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SHES GONE PLAID!!!
Haven't started to read this yet, but couldn't resist following the instructions.
First of all, 'se' shouldn't really be there. If you meant to write 'so', it doesn't belong at the start of a sentence anyway. Conjunctions (and, but, if, so) should never start a sentence although people do it all the time, even I'm guilty of that. And if you either correct or remove it, please capitalise whatever is left at the start.
Secondly, 'ir' should be 'or'. The comma before the 'ir' is fifty-fifty on whether it should be there. You didn't need it as putting a comma before a conjunction is unnecessary because a comma is just there to put a break between separate points in a sentence. However, feel free to leave it in place as that's called an Oxford comma and is a recognised grammatical rule.
Finally, 'noticy should be 'notify'. That's everything.
Proofreading your own work is always difficult so I understand mistakes. When I first started this comment I only meant to correct those few mistakes and leave it at that. I may have gotten carried away. My apologies if this seems insulting or anything. Will read the story later and see what I think.
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Ludicrous speed activated!!
(be glad that I didnt use the ship full of A-hole's gag)
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I Fixed it!
That is usually what sentences look like just after I type them, then I have to go back and correct the fat fingered typing, I get as many errors as I can, then I move on, aaaand sometimes I miss a couple or just don't notice them, causing things like that to happen.
By the way I always like constructive criticism, so don't worry about sounding a bit insulting
8125322 Ok, when I read the story I'll constructively criticise anything I find. I just found the irony of correcting a sentence asking you to correct things too tempting to resist.
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I will admit that it was hilarious thinking back on it, honestly im slightly sad that I corrected it.
8127967 I'd keep it and put an addendum under: 'I know that's bad, but for irony's sake I will not remove it'.
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Re added to the best of my memory.
8129856 I directly quoted it, so you don't really need memory.
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Oh yeah.....well it's back.
Why doesn't she call upon her sword?
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Why not call it mid flight or at the battlefield? If you can just summon it whenever it is needed, (no being in a forest somewhere doesnt count) it doesn't matter when... Also having a sword suddenly fly off into the distance? Not very stealthy.