Love it! I am waiting for the next chapters bro :D
P.S. Chapter two, I believe it is 'foals' not 'fouls'... or actually they are kind of fouls... getting inside the Everfree for their cutie-marks... those three are the spaws of tartarus! I swear! nothing can be that cute and chaotic!.
P.S.S. Or your character calls foals, fouls cause... he knows shit about equines *shrug*
Yeah, yeah I like it, and from all the excitement it happen its normal he is tired and want a little power nap, I imagine AJ will tell Twilight about a 5 alicorn while he sleep and ask if she knows anything about it. Anyway I hope the next chapter come up soon
P.S: Does he has a cutie mark? because if he doesn't AJ should had notices that
The lizard brought its head down, trying to bite me. Big mistake. When my hooves connected, dark grey electric shot out in a ring around the area my hooves made contact. The sickening sound of breaking bone filled the air as the 3 headed lizard shot back, breaking the sound barrier.
I am not sure if he has the normal Alicorn strength right there, but i hope he doesn´t get to OP.
Till now the story is okay, i hope yout don´t rush it in later chapters.
Love it! I am waiting for the next chapters bro :D
P.S. Chapter two, I believe it is 'foals' not 'fouls'... or actually they are kind of fouls... getting inside the Everfree for their cutie-marks... those three are the spaws of tartarus! I swear! nothing can be that cute and chaotic!.
P.S.S. Or your character calls foals, fouls cause... he knows shit about equines *shrug*
5988805 Thanks for pointing that out.
Yeah, yeah I like it, and from all the excitement it happen its normal he is tired and want a little power nap, I imagine AJ will tell Twilight about a 5 alicorn while he sleep and ask if she knows anything about it. Anyway I hope the next chapter come up soon
P.S: Does he has a cutie mark? because if he doesn't AJ should had notices that
5988979 Yes, but David didn't notice it
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I see, so that is up for next chapter then? also he is most likely be the god thunder now right?
5989535 Something like that, but not exactly
5989575
I see, well anyway I can't wait to read more, and know if alicorn made him royal immediately or would he became the first alicorn commoner.
Oh and when the 'ghost limp' effect kicks in and made him form a human body around him by mistake when his magic act up
I love the story, hope to get more soon!
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5989575 MOAR!!!
5991438 thanks!
5990334 Oh, thanks for pointing out the cutie mark thing, I changed the story pic, so now he has one. Thanks!
5991589 *Holds ears* Jesus! Are you the dragon born to?
5992339 FUS RO DA!!!!!!
5990666 Thanks!
I am not sure if he has the normal Alicorn strength right there, but i hope he doesn´t get to OP.
Till now the story is okay, i hope yout don´t rush it in later chapters.