Ok so, I'm going to be straight up, no sugar coating, you need to learn better english before you continue. If this isn't your first language, then points for trying, but you need alot of practice to get good at it. I'm going to keep track of the story though, it has potential.
Awww, this sounds great! Reminds me of The Walking Dead in many ways! And that's just from the long description!!!
The Walking Dead S01E01 Beginning
Rick Grimes wakes up from a coma in hospital, only to find out that the world has been taken over by a zombie apocalypse.
This story
Rainbow Dash wakes up from a deep sleep, to find out everypony else has turned into a bat-pony.
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That does sound awfully familiar, doesn't it? Did you somewhat base it on The Walking Dead by any chance? It doesn't matter of course, but I'm just saying.
i've already added this to my "read it later list and to rmind me that i still need to finish, i'm going to put it in my tracking library, though all the grammar and stuff really bugs me
It looks good, so far. But why do you tag 2nd person when it is 1st person?
Ok so, I'm going to be straight up, no sugar coating, you need to learn better english before you continue. If this isn't your first language, then points for trying, but you need alot of practice to get good at it. I'm going to keep track of the story though, it has potential.
Ignore all those below and do what you do best. It passed moderation. Learn from the comments and expand.
7638473 Thank you my friend. I already got an editor to help me on the next one.
7638560 I offer my services when able.
7638585 I appreciate that.
This story has potential. I'm intrigued, I will track this. In a few chapters will I finish my vote, just to see where this goes.
I can pre-read for you if wanted, I'll get on with the story in my free time.
7639152 Thank you.
Awww, this sounds great! Reminds me of The Walking Dead in many ways! And that's just from the long description!!!
The Walking Dead S01E01 Beginning
Rick Grimes wakes up from a coma in hospital, only to find out that the world has been taken over by a zombie apocalypse.
This story
Rainbow Dash wakes up from a deep sleep, to find out everypony else has turned into a bat-pony.
==========
That does sound awfully familiar, doesn't it? Did you somewhat base it on The Walking Dead by any chance? It doesn't matter of course, but I'm just saying.
:) This is very good, but your grammar needs a bit of work. Otherwise, it's great.
Good start, I'm gonna track this story and see where this goes.
i've already added this to my "read it later list and to rmind me that i still need to finish, i'm going to put it in my tracking library, though all the grammar and stuff really bugs me
Interesting first chapter but yeah it needs an editor badly