Ooh it's like the book of Eli at the end I'm intrigued not the steryotypical romance with pony as most human stories imglols.com/wp-content/main/2012_03/exquisite-cat-is-exquisite.jpg You get something better than a skier 'stache Good luck but put the translations below the line of text Favorite and track and all that shit
this is probably a little late for this, but you do realize that "Cain/SCP-073" is actually the Same Cain that appears in the bible? One of the first sons of Atom and Eve i think, killed his brother Able (who is also an SCP but i cant be bothered to look it up just now.)
Oh and forgive me if you answer this in your story at some point but What happened to SCP-001? The immovable, unstoppable, invulnerable, Angle thing that guards the garden of Eden? yeah that, what happened?
I dont know why but its kind of awesome when people use religious symbolism in fiction, im not even a religious man and it feels cool for some reason.
1000964 It's a wiki website/story universe. The SCP website is set up to be a wiki of all the dangerous objects contained by the mythical SCP foundation. It's a very very very nerdy place. Each SCP item is cataloged and detailed in a very military exactness sorta way. The challenge to fiction wirters is to create an interesting story in the format of a supposedly dry factual description.
A/N: I wanted to do something like this for a while, but i am currently working on another story at the moment. So here it is! I hope that everyone gives it a chance to grow while i work on this and my other story Dark Space. Please Review and rate.
I know the story hasn't technically started yet, but please capitalize those I's.
The beings of this world was in dire danger from the past.
Should be were, not was.
He felt his body shutting down. Soon he will be nothing more than dust, and that is all he truly wanted.
You switched between past and present tense there. Try changing "will" to "would" Too many grammar errors too early in the story for me to continue reading this. Three errors like this in the first four paragraphs is too much for me.
The first Arabic text said "To learn they are destroyed by this past is a sin against all that is good." The translation at the end says something different, you might want to correct that.
I'm curious as to what could be strong enough to kill Cain. He's effectively immortal, having lived for who the hell knows how long. Honestly, I'd be more scared of what could possibly kill Cain than failing containment areas.
On another note, the SCP listings at the end don't carry any real weight to them. It took me a moment to recognize Cain's designation, but the Bookkeeper took a little more. I'm pretty knowledgeable about a good chunk of SCP lore, and this threw me for a loop. Those with no clues about SCP lore will have no idea about what is going on.
Ooh it's like the book of Eli at the end I'm intrigued not the steryotypical romance with pony as most human stories
imglols.com/wp-content/main/2012_03/exquisite-cat-is-exquisite.jpg
You get something better than a skier 'stache
Good luck but put the translations below the line of text
Favorite and track and all that shit
I love reading things in the SCP archive, and I love reading pony fanfics, so I have a pretty good feeling about this!
Damn it Cain, this is why we can't have nice things.
One little nitpick: The plural of 'hero' is 'heroes'.
Interesting, but is SCP like a show or something? An explanation would be great.
SCP-073 should have an object class of "Euclid / Neutralized" according to SCP protocol. Just for that extra flavor.
this is probably a little late for this, but you do realize that "Cain/SCP-073" is actually the Same Cain that appears in the bible? One of the first sons of Atom and Eve i think, killed his brother Able (who is also an SCP but i cant be bothered to look it up just now.)
Oh and forgive me if you answer this in your story at some point but What happened to SCP-001?
The immovable, unstoppable, invulnerable, Angle thing that guards the garden of Eden? yeah that, what happened?
I dont know why but its kind of awesome when people use religious symbolism in fiction, im not even a religious man and it feels cool for some reason.
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I'm also late at this, but if the ponies found SCP-001 guarding a random location, that would be so fucking awesome!
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1000964 It's a wiki website/story universe. The SCP website is set up to be a wiki of all the dangerous objects contained by the mythical SCP foundation. It's a very very very nerdy place. Each SCP item is cataloged and detailed in a very military exactness sorta way. The challenge to fiction wirters is to create an interesting story in the format of a supposedly dry factual description.
I know the story hasn't technically started yet, but please capitalize those I's.
Should be were, not was.
You switched between past and present tense there. Try changing "will" to "would"
Too many grammar errors too early in the story for me to continue reading this. Three errors like this in the first four paragraphs is too much for me.
The first Arabic text said "To learn they are destroyed by this past is a sin against all that is good." The translation at the end says something different, you might want to correct that.
I'm curious as to what could be strong enough to kill Cain. He's effectively immortal, having lived for who the hell knows how long. Honestly, I'd be more scared of what could possibly kill Cain than failing containment areas.
On another note, the SCP listings at the end don't carry any real weight to them. It took me a moment to recognize Cain's designation, but the Bookkeeper took a little more. I'm pretty knowledgeable about a good chunk of SCP lore, and this threw me for a loop. Those with no clues about SCP lore will have no idea about what is going on.
2336826: If I had to guess, I bet it was 682 who killed Cain, or at least mortally wounded him.
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NOT CAIN ;-;
no not cain.