A Marine Staff Sergeant and his squad go to Pre-War Equestria and meet the Mane Six. How will they react to a world on the brink of war? But more importantly, how will they react to it's aftermath?
6488028 not entirely, most people wouldn't mind a cameo or something like that. Depending on how you write it, it could be okay. But I won't make serious judgements till we get there.
6493652 Anytime, though the time difference is a bitch. I live clear across the world. Okinawa to be precise, so anytime. I check my shit every other day or so
Okay, problem number one, average human life span is a century, where as record holders are in the 110 year range. Problem number two, the prologue feels like it should be the description, with the majority of the first two chapters being the prologue. Problem number three, force recon ideally gets new gear and first dibs on fresh guns. Problem number four, force recon is specialist already, tacking SOC on top of that is like saying they are double specialist in whatever they specialize in. Problem number five, should of left the ponies out until they wound up in Equestria, because otherwise it's excess cluttering information. Problem number six, there isn't more to read yet. This has potential, so I am going to wait for the next bit of story.
6487909 Is it a bad idea, in your opinion?
6488028 not entirely, most people wouldn't mind a cameo or something like that. Depending on how you write it, it could be okay. But I won't make serious judgements till we get there.
6490068 I apologize, I will attempt to make things more like the real thing in future chapters
6490393
If you need help, shit I'll give pointers, being a marine myself, but I also don't know jack shit about recon.
6493601 I'd be honored. Thank you for your service and sacrifice! I'm planning on joining the Marine Corps myself when I graduate from high school.
6493628
Good luck man.
6493630 When can I message you? I usually write after school around six or seven.
6493652
Anytime, though the time difference is a bitch. I live clear across the world. Okinawa to be precise, so anytime. I check my shit every other day or so
6493795 Do you have skype or Facebook? I can do both. Plus we can discuss more about Marine conduct and lifestyle.
6495377
Just PM me here
Okay, problem number one, average human life span is a century, where as record holders are in the 110 year range. Problem number two, the prologue feels like it should be the description, with the majority of the first two chapters being the prologue. Problem number three, force recon ideally gets new gear and first dibs on fresh guns. Problem number four, force recon is specialist already, tacking SOC on top of that is like saying they are double specialist in whatever they specialize in. Problem number five, should of left the ponies out until they wound up in Equestria, because otherwise it's excess cluttering information. Problem number six, there isn't more to read yet. This has potential, so I am going to wait for the next bit of story.