A changeling born in the post-war Crystal Empire must step outside of her home for the first time. On a mission given to her by her Goddess, Luminous Gem and her partner Clear Skies will go on an adventure through the Northern Equestrian Wasteland.
Two things. One, this story sounds great, but what the heck is a 'crystal rifle'? Is it a laser weapon or is it a lead-based rifle the fires enchanted rounds like a zebra rifle? And two, I'm totally up for being your editor! I got some experience working with this kind of stuff and I can spot plenty of errors when reading. The stories good, don't let those dislikes get you down!
6579536 The explanation of the Crystal Rifle shall come soon, which should have come earlier but the next chapter or the one after that shall come with the explanation. And I'd love for you to become my editor, consider yourself signed up, amigo! I hope we have a productive relationship here.
6569787 FoE's hard enough to write well as it is, Bro(ny). Editor is best pony.
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I think I will take your advice then.
Two things. One, this story sounds great, but what the heck is a 'crystal rifle'? Is it a laser weapon or is it a lead-based rifle the fires enchanted rounds like a zebra rifle? And two, I'm totally up for being your editor! I got some experience working with this kind of stuff and I can spot plenty of errors when reading. The stories good, don't let those dislikes get you down!
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The explanation of the Crystal Rifle shall come soon, which should have come earlier but the next chapter or the one after that shall come with the explanation.
And I'd love for you to become my editor, consider yourself signed up, amigo! I hope we have a productive relationship here.
6579848 Great! Can't wait to help another story get off the ground