8881173 Thanks! I have a number of story ideas for this fic (some that may or may not be based on mostly-true events), though Stalled Out will be something of a reoccurring series in the anthology, with at least 3 parts in mind at present. Gay fiction is a little less common here in Fimfiction, but given the character of most bronies I've met, I'm somewhat surprised at at that! Then again, maybe it's just the circles I hang out in...
Lovely, just lovely, and of course with everyone's favorite trap/sissy/fucktoy/pet stallion, Shining Armour. Not sure what about Shiny makes him so readily crafted into the perfect submissive, but I'm not going to argue.
8881262 I know, right? He's just so fun to turn around that way! Maybe its because of his lofty stature, his handsomeness, and the fact he's a married stallion so that he can instantly be twisted into something a bit more kinky with a few creative strides? That, or he almost married a giant bug, so that might have something to do with it.
Brilliantly executed. No boring parts and no moving too fast, actions and dialogue feel natural, and you use just enough descriptions to give a mental image but not get in the way of action. There are many M/M clopfics here, and even many with sissy/crossdressing theme, but such quality is a rarity. Only 33rd clopfic in my favorites, and I'm on this site for almost 6 years. I'm looking forward for new chapters, especially ones with Shining in them.
By the way, you probably should not call these ponies feral in the description, I understand now that you meant non-anthro, but before reading I thought you meant non-sentient horses.
8881500 You flatter me, but I am happy to hear such kind words! My proofreaders quite liked it too, so I am happy all the moving parts came together for yah. I suppose since I was a furry long before a brony, I'm used to calling these kinds of horses feral; but then again, how would non-sentient horses have bathrooms? I suppose "show-style" is a more accurate term them. I'm fairly far in the 2nd part of this little mini-series, but I have another chapter in the works that will come before that, featuring a certain enterprising stallion on vacation in Las Pegasus~
8883959 Yeah, think you left a comment like this one on that story too. As I said there, it's a style thing-I like the sound-noises myself, and most of my proofreaders do too, but I can get why some people might not. It also likely doesn't help that most of my writing is lewd-oriented RP rather than writing fics, and that's generally how my main partner writes. Perhaps I'll see about writing my next story with that in mind, try to go without them if I can and see how that goes? As for An Equal Burden, I have a few short tales I wanna finish up first, to put out a few small fires for future compilation-tales (including 2 for this one) before I dig into that. Thus, it'll be later than I originally planned, but I'll have more stories published in total which; given my previous record of 2 stories in a single YEAR, is already big improvement!
One suggestion I might have in the meantime (since I download fics I like and save them so I can read them without internet and have them all in once place, in case the fics are removed by the authors), is to remove the sound-words from a text file of the story if you download it, if they're that distracting? I do things like that with certain fics I save, like deleting passages with fetishes or scenes I don't like. I don't find it disrespectful or anything. just gettin' to the parts you like!
Thank you, there is such a dearth of decent M/M clop around here, and now we finally get an ANTHOLOGY from a writer who knows what they're doing. Looking forward to more. I enjoyed this read, but sometimes the stranger was really pushing it for me. Things like:
"G-Gettin' closer now, sissy! You'd better swallow it all, dumb bitch, or I'll come in there and beat you up for wastin' a drop of my seed,"
Really took it from me seeing him as just cocky to a real asshole, perhaps even dangerous. Would he have really done that or was that just him piling on the aggressive motif during the moment? If the guy is really that violent Shining should really think of having him dealt with (if he even has the nerve to find his balls and identify the guy at this point).
Yeah, I know. I'm missing the whole point of a clopfic.
Still, this is really promising. Can't wait for some dolled up Shining Armor.
8899830 Glad you like what you see so far from this little collection! I understand that some of the dirty/degrading talk is a bit on the harsher side, since everypone's got a threshold on that kinda thing. Mine is pretty high, since degradation is one of my top kinks, so I took it as far as I thought made sense of the stranger as I view him. He is certainly a kind of dick, no pun intended, but I don't think he'd really beat Shining in this case.
The way I see the stranger is that he's the kind of macho, blatantly-homophobic guy who'd never admit to doing anything gay in public and brags about all the chicks he bangs, but secretly takes a real liking from gay sex as a top. To him, banging or getting a BJ from a stallion is a boon to his masculine ego (after all, he's such an impressive example of maleness that even faeries are going down on him willingly!) and he doesn't see what he's doing as gay. Thus, he props up that masculine image with threats and degrading remarks, to distance himself from the fact that he's doing it and make it seem like he's doing the sub a favor. He's somewhat based on someone I know IRL, if they were secretly into gay sex.
Great work, everyone is leaving such big comments, but I just wanted to say it's awesome! I love gay Shining stories as I can kinda relate. Also I totally thought this story was going to involve a cock cage from some reason, though thinking about it now I don't think that would work in a pony world.
Anyway keep it up I hope you feel inspired to do a lot more!!!!
8920372 Thanks! Glad to hear from anypony who likes what I make, whether it's a small or big comment. I've got plenty of inspiration, but it's always a question of time for me; however, I think that by the end of this month of the beginning next, there's a good chance that we'll see an addition to this compilation. Gay Shining is a fun stallion to write for so many reasons, given how much of a stud he's presented to be in the show, but how much smaller and nerdier he's shown to be in comparison to the more jock-like stallions of the guard. It's like he's asking for it!
Wow! just found your story though while reading a fic by The vclaw in also liked section. I want more...if that isn't too much to ask? whenever you start writing or update this one.
8923868 It's certainly near the top of the list! I've got Part 2 of this particular part of the compilation, and the second little story for this, nearing completion; though I wanted to take a few days after my finals finished to relax before I focused on them. In the coming weeks, they'll get some attention. Glad you like it so far!
