Cheese Pizza basically sums up what's on my mind right now, but lets elaborate on the current plot you have so far. Being the sick son of a bitch I am, I predict that Tootsie will engage in sexual intercourse with Shady Daze and get caught in the act. Shady Daze's mom/dad will probably relay this news to Lyra and Bon Bon leading to an explanation of the history behind Tootsie's "character". Lyra and Bon Bon become emotionally distraught because of this which might lead to their separation. Alternatively Lyra might just not have the same feelings for Bon Bon, either way the lead to the same result. Some shocking deus ex machina is revealed and then surprisingly everything is fixed, and that's how I believe this story will end. If you would also be so kind please give this a look. Heads up though, this isn't exactly safe for work.
848406 Damn I wish I had that, so if you'll excuse me I'm going to describe how I kill Fluttershy in the most gruesome of ways until chapter two comes out.
This story... Intrigues me
Hopefully, just hopefully this won't end the way I think it will.
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How do you think it will end?
Cheese Pizza basically sums up what's on my mind right now, but lets elaborate on the current plot you have so far. Being the sick son of a bitch I am, I predict that Tootsie will engage in sexual intercourse with Shady Daze and get caught in the act. Shady Daze's mom/dad will probably relay this news to Lyra and Bon Bon leading to an explanation of the history behind Tootsie's "character". Lyra and Bon Bon become emotionally distraught because of this which might lead to their separation. Alternatively Lyra might just not have the same feelings for Bon Bon, either way the lead to the same result. Some shocking deus ex machina is revealed and then surprisingly everything is fixed, and that's how I believe this story will end. If you would also be so kind please give this a look. Heads up though, this isn't exactly safe for work.
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Well, I'll just say this, I'm not saying if you are right or wrong.
Not sure if I like this or not. I am interested in finding out what this dark secret is though, so I'll keep reading.
It took me ten minutes to write that, I'm going to need a less ambiguous answer then that.
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Or just some patience.
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Damn I wish I had that, so if you'll excuse me I'm going to describe how I kill Fluttershy in the most gruesome of ways until chapter two comes out.
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Kay.
Very interesting, if I may say so myself.
But I'm no expert by any means of the word, but pushing the fact that there is something the audience doesnt know seemed a bit exessive in places.
I do however, cant wait to see if my predictions are correct.
I'm curious to see where this is going, though I fear where it might go... Tracking anyway!
Isn't the school single-roomed?
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Very well written!
Just how many orphanages does Ponyville have that two people going to the same one can be considered a coincidence?