Nice.. If Sunset ever goes"missing". She may have found Abyssal Shield(My OC).. Cross Fingers in hopes. Great chapter and story all around. Keep it up.
“Applejewel, darling,” Applejewel said, as she was sitting on the desk reading a fashion magazine.
Right so that, 3 of the group changed, Spike, AJ, and Sunset. Great.
“Making them new outfits of course.”
Of course.
“Geeze, like, don’t tell me you forgot your sister, Barb,” Barb said, raising her hands over her head, causing her breasts to jiggle. She then looked with worry as she said, “You sure you’re okay?”
So that's what we're going with.
Barb started to cry a bit, as she looked at Twilight and said, “Sis, wha-at’s hap-ppen-ned to-o me?” Twilight, who was also crying, looked at Barb and said, “I don’t know what’s happening to everyone, but I’m here for you.”
Daaw...
Barb was shocked. That wasn’t what she was expecting. Barb chuckled weakly as she said, “Didn’t expect that, but it makes sense now... At least you don’t need to let me out to go to the bathroom any more.”
*chuckle* I guess so.
Pinkie looked at everyone, smiling, and said, “We really needed that laugh.”
Agreed.
cup breast
BreastS. Unless she only has one like Amazons in Greek mythos.
Tennis smirked as she said, “So, you have so porno, huh?”
soME.
Tennis looked at her for a moment before she gave her a gentle smile, a wink, and said, “Tell everyone what? I don’t know anything.”
Really is the small things.
Fluttershy blushed but smiled as her friend said that, unaware of what would happen next.
Oh boy.
Also could anyone give me advice on writing a sex scene. Those are not my forte.
advise on the sex scenes. you really want to go into description on how it feels. is it moist? is it warm? is stress being relieved from the character? are the getting worked up during the motions? did the climax slowly approach on them or was it sudden for one or both? and the climax of the sex should be a well... climax. have at least one paragraph dedicated to that part and never let it be one line. have their also be an afterglow to the sex. have the character reflect on what just happened.
7058458 If you don't want to read it, then don't read it. It's a niche subject, and if it doesn't fit what you like, then that's up to you as to whether you read it or not.*shrug*
7113911 Regreme had surgery and I had to take care of a few things so the next chapter is getting done slowly. So at the latest it'll be done next weekend
7125025 Also, seems the chapter was posted early. He had asked last night if we were done, but my internet got cut off before I could answer him. Dang cox messing things up.-_-'
Nice.. If Sunset ever goes"missing". She may have found Abyssal Shield(My OC).. Cross Fingers in hopes. Great chapter and story all around. Keep it up.
Personally I'm waiting for Rainbow Dash to be turned.
What is the item that on fluttershy head and what she change into?
7037688 That's meant to be a mystery for you readers for the time being.^^
Right so that, 3 of the group changed, Spike, AJ, and Sunset. Great.
Of course.
So that's what we're going with.
Daaw...
*chuckle* I guess so.
Agreed.
BreastS. Unless she only has one like Amazons in Greek mythos.
soME.
Really is the small things.
Oh boy.
Could've fooled me.
so when is the next chapter going to be?
advise on the sex scenes. you really want to go into description on how it feels. is it moist? is it warm? is stress being relieved from the character? are the getting worked up during the motions? did the climax slowly approach on them or was it sudden for one or both? and the climax of the sex should be a well... climax. have at least one paragraph dedicated to that part and never let it be one line. have their also be an afterglow to the sex. have the character reflect on what just happened.
7049156 not foe a week or so
7049382 Thanks for the advice
7049611 when is a next chapter going to be?
7056230 the chapters tend to take a week or two to finish
7056235 ok when?
7056245 Gonna get started on it today so next weekend I would say
7056254 ok.
7056268 I like to take a break after each chapter and working St. Patrick's day was tiring, so an extra day of rest
7058458 Kinda
7058458 If you don't want to read it, then don't read it. It's a niche subject, and if it doesn't fit what you like, then that's up to you as to whether you read it or not.*shrug*
When is the next chapter going to be?
7113911 Regreme had surgery and I had to take care of a few things so the next chapter is getting done slowly. So at the latest it'll be done next weekend
7113955 k
7113984 Just remember, that is if nothing crazy happens but rest assured I'm trying to get this chapter perfect.
7125025 Also, seems the chapter was posted early. He had asked last night if we were done, but my internet got cut off before I could answer him. Dang cox messing things up.-_-'