Pain
Twilight Sparkle grinned to herself, pausing in her studies for a mere moment. The smell of a fresh, brand new book wafted up, and she deeply inhaled, burying her nose in the book. Spike watched her, giving her a caring smile only a brother could share. And they were as close, if not closer, than brother and sister. Twilight removed her nose from the book, and read through the spell a final time. It was a quite simple spell, at least for her. Any normal pony would spend days mastering it, but she was quite certain she had mastered the spell. She scrunched her eyes shut, focusing anxiously, and turned to the wilting flower in the window sill. The sun shined through the window, making her eyelids look red as she looked through them, but she tuned it out and began the spell. Her horn sputtered and sparked, before finally igniting into a pale magenta glow. She leaned her head forward slightly, grunting with effort, and her horn began sparking rhythmically. Suddenly, a burst of pale magenta light streamed from her horn and hit the flower, encompassing it. The glow slowly morphed into a golden-green, and the flower slowly stood back up, it's leaves becoming a healthy green and the brown, curled petals turned a vibrant orange. The light stopped, returning to her horn, and she collapsed onto her wooden floor, drained from energy. Spike let out a gasp, jumping down from the ladder he was climbing. He ran over to her, as fast as his small, scaled legs could carry him, and placed a clawed finger on her throat, searching for a pulse. He found it, slightly weak, and began worrying. He ran to her bed, grabbing her Starswirl the Bearded throw and ran back to her, setting it carefully on her. He then ran to her quills and scrolls, grabbing a smaller scroll and beginning to write.
"Dear Princess Celestia," he spoke aloud as he worked, writing as fast as he could while making it legible. "Twilight Sparkle collapsed while doing a-" he stopped, setting the quill down. What spell was she doing? He ran over to the spell book, which thankfully remained on the same page, and scanned it. There were two spells, a Rejuvenation spell and a Growth spell. It could be either, based on the descriptions. Groaning to himself, and still worried, he darted back to the quill, lifting it in his purple hands. He scratched out the 'a' and continued. "While doing either the Rejuvenation spell or a Growth spell. It was successful, she cast it on a flower, but now she has a weak pulse and seems to be asleep or something. What should I do?" He rolled the scroll up hurriedly, leaving it in an messy cylinder, then tied it with a red ribbon. Blowing green fire from his mouth, the scroll disappeared, and he grinned satisfactorily. Turning back to Twilight, he began searching for any bruises on her. She seemed to be free of any significant cuts or bruises, save a large bump swelling on the side of her head where she had fallen. He ran to the kitchen, grabbing a bag and filling it with ice. He wrapped it in a relatively thin towel, then brought it back out to the main room. Or at least, he would've if he hadn't started choking. He twitched, then burped, grabbing his stomach as the letter spewed from his mouth. Grabbing it hurriedly, he unfurled it, his eyes scanning over it as fast as he could read.
Dear Spike,
Either spell can be quite harmful to a young unicorn-where did she get the book? However, if she can do this spell successfully, it is time. I will be there promptly, please notify your friends to meet me at your home immediately if not sooner. Remind them this is of utter importance, and by the Princess' decree. Best of luck, and do be safe. Twilight is in no danger, but you must keep an eye on her. Ask her beloved pet, Owlysious is it, to keep an eye on her while you are gone.
Princess Luna
Princess Luna? He double-checked to be sure, then nodded. Running out of his home, his feet pounded the dirt road as he ran to Fluttershy's cottage. Other ponies turned and stared as he ran, going at a speed that was similar to Rainbow Dash's average flying speed. He finally arrived, taking far longer than he would've liked, and banged on the door, the sound echoing through her home. He was in the middle of his eleventh knock when the door was opened, and Fluttershy stepped out cautiously, glancing back and forth. She finally looked down, and saw him panting, her eyes filling with worry.
"What's wrong Spike? Are you okay? Is Twilight okay? Are we okay?" She continued listing things until he raised a claw, still gasping from the run over.
"Princess... Luna... Library... Need others..." He gasped, only able to utter small phrases, but she understood, and carefully lifting him on her back, she began flying at an incredible speed toward Sweet Apple Acres. Though she was close to the ground, she was much faster than Spike could've been at the time, and she was there in what seemed like moments. Applejack and Rainbow Dash were arguing near the gate, and Spike hopped off, speed walking towards them. The two mares stopped when they saw him, their eyes questioning why he and Fluttershy were there.
"Princess Luna needs you guys at the Library now! Rainbow Dash, can you get Rarity and Pinkie? We'll meet you back at the Library!"
"Of course! I'll be there as fast as I can!" Even Rainbow Dash knew better than to question a princess, and she darted off, blowing dust into Applejack's mane.
