....I will admit, I am a tad bit extremely confused. There's no real point in this chapter being there since it only seems to retell the story so far. It's mostly just things we know already happened. There's one or two things that fill the gaps but... Meh.
That.... Was.... Awesome from what I'm seeing, I would think the conclusion is nigh. Hope to see it soon, as well as another project from you just because I find that you're an awesome story teller.
656610 Thanks a lot! i really appreciate that! I'm not sure if i'll have another story any time soon however... though i DO want to write one, i really REALLY enjoyed the writing of this. My problem is that frankly, i do not have the ideas to create a good story in most cases, i need an inspiration that speaks to me, and those are very often few and far between Certianly i am no good at coming up with some of the background lore that stories like Eternal and The Empty Room have that i really enjoyed, despite my desire to be able to write something like that.
This is only my second storywriting adventure, the first was a fapfic i poste in sofurry based in the Portal universe, it was nothing but 20 pages of smut though
662182 Thank you! I'm honored! I'm actually in the middle of writing the next chapter right now, I think this is going to end up as a bit of an extra chapter, more than I had originally anticipated, but that is good, i wanted it to be longer!
662271 As I think I have demonstrated, please don't let how dark the story is deter you from writing it. If it is a story you want to write, bring it to life and share it with us. I get the warm fuzzy feeling inside thinking that I was able to help inspire another author to write And I hope to see your work soon!
662326 I feel I'm always bad at helping others with stuff, but I will give it a try if you want! And give you what input I can to help you get started. Getting started is always the toughest part.
More power poured from Twilight’s horn, “I said STOP IT!” And suddenly the shield exploded forwards, the powerful force catching the pegasus solidly and flinging him away. Twilight watched in horror however as Dozer shot through the air and slammed hard into a brick building, the sharp sounds of bones breaking heard as Dozer slumped to the ground.
....I will admit, I am a tad bit extremely confused. There's no real point in this chapter being there since it only seems to retell the story so far. It's mostly just things we know already happened. There's one or two things that fill the gaps but... Meh.
656012 Well as i said at the end, it was rather filler :) i'll get to writing the real next chapter tomorrow
I liked it. I think this is a good chapter to bring the reading away from the Climax toward the end of this beautiful story.
Ahikam, you are doing great.
That.... Was.... Awesome from what I'm seeing, I would think the conclusion is nigh. Hope to see it soon, as well as another project from you just because I find that you're an awesome story teller.
656610 Thanks a lot! i really appreciate that! I'm not sure if i'll have another story any time soon however... though i DO want to write one, i really REALLY enjoyed the writing of this. My problem is that frankly, i do not have the ideas to create a good story in most cases, i need an inspiration that speaks to me, and those are very often few and far between Certianly i am no good at coming up with some of the background lore that stories like Eternal and The Empty Room have that i really enjoyed, despite my desire to be able to write something like that.
This is only my second storywriting adventure, the first was a fapfic i poste in sofurry based in the Portal universe, it was nothing but 20 pages of smut though
MOOOOOOOORE!!!!
And honestly Twilight, there's no justification in attacking an injured 5 year old
Well yours was the story that finally made me make an account so I could comment!
I have to say great job and I cant wait for the next chapter!
662182 Thank you! I'm honored! I'm actually in the middle of writing the next chapter right now, I think this is going to end up as a bit of an extra chapter, more than I had originally anticipated, but that is good, i wanted it to be longer!
Awesome! I'm way excited for it! You are making me want to start writing a story I have had brewing in my mind for a bit now.
Although it will be a tad dark...
662271 As I think I have demonstrated, please don't let how dark the story is deter you from writing it. If it is a story you want to write, bring it to life and share it with us. I get the warm fuzzy feeling inside thinking that I was able to help inspire another author to write And I hope to see your work soon!
662294 Thanks! I may just have to send you PM later with some thoughts if you would not mind helping me start something!
662326 I feel I'm always bad at helping others with stuff, but I will give it a try if you want! And give you what input I can to help you get started. Getting started is always the toughest part.
Beautiful chapter imho. Filled in the blanks. I wanted and needed those SadPorn money shots. Twilight Sparkle gives birth to a crackbaby. Nice.
The red is supposed to be mane, right?
So very, very satisfying....