Some things I've noticed: "she she" and "to flash let him see her panties" (haven't read the whole thing yet, way too hot for a single sitting).

Also, and I'm surprised to ask, at least from what I remember last chapter... does Shy see Angel as an actual bunny? (Again, only read a quarter of the chapter, so I'm not sure if this will be clear down the line)

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Fixed both of these! Thanks for spotting them.

As for Angel's appearance, I forget if I already mentioned these but he's just meant to be a smol, cute male. I like leaving the species and terms vague where I can so that people can imprint humans or anthros on the text where they prefer. It can be confusing at times, you're right.

Fan-fucking-tastic.

Okay, some more things I noticed:
"His teeth gnawed gnawed and nudged her surprisingly gently" Not sure if gnawed was supposed to be twice or not.
"her bust was being used to provide something eye candy for a non-female, something for him to stare at" Something eye candy, eh?
"splosh, It was" My inner grammer Nazi wouldn't shut up.

And again, four ultrabusty babes, but no titjobs.

I do have to mention (and I hope I'm right with this...), you are one sly writer. I mean, going on and on about how Shy thinks Angel is doing nothing wrong or naughty at all (especially weird if this continues on the previous chapter, where I already stated my mind on Shy's... special fetish), and then suddenly drop stuff like this:

She was just about to turn and begin sloshing her way out of the tub, when she saw Fluttershy smiling a secret little smile that, under these circumstances, seemed to have dire connotations indeed. Trixie froze like a deer in headlights as Fluttershy giggled, coiling a finger in her pink hair. The levity the full-figured animal-lover was treating the whole situation with was enough to make Trixie's blood run cold.
"But we haven't even washed each other's backs yet!" Fluttershy purred, [...] Of course, Trixie knew as well as anyone else here that it was impossible for empty-headed Fluttershy to have planned any of this, no matter how suspicious her actions seemed. And yet that just made it all the worse! How did you even begin to explain to such an unconsciously perfect train-puller that her actions were sacrificing every pussy in sight on the altar of an insatiable, and fantastically selfish, meaty cock!

I think I can explain... Shy had this all planned from the start, and was in control of pretty much the majority of what happened (or is at least my take). Magnificient bastard indeed, and I'm not even sure who I'm referring to.

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Ohhh, thanks so much for getting all of those, I've fixed them up in the text now. I had two editors go over it, but I know little things slip through here and there.

And yes, you pretty much hit the nail on the head as far as Fluttershy's subtle involvement goes. In this chapter, she was basically meant to be the ultimate enabler. The concept of a girlfriend doing all the work for her boy - leading him to other pussies - is one I super-duper like and would love to write more often.

Very hot, good job!

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That's pretty flattering, coming from you! Thanks so much~

Well, that was super hot and I absolutely love your ditzy, air-headed Fluttershy. I am suspicious though, whenever she was defending Angel, did she really believe he was actually well behaved and innocent or was she fully aware of what he was doing and simply saw no fault in it?

Although, I also like the idea of Fluttershy being a bit more devious than dumb and taking a more proactive role in steering the others to debauchery than she let on. Either way, this was a fun chapter and I'd love to see more.