Hmm, interesting concept. I'll be keeping an eye on this one.
8881173
Thanks! I have a number of story ideas for this fic (some that may or may not be based on mostly-true events), though Stalled Out will be something of a reoccurring series in the anthology, with at least 3 parts in mind at present. Gay fiction is a little less common here in Fimfiction, but given the character of most bronies I've met, I'm somewhat surprised at at that! Then again, maybe it's just the circles I hang out in...
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Lovely, just lovely, and of course with everyone's favorite trap/sissy/fucktoy/pet stallion, Shining Armour. Not sure what about Shiny makes him so readily crafted into the perfect submissive, but I'm not going to argue.
8881262
I know, right? He's just so fun to turn around that way! Maybe its because of his lofty stature, his handsomeness, and the fact he's a married stallion so that he can instantly be twisted into something a bit more kinky with a few creative strides? That, or he almost married a giant bug, so that might have something to do with it.
Brilliantly executed. No boring parts and no moving too fast, actions and dialogue feel natural, and you use just enough descriptions to give a mental image but not get in the way of action. There are many M/M clopfics here, and even many with sissy/crossdressing theme, but such quality is a rarity. Only 33rd clopfic in my favorites, and I'm on this site for almost 6 years.
I'm looking forward for new chapters, especially ones with Shining in them.
By the way, you probably should not call these ponies feral in the description, I understand now that you meant non-anthro, but before reading I thought you meant non-sentient horses.
8881500
You flatter me, but I am happy to hear such kind words! My proofreaders quite liked it too, so I am happy all the moving parts came together for yah. I suppose since I was a furry long before a brony, I'm used to calling these kinds of horses feral; but then again, how would non-sentient horses have bathrooms? I suppose "show-style" is a more accurate term them. I'm fairly far in the 2nd part of this little mini-series, but I have another chapter in the works that will come before that, featuring a certain enterprising stallion on vacation in Las Pegasus~
8883959
Yeah, think you left a comment like this one on that story too. As I said there, it's a style thing-I like the sound-noises myself, and most of my proofreaders do too, but I can get why some people might not. It also likely doesn't help that most of my writing is lewd-oriented RP rather than writing fics, and that's generally how my main partner writes. Perhaps I'll see about writing my next story with that in mind, try to go without them if I can and see how that goes? As for An Equal Burden, I have a few short tales I wanna finish up first, to put out a few small fires for future compilation-tales (including 2 for this one) before I dig into that. Thus, it'll be later than I originally planned, but I'll have more stories published in total which; given my previous record of 2 stories in a single YEAR, is already big improvement!
One suggestion I might have in the meantime (since I download fics I like and save them so I can read them without internet and have them all in once place, in case the fics are removed by the authors), is to remove the sound-words from a text file of the story if you download it, if they're that distracting? I do things like that with certain fics I save, like deleting passages with fetishes or scenes I don't like. I don't find it disrespectful or anything. just gettin' to the parts you like!
This was a good read, I hope to see more of this in the near future.
8884515
Thanks, glad you liked it! The follow-up to this is certainly in the works.
Thank you, there is such a dearth of decent M/M clop around here, and now we finally get an ANTHOLOGY from a writer who knows what they're doing. Looking forward to more. I enjoyed this read, but sometimes the stranger was really pushing it for me. Things like:
Really took it from me seeing him as just cocky to a real asshole, perhaps even dangerous. Would he have really done that or was that just him piling on the aggressive motif during the moment? If the guy is really that violent Shining should really think of having him dealt with (if he even has the nerve to find his balls and identify the guy at this point).
Yeah, I know. I'm missing the whole point of a clopfic.
Still, this is really promising. Can't wait for some dolled up Shining Armor.
8899830
Glad you like what you see so far from this little collection! I understand that some of the dirty/degrading talk is a bit on the harsher side, since everypone's got a threshold on that kinda thing. Mine is pretty high, since degradation is one of my top kinks, so I took it as far as I thought made sense of the stranger as I view him. He is certainly a kind of dick, no pun intended, but I don't think he'd really beat Shining in this case.
The way I see the stranger is that he's the kind of macho, blatantly-homophobic guy who'd never admit to doing anything gay in public and brags about all the chicks he bangs, but secretly takes a real liking from gay sex as a top. To him, banging or getting a BJ from a stallion is a boon to his masculine ego (after all, he's such an impressive example of maleness that even faeries are going down on him willingly!) and he doesn't see what he's doing as gay. Thus, he props up that masculine image with threats and degrading remarks, to distance himself from the fact that he's doing it and make it seem like he's doing the sub a favor. He's somewhat based on someone I know IRL, if they were secretly into gay sex.
Great work, everyone is leaving such big comments, but I just wanted to say it's awesome! I love gay Shining stories as I can kinda relate. Also I totally thought this story was going to involve a cock cage from some reason, though thinking about it now I don't think that would work in a pony world.
Anyway keep it up I hope you feel inspired to do a lot more!!!!
8920372
Thanks! Glad to hear from anypony who likes what I make, whether it's a small or big comment. I've got plenty of inspiration, but it's always a question of time for me; however, I think that by the end of this month of the beginning next, there's a good chance that we'll see an addition to this compilation. Gay Shining is a fun stallion to write for so many reasons, given how much of a stud he's presented to be in the show, but how much smaller and nerdier he's shown to be in comparison to the more jock-like stallions of the guard. It's like he's asking for it!
Wow! just found your story though while reading a fic by The vclaw in also liked section. I want more...if that isn't too much to ask? whenever you start writing or update this one.
8923868
It's certainly near the top of the list! I've got Part 2 of this particular part of the compilation, and the second little story for this, nearing completion; though I wanted to take a few days after my finals finished to relax before I focused on them. In the coming weeks, they'll get some attention. Glad you like it so far!