"Le's go sugarcube!" Exclaimed Applejack, flipping Spike up onto her back and breaking into an urgent gallop towards the Library. Fluttershy followed, matching Applejack step for step, and they burst into the Library within moments. When Fluttershy spotted Twilight Sparkle, she began heading towards her, but Spike grabbed her tail to stop her.
"Let her be. The Princess should be here any moment." Fluttershy nodded slowly, whimpering quietly at having to leave her friend laying on the ground. They slowly walked towards her, when they heard trumpet fanfare. Turning simultaneously in a near comical fashion, they bowed to the ground, their noses scraping the wood, as Princess Luna walked in.
"Rise, Twilight's friends," she said, her voice much quieter than it used to be. Just at that moment, Rainbow Dash burst in, followed by Rarity and Pinkie Pie (bouncing the whole way). They bowed as well, but Princess Luna waved her hoof to raise the three, and they shot up to attention. "You can relax, everypony." Pinkie immediately did so, her spine relaxing.
"If you don't mind me askin', what's going on, Princess?" Applejack's voice made Rarity cringe, but Princess Luna didn't seem to mind.
"Please, to start, call me Luna. Secondly, it's a very long story that I will explain to you after we get your dear friend to the hospital. For now, be content with the fact that she cast a spell far too strenuous for her mortal being." Her friends nodded, and Luna carefully lifted Twilight into the air, parading out from the Library. Once outside, two guards stepped forward to assist her, but she waved them away, gesturing to the five ponies marching around her, their faces set in a stony determination. Their hooves stepped in time through the cobblestone town square, and ponies gathered in the side streets to stare. The Cutie Mark Crusaders' jaws were wide open, staring with eyes the size of dinner plates. Rainbow Dash couldn't help but grin slightly at being part of such an impressive legion, and as she led the way through the town, ponies gasped at them. Flipping her hair, she ignored them, her eyes focused on the hospital ahead. As they paraded in, the nurses bowed, but Luna simply waved for them to rise.
"P-Princess Luna, how can we help you?" Nurse Redheart stammered at the sight of the Princess, her cheeks flushing.
"I'd like a standard room, if not one a bit larger. Get your best doctor there on the double as well." The nurse nodded, running off, and Princess Luna carefully set Twilight Sparkle down on the padded bench in the waiting room. The other doctors skirted around them, avoiding eye contact, and the Elements of Harmony stood in a circle around Luna, daring anyone to try and come near. Roughly five minutes later, Nurse Redheart came back, gesturing for them to follow her. She led them up several flights of stairs, and even the Princess walked, afraid to open her wings and cause more of a disturbance. At roughly the third floor, they stopped, and the entire floor had been transformed into one room. Luna set Twilight down on the bleach-white covers, and her friends sat in the nearby chairs. Medical equipment of all sorts stood around the bed, and Fluttershy cowered in the farthest chair, clearly afraid of hospitals among everything else.
"Ah, Princess," smiled the doctor as he walked in, avoiding the bow. "What seems to be the problem?"
"I need your strongest painkillers on standby-I can administer should it be needed. I'd also like my guards here, surrounding the room. Be sure they act indiscreet though, for we cannot handle mass chaos at the time being." The doctor nodded, and pointed to a shelf of IV bags.
"These should contain what you need, and I'll send somepony out to retrieve your guards. Best of luck." He left without saying more, and Princess Luna couldn't help but have the fleeting thought of why he wasn't concerned. Shaking it away, she turned towards Twilight's friends, each wearing different degrees of worry.
"Let me relieve your stress," she sighed, blinking a tear away. "Twilight Sparkle is going to go through intense pain here in moments. You must remember it is for the best. You cannot help her, so if you cannot handle it, wait elsewhere. This is a long story to tell, but I trust you have the time. It all started seventeen years ago. As you all know, Twilight Sparkle is fifteen. Her birthday is today, when she shall turn sixteen. At precisely 5:27, ten minutes from now, Twilight will be sixteen. You all know alicorns are immortal, correct? Then you must wonder what happened to our parents. They passed on the crown to my dear sister and us-er, me. Let me educate you on alicorn history quickly.
"Alicorns are indeed immortal. When they are born, however, they are merely unicorns or pegasi. Alicorns are only due to have a single child, always female. After such, they may have other children, but they will not be alicorns; simply ponies. Celestia and I were accidents. Twins, somehow. We were both in control, the only twins in control of the throne ever. You all know I was banished to the moon, and this is correct. But she also banished another pony, a stallion. We became friends, and later, more. Celestia was watching all the time, filled with anger at what we had become. What had bothered Celly became our greatest points, and eventually, I became pregnant.
