A 2.5k word fic written within less than 60 minutes? Impressive.

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WITH 11 minutes left to do a quick edit ^.^
I type fast...

Not bad.

Genuinely surprised at the quality and length of a fanfic written in 50 minutes. Honestly, I'm sorta jealous of that kind of talent.

This was pretty good for being written in under an hour. If all the stories are going to be close to this level, then I'll be ready for whatever you throw my way.
-SoI

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Horses and by extension ponies don't have fur...otherwise, the sexy teims was sloppy and great. Straight to the point which I lurve and the sheer *ahem* length of the fic to allow a decent amount of set up before jumping into the main course is really quite admirable. However I didn't really like your take on Twilight's personality in the set up portion, as her mannerisms seemed to be jumping all over the place (she'd call someone "silly" but never "silly filly" unless she was doing a Pinkie Pie impression), but I simply and fully enjoyed her indulging in her Big Mac attack fantasy. The awkward lead in followed by the almost manic demeanor she put on because she knew it was just a fantasy while simultaneously giving into it. It was ze magicks.

Another thing: lots of clop writers seem to forget that the flanks are well, on a pony's sides. Hence, flanks. Translation being that Changeling!Big Mac's belly would be slapping against dat ass, unless Twilight had been laying on her side on the floor as he was pounding into her, practically lying on top of the other pony as a result of their stark difference in size. Just let that image sit in your head and really enjoy it.

ahaha hey Loyal how long are your work shifts ? XD 8 hours ? ... hehehe
thumb up and fav, to bad i allready read it xD

1016290 Flanks are the part between the ribs and the haunches, right? Either way it has been adopted to mean the side of the haunch in the show, what with blank flank and all, so I don't mind anymore. I do believe there's some... inconsistency in horse anatomy there as well, in my native language I often hear people refer to the side of the haunch as "flankene." Not sure what is going on there.
I thought fur was the 'hair' on the pelt?

Anyway, this was pretty good, some instances of hoofs instead of hooves early on, and of course the silly filly remark.
The only thing that bugged me was the sudden mention of G-Spot, it feels a bit clinical, and with the current disputed status it just feels a bit odd.
Always try to avoid clinical terms or measurements. Like never describe the length of a penis in inches, or the size of (human) boobs by bra-size.

This was a pretty good entry for a speedclop! Good job!

Err....what? ...I'm going to go hide in the little corner in the back of the room now, and slowly shake back and forth in increasing panic. Bye now.