Rae Starlight, a pegasus from Stable 68, has her world shattered one day by the Steel Rangers. She flees into the Equestrian Wastes and begins a journey to save not only herself, but those other ponies of the Wasteland.
.42 Caliber? Used by a Steel Ranger? .45, sure, it was standard issue at the time, but .42 is a bit odd of a choice, considering that's a way outdated blackpowder round. Though, 42 is somewhat of a special number for those asking questions, so I'll let it slide.
Still, all said and done, it's not a bad opener. A bit quick and condensed, but not bad! And while I have yet to read the other chapters out (and I will be reading them shortly) I do have to say that it does feel like you've played this opening a bit safe, and spared a lot of details about the Rae. Again, that's not bad, it's just an observation I had.
Hey, congratulations on starting your story and props for clean spelling and grammar! I'll certainly be keeping an eye on this
.42 Caliber? Used by a Steel Ranger? .45, sure, it was standard issue at the time, but .42 is a bit odd of a choice, considering that's a way outdated blackpowder round. Though, 42 is somewhat of a special number for those asking questions, so I'll let it slide.
Still, all said and done, it's not a bad opener. A bit quick and condensed, but not bad! And while I have yet to read the other chapters out (and I will be reading them shortly) I do have to say that it does feel like you've played this opening a bit safe, and spared a lot of details about the Rae. Again, that's not bad, it's just an observation I had.