inb4 Twilight gets a copy of the recording.

6879835 I agree with this

Sweet merciful Celestia, this needs so much more love and reading. Carry on; I'll be watching.

Dammit, I think I'm gay now

hope to see more

6879835 Hmm... good thinking...

6880761 Thanks!

6881320 Your welcome! At the same time, I am also very, very sorry

6881483 Oh, there will be plenty more where that came from!

>inb4 the mindless Flash Sentry downvoting --

-- oh, wait.

I'm not one of them. Sharing is hot, and (except for a few uses of the phrase "slimy appendage" to describe a penis, which is ... ew?) none of the language here broke me out of the story. Props for the voyeur scenes.

6885210 I'm not sure what you mean about the "slimy appendage" thing. I don't believe I used it to describe a penis, only a tongue. Other than that, thanks for the compliment!

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Oop, you're right; I think I just got confused with the first reference of it sharing a sentence with a reference to the "mighty obelisk of stallion meat".

Personally, "slimy" is not a word I find even slightly sexy, but that's the euphemism problem all over again. Similarly, if you're trying to describe a vagina, "pussy" will be a turnoff to some readers, and "cunt" will turn off others, and "love tunnel" will turn off a third set. You just can't please everyone.

Shining’s cock lurched as his eyes locked in on the space between the guard’s spread thighs, getting his first up-close and personal look at another stallion’s junk. Flash’s half-erect stallionhood sat against his thigh, gravity pulling the meaty member down even as it slowly filled with blood with each second that went by. Just like his balls, the sheath and the base of the shaft were brown, but from just below the medial ring up it gradually changed to a more pinkish color that made Shining’s mouth water with lust. The entire thing was a good size, not as big as his own but still slightly above average. At least, Shining assumed it was above average, he didn’t have many references to go off of. Either way, the cock before him was, dare he say, beautiful, in its own kind of way.

If Flash is the first cock from another stallion he has a close look at how does Shining know what the average size for an erect cock is?

'I’ve never been rimmed before…'

I would think Cadance would feel "Oh shoot, I never knew he wanted that."
I would imagine Cadance being a highly industrious mare as she would need to be to rule an empire. So she would take this opportunity to also learn and study. Seeing sex from a different perspective and make mental or even physical notes on what she can do to improve herself. It would just be something instinctual from her.

I would think Shining would acknowledge his wife a little more. After all doing this while she is watching would be awkward at least in the beginning.