"Twilight Sparkle was born sixteen years ago today. On the moon. But Tia's anger got the best of her, and she invited me home eagerly. I was astonished, and a little too accepting. She took Twilight on a playdate, leaving her with her father, Moon Catcher. Her current mother is one of my most loyal subjects, caring for Twilight as her own. Anyhow, she banished me back to the moon, so great was her envy. Your loyal leader does have a cruel side indeed. It was then I became Nightmare Moon once again." Luna finally finished her story, and the other ponies in the room had their jaws nearly on the ground, so great was their shock. Rarity was the first to speak.
"So... is Princess Celestia... evil?" She stumbled over the final word, shocked to hear Princess Celestia and Evil in the same sentence.
"No, my friend. She is simply pony. All ponies are overcome with feelings, but she is able to do whatever she wants to relieve them. She regrets it every moment of her life, but she has apologized, and I know as well as she that it was a mistake." The others nodded slowly, comprehending, when Luna glanced up at the clock, followed by Fluttershy looking in the same direction.
"One minute," whispered Fluttershy, Interrupted by a moan. This was followed by several more, and even Pinkie's happy face turned into a frown. Wincing, Luna cast a glance warily at Twilight as though expecting her to explode at any moment. As if on cue, Twilight stirred on the covers. Suddenly, she let out an earsplitting scream. Luna sighed, and her horn glowed as she set a spell on Twilight's bed, surrounding it with a near-transparent bubble.
"What did you do to her?" Cried Pinkie, running towards her friend, just to bounce off.
"This spell will make it much quieter for us, and keep any bacteria from the wounds."
"Wounds?" Inquired Rainbow Dash, just as they heard another muffled scream. Two splits appeared on Twilight's lavender fur, splitting the skin and letting crimson blood gush onto the covers. Fluttershy covered her eyes, turning away, and Rarity scurried over to comfort her. Luna was wincing, every cry of Twilight's causing her to close her eyes tighter. Pinkie Pie came over, patting the Princess on the shoulder awkwardly.
'Oh, it burns. It burns and it strains... why is this happening to me? Why are their tears on my face, and why is there this pain on my shoulders? Why?' Twilight's voice echoed in her mind, and she heard someone screaming. Light shone through her eyelids, and for some reason, she knew not to open them. She twitched and shook, her legs kicking out periodically as the pain in her shoulders increased.
Twilight's wings were beginning to form, small nubs slowly poking out from her shoulders, nearly closing off the wounds. However, just as the nubs closed off, they split open again, growing. Rainbow Dash couldn't believe she was seeing wings grow so fast, and Rarity fainted, Fluttershy now comforting her. Luna had curled onto the floor, whimpering. She then stood up, her hooves clacking against the tile floor as she walked towards Twilight, driven by some unseen force. She leaned over Twilight, opening her eyes so she could see her daughter. Pausing for a moment to take in the beauty of her daughter, a tear fell from her cheek, bringing her back to reality. Leaning over Twilight Sparkle, she began licking the wounds, just as Twilight began adding 'Mommy!' to her cries of pain. Licking carefully, she tended to the open surfaces of the wounds, and Twilight began settling, now moaning in half-pain and half-pleasure. As Twilight fell asleep, Luna backed away, turning to the others.
"She'll take 24 hours before her wings are completely grown. How many of you will stay here with her?" All five of them raised their hooves through some unspoken agreement, and Luna nodded. Turning to the staircase, she yelled down them in the Royal Canterlot Voice. "WE ARE REQUIRING FIVE NORMAL BEDS AND ONE ROYAL SIZED ONE NOW!" Within moments, the beds were there, and the others collapsed onto them, ignoring each other as they fell asleep. Luna refused to do so, and turned back to her daughter, watching her through caring eyes and waiting for her time to raise the moon.
The time flew by, and while the others slept, Princess Luna stood over her blood-stained daughter, licking away the wounds so Twilight could sleep. Twilight's horn was slowly glowing, now nearing roughly three-quarters the length of Luna's horn, where it would stay until Twilight gained her full power. Luna flashed back to when she had emerged from her Nightmare form, when she had been weak, and saw Twilight in her place. Smiling at the resemblance, she turned back to Twilight, smiling at how the setting sun's rays hit her. Wait. Setting sun? She ran to the large window on the far wall, pushing it open and flying up to the roof. Sitting as though in her throne, she closed her eyes, connecting with the moon. She slowly led it up, trailing it through the sky, when she felt its power being tugged from her. Good old Tia. The moon slowly shrank in size as it crawled through the sky, and she flew back down to Twilight's room, watching her in a finally relaxed pose. The wing were now approaching a schoolfilly's in size, and Luna flared her own wings out in comparison, blotting out the moonlight from the window. Shaking her head, she turned back to Twilight, imagining her the same size as Tia, lifting the sun and moon through the sky. She was beautiful and perfect in every way.
