Good first part, lets see what the next chapters are like. Not too many errors, this is the one that stuck out for me the most though.
Ooh yeah, I am so happy that you are alive, because a normal human wouldn't be able to lie like this and not feel that mush "much" pain. Of course it hurts like fuck, but you don't pass out like the others. NOW let us begin'' he said in a crazy tone, before he ran of giggling.
I just started reading this, and I saw a semi-error. "The Great War" was actually the name given to World War I before it was given the latter title. I'll edit this comment for any other errors I see.
Edit: "...every living being a test subjects or just another joy to kill." "...every living being is a test subject or just another joy to kill."
"It has been months since i was one of their toys..." Capitalize the "I."
"The once who saw this happen..." "The one who saw this happen..."
Okay, I'm giving up. I'd need to go through the whole chapter to fix the grammar errors. The story is nice, though it has a lot of grammatical errors.
Good first part, lets see what the next chapters are like. Not too many errors, this is the one that stuck out for me the most though.
Ooh yeah, I am so happy that you are alive, because a normal human wouldn't be able to lie like this and not feel that mush "much" pain. Of course it hurts like fuck, but you don't pass out like the others. NOW let us begin'' he said in a crazy tone, before he ran of giggling.
Interesting
Sad...The human race gone...
I like death.
dafuq did i just read
I just started reading this, and I saw a semi-error. "The Great War" was actually the name given to World War I before it was given the latter title. I'll edit this comment for any other errors I see.
Edit: "...every living being a test subjects or just another joy to kill."
"...every living being is a test subject or just another joy to kill."
"It has been months since i was one of their toys..."
Capitalize the "I."
"The once who saw this happen..."
"The one who saw this happen..."
Okay, I'm giving up. I'd need to go through the whole chapter to fix the grammar errors. The story is nice, though it has a lot of grammatical errors.
WHAT a species that is darker, more evil and malicious that humans?
I didn't think it was possible