Great fight scene.

6009762 Thanks!

I admit the fight scenes are not bad, right now i can actually believe it easier how strong they are, or he.

For what I can see he has a short temper, its kinds of worries me because that is not the same thing that made 'Sombra' go into a rampage?…and also attract Windigoes? I just hope he is still there, because how things are going, he will soon lost his own body.

Also 'coughing blood' and having injuries all over them, this test isn't going a bit overboard already?
I imagine Celly will had stop it before someone ends up death

6009893 She knows Luna is not at full strength. Its not till the very end that Luna even goes full power.

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ah, and all the wounds will banish I suppose

If any of the readers have spare time, could you give me some ways to improve the story? Its doing very well, as you can see from the like/dislike ratio. I want to keep it that way, but I want to know what you, the readers, think I should implement into the story to make it better.

6013589 have David and Luna become a love interest and have them sire the ultrAlicorn.

6018569 I will consider this, but romance will most likely not happen for some time.

6018678 So the romance tag won't happen for a while then. Also, first how does he know about MLP secondly wasn't his primary focus to get the princesses to send him back? Why then is he listening to a voice in his head telling him not too?