189077 That's the Wasteland for you. It's fine to be detached from bones,or casualty numbers. Because we simply can't grasp the idea completely. Like when in a war they tell you 2 million people died...that's just too high, too many, that you can't fathom the depth of what really happened. Having it shoved in your face with all the fresh and new bodies is so different. I babble, but I think you got the ideas of that really down. Their reactions to all that was going on was very accurate.
This is a very well written story. The only problem that I have is that there seem to be a number of spelling and/or grammar mistakes. You might want to consider running chapters through a spell checker or pre-readers before posting them. Still a very good story though.
238264 Thank you! Oh and don't worry I'm constantly fixing them. I have a number of pre-readers who are pointing out various errors and mistakes. I publish chapters as I finish them since my pre-readers are authors also. If I were to wait for them to catch up I wouldn't be posting new chapters for months. They have their own stories to deal with, not to mention real life issues. But yes I constantly fix the chapters as soon as the pre-readers are done with them. The chapters I post (plot-wise) will remain unchanged after i fix them. If some changes are made to the plot or story I will be sure to point this out in my blog. Thanks again for reading Mist's story!
Awesome chapter man (^-^)/) Brohoof
Oh DERP!
Forgot to add the footnote.
Fixed it now.
The scenes of the village are very visualizing...very sad. Must have been hard to write. It was still a beautiful chapter.
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Heh yeah it was. Kind of the reason I procrastinated so much on writing it. I'm glad you liked it.
More gruesome things to come though. *sigh*
189077 That's the Wasteland for you. It's fine to be detached from bones,or casualty numbers. Because we simply can't grasp the idea completely. Like when in a war they tell you 2 million people died...that's just too high, too many, that you can't fathom the depth of what really happened. Having it shoved in your face with all the fresh and new bodies is so different. I babble, but I think you got the ideas of that really down. Their reactions to all that was going on was very accurate.
This is a very well written story. The only problem that I have is that there seem to be a number of spelling and/or grammar mistakes. You might want to consider running chapters through a spell checker or pre-readers before posting them. Still a very good story though.
238264
Thank you! Oh and don't worry I'm constantly fixing them. I have a number of pre-readers who are pointing out various errors and mistakes. I publish chapters as I finish them since my pre-readers are authors also. If I were to wait for them to catch up I wouldn't be posting new chapters for months. They have their own stories to deal with, not to mention real life issues. But yes I constantly fix the chapters as soon as the pre-readers are done with them. The chapters I post (plot-wise) will remain unchanged after i fix them. If some changes are made to the plot or story I will be sure to point this out in my blog. Thanks again for reading Mist's story!