed? Yes, that's the word.
I didn't mind the small to moderate time skips at first, I just think that it was a wasted opportunity to slow down the pace. The MC and Sunset were already well into their twenties, they moved into a town where they became celebrities overnight, after their land purchase stimulated the infrastructure and public works.
To then just hash over several years as if they were nothing and made the two appear as hermits.
No chance for life, no character developments, just cliff notes to accomplishments. The MC is nearing his 30's, this story is Mature rated, and there is a sex tag but if you're telling me this story is going to see that near anyone from the Mane 6, who're all around just entering or around the legal age, that's fucked up.
I'm still going to follow along, to see where this goes.
9211107 The time skip was maybe a but much. However, the mane six are in 1000 adults that have been out on their own for several years. Rainbow has been promoted at work, pinkie has been at the cakes a while, rarity has a successful business. Both rarity and apple jack are considered to be mature enough to take on a motherhood role for extended periods. Shining armor, who is only several years older is captain, which is several promotions in.
Have to say this before I forgot but at one point in the chapter you say it’ll take 6 months for the house to be built but when the house gets built yo-yo say it took 6 weeks so which is it months or weeks?
And with my liking of this story, it has a 10:1 ratio, Yay
"our new home" smooth. Flash got game, and with a germane accent who can say no.
One minor fix is needed. When Sunset is explaining to Celestia why she wants to stop being her student at no point in that paragraph is she ever identified as the speaker.
I wonder how long it will take before these two decided to head to the chapel? They are perfect for bedside one another.
Inches.
Make allowances or may allow.
Inches.
Nice to see a fic where Sunset and Flash work. Really looking forward to seeing what happens next.
More please
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Errors fixed. Thank you for spotting them.
Well, I have to say, I'm a bit, disappointed? Yes, that's the word.
I didn't mind the small to moderate time skips at first, I just think that it was a wasted opportunity to slow down the pace. The MC and Sunset were already well into their twenties, they moved into a town where they became celebrities overnight, after their land purchase stimulated the infrastructure and public works.
To then just hash over several years as if they were nothing and made the two appear as hermits.
No chance for life, no character developments, just cliff notes to accomplishments. The MC is nearing his 30's, this story is Mature rated, and there is a sex tag but if you're telling me this story is going to see that near anyone from the Mane 6, who're all around just entering or around the legal age, that's fucked up.
I'm still going to follow along, to see where this goes.
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The time skip was maybe a but much. However, the mane six are in 1000 adults that have been out on their own for several years.
Rainbow has been promoted at work, pinkie has been at the cakes a while, rarity has a successful business. Both rarity and apple jack are considered to be mature enough to take on a motherhood role for extended periods. Shining armor, who is only several years older is captain, which is several promotions in.
Have to say this before I forgot but at one point in the chapter you say it’ll take 6 months for the house to be built but when the house gets built yo-yo say it took 6 weeks so which is it months or weeks?
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months, thank you for spotting that error. it is fixed now.
Yayyy.
Nails nightmare in the face with a fucking tiger 2 xD
Lol. I doubt roads are paved at all.