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Just wondering: are you Irish?
7778629 Irish/Scottish.
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7775228 I knew Papa Discord would be pleased.
7778842 Told you
7779106 For you my friend.
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After reading through your critique 4 times I have to agree on a few points you made regarding the characters I have created. Using ones nationality and upstanding facial hair construction, though not a tried and true way to build a character... Wait, it's actually not how one should build a character at all.
I really want to address your critique without sounding like a big "If you don't like it, don't read it" pansy because honestly those kinds of people infuriate me to know end. So in order to really get into the nitty gritty of my style pertaining to "A Bartender in Equestria" I have to go down the proverbial rabbit hole. I write "professionally" for a series of journal sites and blogs by rating items, games, and equipment for industrial work. Most of my writing in that sense is technical and quite frankly boring as all living hell. During my 4-5 year hiatus from this site (and unfortunately the fandom since I'm only on season 4 currently) I wrote technical analysis' and didn't really get to "let loose" and go "party hard" with my fiction. Originally this tale was going to be a one shot 3 chapter porn fic to get out of my system so... there that is out in the open.
So one night a week ago while hosting a writers group online I got incredibly shlickered. While we were writing on random prose one came up "A paddy drunk gets warped to an alien world" The story I wrote used the MLP: FIM universe and it was trash, drunken garbage (though I've been told this version is just as trashy) but the thought stayed. Recently I've gotten deep back into my families irish/scottish heritage after being away from them in a completely different environment for 3 years so the resounding re-immersion into the ol' Clarney family values has left me... strangely giddy in my writing. My family and friends inspired the characters and as the Author I'll admit readily that these characters aren't as fleshed out as I'd like. The reason for this is because I want to try growth through experience. I never expected people to read this story to be frank. "Moon Phased" was my pride for years and though I do write romance, quick fiction, and breakroom stroke novels I still wanted to try something new.
Your critique is just and quite honestly it hits the nail on the head. I'll still write it as it is now however and perhaps down the line I'll put out a more fleshed out story with true blue character development and progression. Because this story, though I love it, is silly at it's core and that is exactly what I was aiming for.
Also spoiler I bet Twilight would be a fine BDSM slave pony bound up in leather over an H cross section suspension build with a nice apple stuffed into her petite maw while a slew of mares and stallions drooled to themselves in an entirely carnal setting surrounding the quivering mare.
TLDR; Ok
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Wait... did they just ... damn.
Lol, solaire of the moon right here