Twilight moaned again, and Luna turned her attention back to licking, her saliva glistening in the wounds before fading in. Alicorns had incredible power after all, this being one of them. She continued licking in her long, exaggerated strokes, feathers now sprouting over the thin skin covering strong muscles and hollow bones. Hollow bones. That's one of the main reason it hurts so much. Your bones are hollowing, emptying themselves into creating the new bones and muscles, the bones turning into a silvery instead of average white. Luna remembered the images of other alicorns going through this, and made a note to have them removed. Blood was not gushing everywhere, and bones were not showing. Of course, this could be because of her healing powers, but she doubted it. More likely was it that history was overly dramatic and graphic, simply for the point of getting attention. That's all anypony wanted after all. Attention from royalty, attention from their peers. Her mind flashed back to when she had been in school, a mere pegasus at the time. No one had known she'd be royalty but herself, and thus treated the others as her subjects. Attention she had gotten, and trouble as well. Even thousands of years ago, detention was boring.
Her mind turned to her past, and she began dozing off, Luna struggling with her eyelids, fighting to keep them open, before they closed heavily, her tongue draped across Twilight's right wing.
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You should probably tag this [alternate universe], for starters. Twilight's parents are clearly shown in the show itself; and you changed Luna's background story. So it's not in the MLP universe we all know, basically.
It seems to be somewhat dark as well; but I don't know if you want to add that tag.
It requires tags, period :l
pm me and I'll prof read it for ya.
Proof readers?
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Definitely [alternate universe].
There were some [sad] elements in it, so that may be a good tag to add.
Perhaps [slice of life] depending on how you go forward.
however all these things are hard to say so early.
But if Luna became NMM the secound time she was send to the moon.
Then why did Celestia sed her there the first time?
If you have to retcon chunks of existing cannon to fit in your story, it's generally not a good thing.
It tends to be jarring, and often invites plot holes if you don't plan things well in advance.
It's usually better to work within established events, but just put a clever spin on them.
Anyone who volunteered to proofread-please do so :) Love the Katniss scene xD
And alternate universe definitely. I'm going to fix Luna's story up a bit, so it's actually logical, or she may conclude it in the next chapter.
Will track but something you may want too fix is the fact that Luna basicly told the mane six that Celestia stole her child before banishing her again and they don't seem to care. You should be clearer on wether Tia is evil or what
cant wait for the next chapter
Ok, the whole information dump seemed a bit rushed. If felt like you were just trying to set things up for your universe quickly so you could get into the action. Think about the other characters, their reactions, and then add them in so it feels more like a story and not a textbook. We get enough of those at school.
That's really the only damper for me in this story. A big damper, I'm not going to lie about that, but one that should be able to be easily corrected.
Sorry about the negative dump. Had to get that out. Howoever, there is quite a bit of potential for this story, and I am pretty curios to see what you do with it. Nice twist making Luna Twilight's mother.
I like the looks of this one.
I know twilight has been made an alicorn in stories before, but I have not seen one were luna is her mother.
well done on bringing a fresh approach the alicorn twi storyline
can't wait for next chapter
I always thought Luna looked more like Twi than Celestia xD And I'm slowly editing CH 1 at the current time being, so the reactions will make more sense and such soon.
I know it's such a clichéd plot idea but I love Twilight becomes an Alicorn fics. This one is on the unique side, though. Tracking.
Don't get me wrong, you've done a nice job, but this just isn't quite my cup of tea.
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not necessarily, it is possible that Luna's short return was simply kept out of the news, as well as her having a child. Just because it shows Twilight's parents does not mean they are her biological parents. there is a difference between difference of the back-story, and the difference of the perception of the back-story.
on an unrelated note, do I detect a reference to Mommy Nearest? I think I do.
This always comes to my mind when reading wing sprouting scenes:
Looking forward to see where you take this story.
Interresting...
For the most part, when we see someone become an Alicorn, it's either overnight or trough sudden changes without the pain of growing the extra limps.
This, however, is different. You make sure to explain just what she goes through...
Though I must admit, I don't really like how Luna is Twilight's mother... That's only minor, what I think is more important is her age.
Lauren herself stated that the Main 6 are in their early adulthood, indicating that their age is around 20-22 years, not 15.
And not to try and belittle you, but who has a dress shop open at the age of 15? Running a farm? Almost a professional Vet?
I really think you should change that small detail, I know that it's Alternate Universe, but still.
1337051 i agree with everything you said here....took the words right out of my mouth....or would this make it fingers??
Luna and Celestia seem a bit OOC and the whole thing feels just a tad rushed. It's a fresh idea, though. I don't think I've seen another fic that has Luna as Twilight's mother.
Luna is definitely a bit out of character here (I doubt she would actually say a phrase like "on the double") but I like the premise.