After years of surviving alone in the Everfree Forest, Atchmon has finally found respite in the town of Ponyville. However, he's reluctant to call the peaceful pony town, home. He'll have to learn what it means to be a Man in a mare's world.
Really empathise with Atch here. Well, the part about him not having a deep passion and feeling unspecial, not the weird pony pedo stuff. That felt a bit out of place in a story that hasn't really had deep sexual undertones so far.
11835238 Yeah, I'm still considering cutting that part out and just leaving it his looks and discomfort. The jail part has always been a quiet fear of his and will be relevant as a fear as the story goes on. And I thought the three 'P's was funny..
Also "no deep sexual undertone", I'm pretty worried and am sure I mention his dick every chapter...
11835305 Nah he should just leave it. The length only becomes an issue if the overall story was going to be short and it looks like this Cutie mark ark will last a while if it’s even resolved before something else happens.
11835305 11835341 I plan on making Cutie Marks part of the background from this point on. They'll come up every now and again, but I'm not going to be doing fully detailed scenes of him doing activities of him trying to find it. They'll be mentioned to a more focused degree than the mentions of talks with Rarity.
I don't see it as at all entertaining if I regurgitate all the info any fan should already know. Unless I have a different interpretation of it.
Aw, Bloom has had bad luck, and might be developing eating disorder/body image issues.
Button Mash had better be ready with a Lvl 5 Chromatic Orb to save his fair Sweetie from the interloper. BG1 and 2 version, of course. Nopony likes the shitty 5th edition rules. Non-neutral bards and druids is blasphemy.
Cheerilee certainly deserves all the study-session cuddles.
11837301 twilight be easy he ask her to teach him and she be swooning before the first book open, he get a job on the farm to make some cash and be a hard worker applejack be interested then, and rainbow he think she lame and not care about being fast, bam she be doing it out of principle to show she awesome
11837329 AK and Rainbow are easy ones, but Twilight is going to be a different beast. I have an idea of what to do, but idk if I should. I never intended this to be one of those stories where he gets with all the mane 6. But the background characters are fair game!
11837803 cant wait to see it then, once thing i like Atchmon put his foot down the mares here would be shocked by that, not used to seeing a stallion take charge in anything be funny regardless really enjoying this fic keep it up
11838595 Thank you for your comments! They keep me motivated. Those subjects will be addressed in the future. Atchmon has some learning to do. But after the first day things will speed up.
*elsewhere* Tree of Harmony: "Dang! I should have made him a griffon! Griffons are interesting. Griffons are cool! Oh well, sucks to be him. Next human that pops in, definitely a griffon. Or a dragon. Or a nirik. Or a yetti. Yettis are cool Maybe yetti. Or a rabbit. Or a badger. Hmmm what did the last human get turned into--oh, yeah, now I remember! A crystal tree! Now THAT was a good choice......"
11840482 Glad you're with us! Not the first time someone suggested a griffin, while I understand the change up. There's loads of opportunities to be had and themes to explore when they're ponies.
He'll get a cutie mark eventually. And it won't be good for anyone.
11840842 Technically by pony standards they are of age. I just haven't gotten to that part of explanation yet. But they are hindered by societal expectations like earning a living an providing for the herd.
Which is why Twist and the other girl gripe at Snips, even though they were in the same class as applebloom and the other CMCs, they are technically young adults now making their way in life. Whereas the CMC are finishing their basic schooling. Since they got their CMs pretty late.
So if your only gripe is as shallow as "ewe too young", then you shouldn't read the popular main stream works out there. Lots of implied underaged sex in those. Human ones.
11840972 You should know your white knighting is going to be wasted here. I don't listen to people that haven't written anything. Much less an account without a profile pic.
I wasn't planning on writing much of Atch and CMC together, but maybe I will now. Thanks for the motivation!
Really empathise with Atch here. Well, the part about him not having a deep passion and feeling unspecial, not the weird pony pedo stuff. That felt a bit out of place in a story that hasn't really had deep sexual undertones so far.
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Yeah, I'm still considering cutting that part out and just leaving it his looks and discomfort. The jail part has always been a quiet fear of his and will be relevant as a fear as the story goes on. And I thought the three 'P's was funny..
Also "no deep sexual undertone", I'm pretty worried and am sure I mention his dick every chapter...
Another banger, keep em coming!
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I'd consider cutting at least some of it out. It's a plot point that goes on for way too long.
11835305
Nah he should just leave it. The length only becomes an issue if the overall story was going to be short and it looks like this Cutie mark ark will last a while if it’s even resolved before something else happens.
11835243
Don't cut anything. His strugles with alien body is one of the reasons why I read your story. You have mature tag for a reasons.
So
More Fast update?
