Nice!

Ohhhh please I hope that blueblood is in the next chapter so he gets his ass handed to him big time! Or maybe blueblood is not an ass in this story?

8284615 Have to get magi DNA somehow.

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Why do I have a bad feeling about this?

some God offers him a deal "I'll give you superpowers and you get to fuck about. It'll be funny either way, hope you don't mind making friends."

Let me guess: Discord.

So you decided to bring in a few different universes in this chapter. Not a bad start, should be interesting to see how our little enemy reacts to all their plans being torn to shreds.

Although one piece of info you never specified our glorious main character learning was any knowledge about the Princesses. So him knowing Luna is being rehabilitated to modern day society after 1000 years breaks the fourth wall into him knowing MLP:FiM's timeline and such.

I like how you're not blending our culture with there's and showing differences. It really helps to flesh out a stories own universe.

Also with Chris being the Avatar, is this after or before Legend of Kora? Cause if it's after he won't have access to all the previous Avatar's lives because of the events that happened in Legend of Kora. But along with that do you plan on him learning each element at a time or are you going to "help" him learn with say finding other benders if there are any. (Mass murder may or may not ensue) (God, I may have doomed us all)
Kinda interested just what path you want to send him on to earn his full power as the Avatar.

Hmmm, just had a thought. Maybe Chris should keep his full potential (Him being the Avatar) from higher powers until he actually needs them. He's already Op as fuck without them. But that little detail is like an assassins blade just tucked away, never seen, but always ready to kill.

Anyways enough ranting, I don't care how much time you really take with each chapter, the more time you ponder over each chapter the better they can come out. Especially if edited, nothings better then a good crisp story that flows well.

8285588 He is aware that he's in the show, but since it's an alternative universe he isn't using his knowledge until he is certain everything is the same, or as close to as possible, because a random character might have a different name or personality. All he is doing is assuming everyone is who the look like.

It is from before legend of Korra. I never found the time to watch it anyway. I was planning on him only using the Avatars skills in moments when they are needed or when an opportunity presents itself.

He already has somewhat basic knowledge of earthbending as you seen in earlier chapter but all he can do is pillars of stone. Since Luna is going to be sending him on spying and/or assassination mission around the world in the future he might just discover something that may push his progress further.

Random question: How do you feel about genocide? Just saying it might or might not happen. Depends how I feel when writing. Shouldn't be anything important either.

8285023 it's not Discord. It's actually an OC I made. If you think Chris is OP then this guy is off the charts. If you want to know more about him feel free to ask.

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Well you never explained the fact that he knows where he is to the reader when writing the story. Instead you just assumed we all would extrapolate.
As for genocide, well, we'll see

I'm finding this story to be extremely funny, also, if you wish to screw with the denizens of this world, I think it would be fun to bring them a true 'Nightmare' just a suggestion.

8289104 Wot. Seriously, what, are you talking about people like Nekros and Decay or a different type of nightmare. Please elaborate, I'm rather confused.

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A new one, go OP if you want, screw it, unless you don't want more power?

8299386 Time think of a name. On another note, did you say you were getting Destiny. You also may or may not get a random, surprise visit today. I got stuff to talk about.

"I'm as heroic as cancer"

An idea I'll like to see is a 'Symbiotic Infection' or whatever a better name would be...
By that I mean those infected by the Virus instead of puking their guts out, it gives them 'Enhance Healing'. In exchange when they die the Virus takes over the body and returns to MC for absorption. A bit grim but meh still win-win if you ask me

8375255You propose a good idea. Just to be clear, however. I said he was as heroic as cancer because Chris veiws himself as a killer not a protector.

There are a lot of grammar errors in this. My advice is to get into contact with a proof reader. It isn't hard. Just go to their group page and you should be able to find your way from there.

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Or... Just scan with grammarly

ahora le toca tratar con la realeza

Personally I find this story a little fast paced, maybe if we spent more time with the Protagonist in the forest, and we were given more descriptions on his powers and abilities, while also limiting his power ups thanks to the black light, however I do think this story has potential, I would advise referencing it with other authors, I would also recommend reading stories similar to this one, like Star eater, Angel of darkness, or Bar Monday’s.

The approach of the princesses with Chris is quite unrealistic, and the lack of reaction of instant regeneration and the consumption of a demon is just off putting. I was expecting the princesses to have a aggressive response to Chris’s power. Also the noble offer make sense, but Knighthood and then secret assasin tittle in less than 1 minute and a half after being name noble makes no sense. This just make the story look extremely rush and unorganized. All this is constructive criticism, I just giving my opinion as a reader, putting all this aside, I like the concept of the book and how you wrote the fight scenes

9485763 In my defense, I wrote the first few chapters on my phone at, like, two at night out of boredom than any real desire for a story. Hell, the only reason I continue this story is because I hate starting things and not finishing them, lets not even get started on my ability to procrastinate, seriously, there are months between certain chapters.

Regardless, while I may not do anything with your criticism, I do appreciate that you care enough to give it.

I fucking LOVE this dudes humor keep it up

"Yes, would you be kind enough to show my guest to one of the gues rooms?" Celly asks her. Hearing her orders she looks aroind the room and sees me... Then blushes? The fuc- Oh wait, nevermind, I look like Lucifer and he's pretty high up on the handsome scale.

Tell me he'll use that to his advantage at some point, maybe even gets the power of desire from the show at some point