When the fate of a kingdom is entirely up to biological chance, Celestia searches for a means to combat an ever-present menace, and finds exactly what she is looking for.
I have told me they make the whole process feel more... exotic
'I have been told they make me'
“Children are a rarity in Equestria in halls of those in power,”
i... this rolls of the tongue oddly. I dont think theres anything wrong with it.
drawing in and out with equally casual pace,
This needs I think an 'an' after with. Also the whole 'equally casual' bit seems a bit add when there was nothing prior that was mentioned as being casual.
He is unusual, yes, but we have had plenty unusual specimens delivered over the years,
motion
'I have been told they make me'
i... this rolls of the tongue oddly. I dont think theres anything wrong with it.
This needs I think an 'an' after with. Also the whole 'equally casual' bit seems a bit add when there was nothing prior that was mentioned as being casual.
need an 'of' after plenty
Damn that was a hot chapter.