Dash To Hell
written by ppg1998
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Not bad. trollestia back
A nice start. Will we get a flashback on how Rainbow became a demon?
Nice. Could swear I've read it before, a long time ago, at some points, which would make this a huge improvement.
(reads description) Sounds like Ghost Rider.... but worse.
Wow. An interesting first chapter. I like it!
Oh! and if you require a proofreader, PM me.
Good story I want more or you die
Woah woah woah woah woah
Woah.
Woah.
I am nearly 100% positive this is a resubmission because this story had an absolute shit like rating.
Bad author. Bad.
Hm, that was good. I suggest you to get an editor, towards the end the errors were multiplying and the narrative was getting sloppy, but apart for that it's an interesting story, that I'll follow with pleasure.
7462779 I'm like 95% sure of the same.
So yeah. Bad author.
7464038 the story is about introducing a demon. what other weather should be appropriate?
I really love the idea of this story i cant wait untill the next chapter
7490111 I'm new to writing, I'm trying to find a editor, but it's harder then you think.
Don't be offended by this but I'm going to take a shot in the dark and say you are either new to writing or to the English language. The idea is great and could make a very good story, but there are a ton of errors and it is pretty rushed. If you are just getting the hang of writing then I'm sure as time goes on you will get the hang of it, I would suggest getting a editor and mabey running it through spell check software. Either way I can't wait for more.
7464048
Well, that is a very over used, and simple intro; in my opinion and experiences, having an amazing intro can make a or break a story.
7490116 dude. Let's be honest here. Almost everything is considered a cleíche at this point.
7490493
when is the next chapter coming out?
the plural of succubus is not succubuses it's succubi.
the legacy
if this was a tv show this would be the theme song
will their be a new chapter befor christmas?
Please write more!
Love the story keep up the amazing great story
anymore?
Holy shit, that was enjoyable to read.