Please?
"I was denied. Critical. Need-to-know. In-formation!" Great reference. Tremors 2: Aftershocks.
Also, is it just me or does it sound like he literally has no legal rights or personal agency until he has a mark?
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I plan on making Cutie Marks part of the background from this point on. They'll come up every now and again, but I'm not going to be doing fully detailed scenes of him doing activities of him trying to find it.
They'll be mentioned to a more focused degree than the mentions of talks with Rarity.
I don't see it as at all entertaining if I regurgitate all the info any fan should already know. Unless I have a different interpretation of it.
11835571
Love those movies!
Yeah, but also this is coming from angsty teens that haven't had their marks for very long. So they are kind of projecting their expierences.
11835243
dont, it fits with him being in a body where he cant control his biological reactions and a complete lack of pony cultural norms
Aw, Bloom has had bad luck, and might be developing eating disorder/body image issues.
Button Mash had better be ready with a Lvl 5 Chromatic Orb to save his fair Sweetie from the interloper. BG1 and 2 version, of course. Nopony likes the shitty 5th edition rules. Non-neutral bards and druids is blasphemy.
Cheerilee certainly deserves all the study-session cuddles.
Damn, that boulders good!
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All of the mistakes he's bound to make would make Discord happy
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currently he aroused every mare he come into visual range of, im expecting the great stallion claiming war at this point
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Nuh-uh! Not twilight, or applejack, or rainbow Dash...
Not yet anyway.
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twilight be easy he ask her to teach him and she be swooning before the first book open, he get a job on the farm to make some cash and be a hard worker applejack be interested then, and rainbow he think she lame and not care about being fast, bam she be doing it out of principle to show she awesome
11837329
AK and Rainbow are easy ones, but Twilight is going to be a different beast. I have an idea of what to do, but idk if I should. I never intended this to be one of those stories where he gets with all the mane 6. But the background characters are fair game!
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honestly i think this is one of those times i dont think rarity willing to share
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They'd have to make a hell of a case to Rarity, and be open to Atchmon's unique situation.
so he used to be.. native American?
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Yeah, she's said she desires an exclusive relationship. But I got a funny idea that I think fits into her Element.
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cant wait to see it then, once thing i like Atchmon put his foot down the mares here would be shocked by that, not used to seeing a stallion take charge in anything be funny regardless really enjoying this fic keep it up
I’ve really enjoyed this story so far. I hope Rarity finds her resolve soon, because MC’s going to have a line forming pretty quickly.
I worry that his panic attacks will return if he travels to any cities without better acclimating to pony culture and crowds in Ponyville first.
Has he decided anything about working for Sweet Apple Acres or helping with the critters at Fluttershy’s? He did say he used to work with animals…
Will MC confess to Twilight and Rainbow Dash or something to help her with her legal battle?
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Thank you for your comments! They keep me motivated. Those subjects will be addressed in the future. Atchmon has some learning to do. But after the first day things will speed up.
Atchmon's eventual cutie mark:
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*elsewhere*
Tree of Harmony: "Dang! I should have made him a griffon! Griffons are interesting. Griffons are cool! Oh well, sucks to be him. Next human that pops in, definitely a griffon. Or a dragon. Or a nirik. Or a yetti. Yettis are cool Maybe yetti. Or a rabbit. Or a badger. Hmmm what did the last human get turned into--oh, yeah, now I remember! A crystal tree! Now THAT was a good choice......"
In other news: I'm finally caught up!
11840482
Glad you're with us!
Not the first time someone suggested a griffin, while I understand the change up. There's loads of opportunities to be had and themes to explore when they're ponies.
He'll get a cutie mark eventually. And it won't be good for anyone.
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Technically by pony standards they are of age. I just haven't gotten to that part of explanation yet. But they are hindered by societal expectations like earning a living an providing for the herd.
Which is why Twist and the other girl gripe at Snips, even though they were in the same class as applebloom and the other CMCs, they are technically young adults now making their way in life. Whereas the CMC are finishing their basic schooling. Since they got their CMs pretty late.
So if your only gripe is as shallow as "ewe too young", then you shouldn't read the popular main stream works out there. Lots of implied underaged sex in those. Human ones.
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You should know your white knighting is going to be wasted here. I don't listen to people that haven't written anything. Much less an account without a profile pic.
I wasn't planning on writing much of Atch and CMC together, but maybe I will now. Thanks for the motivation!
Thanks for keeping the story going, eagerly await more!
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thanks! next one coming up quick!
Great chapter. And its ok if you mention his dick in every chapter... I mean-- I'd be pretty interested in the subject if I were in his situation LOL
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Right!? I haven't read another fic like it, that has Atchmon's priorities.