After a depressing start to Hearts and Hooves day, Mr. Cake is given the perfect gift! A potion that will turn him into whatever fantasy his wife has! He never would have guessed she'd be curious about mares!
Horses are one of the few placental mammals in which males don't have nipples. Might wanna change it and emphasise just how 'foreign' a feeling it truly is.
You portray their extra-sweet love well. You did write yourself some slack with the potion's mental nudges. The tension between the surprise and the love works.
It could use a spellcheck, though.
Corrections offered without malice.
suppose to go!
supposed to go!
thought more then that
than
sugerplum
sugarplum
embracing this Angel Cake roll
role
a pressure in her dick that might caused a slight sense of butterfly’s in his tum
might cause butterflies
We’re not done year darling.
done yet, darling.
Equestrian world series!
Equestrian World Series!
but she
has two spaces
Looks like their sex lives from now on was about to get a lot more interesting.
Looked like their sex lives from now on were about to get a lot more interesting.
You know whats funny. I read this a long ass time ago and coming back to it a couple weeks after perfect pear came out, I find it funny that cup cake had her husband look like pear butter. Obviously not intentional on your part but is funny to think about none the less
Horses are one of the few placental mammals in which males don't have nipples. Might wanna change it and emphasise just how 'foreign' a feeling it truly is.
That said not a bad effort!
Nice. But you keep spelling it "orgasim". It's "orgasm", there's no "i".
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Fixed. Weird my spell check didn't catch that.
You portray their extra-sweet love well. You did write yourself some slack with the potion's mental nudges. The tension between the surprise and the love works.
It could use a spellcheck, though.
Corrections offered without malice.
supposed to go!
than
sugarplum
role
might cause
butterflies
done yet, darling.
Equestrian World Series!
has two spaces
Looked like their sex lives from now on were about to get a lot more interesting.
You know whats funny. I read this a long ass time ago and coming back to it a couple weeks after perfect pear came out, I find it funny that cup cake had her husband look like pear butter. Obviously not intentional on your part but is funny to think about none the less
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It is. It'd be funny if I tried to incorporate that into a sequel. If she was always bi, I could see her being attracted to her best friend.
Given what people seem to want for the sequel though, I can't say one will come. :/
This was a epically cute and spicy chapter. I hope they make a herd.